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someonenonotyou
2009-05-29, 02:47 PM
Take Two Again!
Here we go again you can't keep a good mediocre comic maker down.

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Nageto004
2009-06-10, 10:46 PM
I like it.:smallsmile:

Cizak
2009-06-11, 04:03 AM
It looks pretty good, but what is a fan comic without the nitpick?

Second to last panel: "Ill" should be "I'll" and "exaclty" should be "exactly".

Green-Shirt Q
2009-06-11, 06:12 AM
Also, use capital letters at the beginning of each sentence. And capitalize the pronoun "I".

That's how us pros do it! :smallcool:

[EDIT] Reading it over again carefully, I see you did that most of the time. I would recommend always doing it.

Fredthefighter
2009-06-11, 06:18 AM
That was pretty good. Except for the grammar mistakes that have already been pointed out. Overall, quite good.

Wreckingrocc
2009-06-11, 10:36 PM
Also, "Opportunity" is spelled with a U; not an E.

I guess I don't really get it, though. It's fairly simple to follow what's going on, but it feels like there's a punchline I should get, or a reason given for allowing an attack of opportunity, or, at the very least, a reason his feet weren't bound.

Speech bubble placement could also be improved.

someonenonotyou
2009-06-12, 10:43 PM
oh thanks guy i have been trying to work on spelling and grammer
any way i havnt got a chance at all to work on it so ill get back to it soon

Salty
2009-06-14, 05:42 PM
Seems pretty good so far! I lol'd. :smallbiggrin:

someonenonotyou
2009-06-21, 10:07 PM
here two more i did while computer was down thans for all the comments and im pretty sure no grammer errors this time.:smallsmile: but please nit pick

Green-Shirt Q
2009-06-22, 07:00 AM
Pretty good development on these bad guys. Nice comics! :smallbiggrin:

Only, I can't really tell what's going on in the first panel of comic 2. And in comic 3 at the top you put "I don't know where i going". The "I" should probably be capital, but even then it doesn't make a lot of sense. :smallconfused:

Hey, YOU said to nit pick! :smalltongue:

Cizak
2009-06-22, 07:21 AM
Only, I can't really tell what's going on in the first panel of comic 2. And in comic 3 at the top you put "I don't know where i going". The "I" should probably be capital, but even then it doesn't make a lot of sense. :smallconfused:

Hey, YOU said to nit pick! :smalltongue:

He's breaking free from the chains,I think?


And yeah, it should be capital and I think it sounds better with "I'm"...

someonenonotyou
2009-06-22, 11:22 AM
thanks i fixed the I'm

foahra
2009-06-23, 09:16 PM
hello whats up with this? hahah


Yeah new comics what you think

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Cizak
2009-06-24, 02:22 AM
foahra: What's your point?:smallconfused:

whenpigsfly
2009-06-25, 10:39 PM
i think its a cool comic

someonenonotyou
2009-07-24, 02:31 PM
Ok here i got the new improved Take two its called
Take Two Again!
Yeah so im starting over due to some technical difficulty, writers block, and this thing i just got called a life. it sucks
yeah so im satring over tearing down every thing the story line the caratuers everything i had planned and just go just make it i have nothing planed nothing set up i have a name and a main charatuer and thats it.
see how thing turn out with no plan all my other plans fails so im just winging it

What do you think!

someonenonotyou
2009-08-03, 09:56 PM
New comic ... not that any of you care:smallsmile:

someonenonotyou
2009-08-07, 12:08 AM
New comic is up oh and i fixed a mistake in the 2ND one so yeah what do ya think

someonenonotyou
2009-08-16, 10:27 PM
New Comic and someone say something anything im so lonley here:smallfrown:

someonenonotyou
2009-08-21, 03:43 PM
Hey check out my banner

AND SOMEONE SAY SOMETHING:smallfrown:

EmeraldPhoenix
2009-08-21, 04:38 PM
Hey check out my banner

AND SOMEONE SAY SOMETHING:smallfrown:

Something.:smalltongue:

Seriously, chill. (Yelling at people for not commenting is MY gig, don't steal it!):smallamused:

I don't really understand the banner. Could you explain it?

someonenonotyou
2009-08-21, 09:29 PM
hey yelling who me i wasnt i just like critcizem :smallsmile:
well dont have much now so i dont know i thought it was kinda funny

someonenonotyou
2009-09-18, 05:48 PM
soo here the new one after many many stupid computer/ inkscape/ internet
/ life / man-eating troll problems

WARNING!!! my spell check is not working so many many spelling errors i know im sorry ill fix em as soon an i know what wrong

someonenonotyou
2009-09-19, 01:28 PM
nother one up! yah!
above warning stills applys

Salty
2009-09-19, 06:57 PM
Not too bad so far. I'll admit that I miss the attack of opportuniy joke from the original, but whatever. I would suggest modifying the characters so they follow a basic universal style. The sister is one of the main annoyances attributed to this. You should at least make her head be a circle; it looks odd. I also think you should change the facial expressions more frequently; it looks a lot sloppier if they look the same in each panel. You did a great job with the arm motions, but they're overshadowed by the faces making them look identical. Also, one last nitpick: the script seems a bit blunt; you should spread the dialogue out a take more time to make one point, instead of having multiple points discussed in one panel. The comic has promise, but I think it needs some improvements before you could get a dedicated readership. :smallbiggrin:

someonenonotyou
2009-10-13, 06:59 PM
first Salty thanks i hope you i did better this time i tried what you said and don't worry about Sara anymore
Second NEW COMIC!

Green-Shirt Q
2009-10-13, 08:22 PM
I'm not sure what just happened in this most recent comic, but I'm a little worried. :smalleek:

Also, I am following this comic. The plot and characters seem pretty interesting. Keep up the good work! :smallwink:

someonenonotyou
2009-10-16, 03:21 PM
New comic up

someonenonotyou
2009-10-27, 05:21 PM
new one up

Nageto004
2009-10-27, 08:04 PM
Ooooo its not just his sister its all manges.

someonenonotyou
2009-10-31, 11:16 AM
New one up!!!
WHOOT!!! number 10 ive made at least twice a far as i thought
so you all what do you think

EDIT: also second page YES!!!:smallbiggrin:

foahra
2009-11-01, 09:12 PM
New one up!!!
WHOOT!!! number 10 ive made at least twice a far as i thought
so you all what do you think

EDIT: also second page YES!!!:smallbiggrin:

oh yay!!! :smallbiggrin: i like ur #10 comic its awesome

someonenonotyou
2009-11-10, 06:37 PM
new one up
gezz this one was difficult me comptuer deteted it twice and the won't let me get on imageshack:smallsigh: so you people better like it :smalltongue:

foahra
2009-11-10, 06:49 PM
new one up
gezz this one was difficult me comptuer deteted it twice and the won't let me get on imageshack:smallsigh: so you people better like it :smalltongue:


nice comic u did a very good job keep up the good work. :smallbiggrin:

Nageto004
2009-11-10, 06:51 PM
No rules but that would mean the world would have no rules and that is like no rules! Jk just had to do that, but this is realy coming along nicely.:smallsmile:

someonenonotyou
2009-11-16, 01:14 PM
New comic
and our first member

someonenonotyou
2009-11-19, 05:49 PM
oops i just rezised my arcive was messed up so fixed

EmeraldPhoenix
2009-11-25, 07:03 PM
Uh...I kind of really want to kick your main character in the balls while screaming swear words.:smalleek:

Is that supposed to happen?:smalleek:

someonenonotyou
2009-12-03, 04:30 PM
Uh...I kind of really want to kick your main character in the balls while screaming swear words.:smalleek:

Is that supposed to happen?:smalleek:

yeah kinda he is a gaint $%&*#[email protected]# On a %*($(#(&$^@ with $(*#^@@%%!^^^$&$#(*$&#(*& sauce

new comic sorry it took forever also note the warning

someonenonotyou
2009-12-07, 04:18 PM
new one up
and take no offense anyone

EmeraldPhoenix
2009-12-07, 04:20 PM
Congrats is spelled with a t, and he repeated the same thing twice.

someonenonotyou
2009-12-07, 04:45 PM
Fixed oh thanks wow i feel like an idoit for not seeing that well thats what copy and paste gets me:smallbiggrin: thanks

Green-Shirt Q
2009-12-07, 05:48 PM
Racism! :smalleek:

I hope this guy gets what's coming to him. :smallmad:

Pretty good comics. I'll be reading this, see?

someonenonotyou
2009-12-08, 02:48 PM
new one wow im supised i got it done so fast

someonenonotyou
2009-12-16, 03:18 PM
new one #16 up

someonenonotyou
2009-12-24, 10:19 AM
17 is up so read

EmeraldPhoenix
2010-01-03, 10:25 PM
How can he hate everything not human without hating himself?:smallconfused:

someonenonotyou
2010-01-04, 12:04 AM
How can he hate everything not human without hating himself?:smallconfused:

im confused he is human

anyway new one up
hmm mabey there more to this comic :smallwink

someonenonotyou
2010-01-07, 10:36 PM
new comic is up so read it

Nageto004
2010-01-07, 11:13 PM
I love this new twist on the story.:smallbiggrin:

someonenonotyou
2010-01-08, 02:51 AM
thank you, there more where that came from:smallwink:

whan i thought it up yesterday i didn't know if anyone would like it:smallbiggrin:

Green-Shirt Q
2010-01-08, 03:11 PM
WOW.

That was really NOT something I was expecting. :smalleek:

I am really looking forward to how this plays out. Really well done. Congratulations, you have made me interested in the plot. :smallsmile:

Although I can't help but shake the feeling you wouldn't have done this if your comic wasn't being reviewed next week. :smallwink::smalltongue:

someonenonotyou
2010-01-08, 03:32 PM
WOW.

That was really NOT something I was expecting. :smalleek:

I am really looking forward to how this plays out. Really well done. Congratulations, you have made me interested in the plot. :smallsmile:

Although I can't help but shake the feeling you wouldn't have done this if your comic wasn't being reviewed next week. :smallwink::smalltongue:

i was going to do it just not this quick i wanted to draw out the game and all the characters first but then i just to do it now

EmeraldPhoenix
2010-01-08, 05:45 PM
im confused he is human

anyway new one up
hmm mabey there more to this comic :smallwink:

I...he...green...what?:smallconfused: :smallconfused: :smallconfused:

[re-reads]

Oh, wow, epic reading fail. :smallredface:I thought the green guy was saying that HE hated anything non human, not the he knew the OTHER guy hated anything non human.:smallsigh:
Also, that last comic is a little bit confusing, anybody willing to explain? :smallredface:

someonenonotyou
2010-01-12, 06:11 PM
20 is up:smallsmile:

someonenonotyou
2010-01-20, 07:16 PM
Well funny thing happened i was working on the next comic and my computer broke so it might be a while for the next one srry

foahra
2010-01-20, 07:22 PM
ok cant wait and oh darn i hope u could fix it somehow by going to a store haha. i hope it up soon.

someonenonotyou
2010-02-25, 07:05 PM
Ok it here finally after like 6 times of redoing it gosh ok well Take Two is back:smallbiggrin:

someonenonotyou
2010-03-11, 01:43 AM
Okay new one up so read it
Also i would like to say that we will be returning to our regular schedule ... which is when ever i can... but ill try to get on once a week

also any questions the last few pages have been well... anyways any questions anyone

Green-Shirt Q
2010-03-11, 06:56 AM
Planet Walmat, Tv Tropes?

AWESOME. :smallbiggrin:

This is an amazing story. Keep it up!

someonenonotyou
2010-03-24, 09:57 AM
Ok so li lied a little

New one up

Green-Shirt Q
2010-03-24, 01:56 PM
Ooooh. Chilling. :smalleek:

Both with Gene's past and current evil acts, but also the fact this virtual world thing seems to have a mind of it's own and is still running a world despite the fact nobody's in it at the moment.

But also, I thought Gene had a different name in the holographic world. He seemed surprised when he learned his real name was Gene, and said a bad word. But his virtual dad called him Gene. What the heck? :smallconfused:

someonenonotyou
2010-03-25, 10:54 AM
Ooooh. Chilling. :smalleek:

Both with Gene's past and current evil acts, but also the fact this virtual world thing seems to have a mind of it's own and is still running a world despite the fact nobody's in it at the moment.

But also, I thought Gene had a different name in the holographic world. He seemed surprised when he learned his real name was Gene, and said a bad word. But his virtual dad called him Gene. What the heck? :smallconfused:

Gene was always called Gene he just hates his name When he came to the real world he just hoped he was named something else he wasn't surprised just mad.

foahra
2010-03-29, 11:47 AM
Gene was always called Gene he just hates his name When he came to the real world he just hoped he was named something else he wasn't surprised just mad.

ah i get it now i like ur comic :smallbiggrin:

someonenonotyou
2011-04-08, 05:28 PM
It's Alive! It's ALIVE!!! MWHAHAHAHAHAHahahaha...

anyway yeah were back and number twenty-four is up.

someonenonotyou
2011-04-20, 01:56 PM
New one up #25

also question do you think i should put them as links now cause i starting to get a bit just wondering