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2009-10-07, 01:40 PM
This is a draft of my sisters personal statement for UCAS (university admission). The main problem is it's 1600 chars too long. Any ideas?
Pleeeaaase?:smallfrown:
I find political history fascinating, especially when understanding how different cultures form distinct governments; how they come into power and stay in power; to what extent they have an influence on people's lives and why they have that degree of influence. this shifts the way you see the impact of national politics and ideologies over peoples lives and ambitions. The reality of politics and how it influences society is far more intricate then I imagined and lead me to explore this aspect of history with tremendous curiosity.
When studying revolutions in Russia in the early 20th century and South American independence I realized how politics, philosophy and economics were so entwined, so I feel that in order to understand current changes in government and changes throughout history I need to understand the relationship between the three. When reading “Simon Bolivar A Life” by John Lynch, I was surprised to find that the revolution in South America was sparked by American interests, justified with philosophy and than, developed into a new form of government. (I had always thought philosophy came first)As revolutions unfold they became a battle of avarice vs. ideology. Ideology comes later to test, explain, legitimise and clarify the revolution. I found that weight of habit can induce obedience to established powers and it's usually only when comfort is disturbed or our habits no longer benefit us economically, that we choose to change. There is some sort of security in being ignorant of the happenings of the world around us its easier to be a slave to ignorance than to face difficult decisions that political freedom requires. Even when change does come about the governments that succeed aren't those that adopt the “best” system by ideological standards, but the one that's most suited to the nature of the nation for which it was set in place and that appeals more importantly than to people's beliefs, to their interests.
Having been self-taught most of my life has encouraged my curiosity as it was unhindered by any syllabuses. I have had the privilege of pursuing my personal interests to a greater depth than most of my peers. Additionally, the need to take responsibility for my own learning has helped me to develop strategies to learn effectively, to plan and evaluate my progress and to reflect on how to improve. I began my A level studies having newly arrived in the UK after living with my missionary parents in South America. Not only did I have to manage a new culture but also a new school system, a new family and find myself a job to meet my personal expenses. These dramatic changes, especially being away from the security of my family, have been really challenging but I consider that I have grown from the experience. At college I'm part of the debating team that came to the finals in both the Cambridge, Oxford and Debating Matters competitions. I enjoy the preparation that takes place before the debate, the thought process and watching my argument being challenged and moulded as the debate unfolds. It's often interesting to see how different my opinion can be in light of new facts and how our bias can be exposed. This concept of “natural bias” interested me, and I went on to read Eliezer Yudkowsky's articles on “Less Wrong” and am currently reading “What is History Now?”. To understand that we all are bias, that it shades our perception of reality, was something new to me as I had always believed in an ultimate, almost empirical answer that just had to be found. It was frustrating to realize that I only saw the world from certain angles and my aim is to get a more complete view, to be challenged and pushed out of my comfort zone.
I also find it interesting how the Church controlled politics. I ask myself why this is, how it came to be the case and how was it legitimised. This lead me to read into the ideal of liberty in Quentin Skinner's “Foundations of Modern Political Thought”.
I've gained analytical skills thanks to my science based subjects yet can still pull together essays with great enjoyment thanks to History. The analytical skills that I have developed through studying science I've found to be equally useful when researching different resources either for history or debating . Discussing ethical issues behind scientific discoveries really interests me. One of the reasons I study physics is because I like the way abstract theories develop to become accepted facts.
Over the past year I've been promoting a charity called Mary's Meals which aims to give each child in undeveloped countries one meal a day at their schools, so that hunger will no longer prevent children receiving an education. I planned and presented talks which I gave throughout the school and really enjoyed seeing the response of other children keen to help. I plan to take a gap year and travel, hopefully to Malawi in order to experience the charity's success first-hand, but also to Bolivia to work with a program called groups of hope and to Russia to get a feel for one the most intriguing cultures I've ever come across. I enjoy many extra-curricular activities. I played basketball at a national level in Colombia and I've helped coach the lower years, something I greatly enjoyed. I like playing the bass and the piano and love extreme sports like BMX and speed skating.
I'm quite proud of her.:smallsmile:
Pleeeaaase?:smallfrown:
I find political history fascinating, especially when understanding how different cultures form distinct governments; how they come into power and stay in power; to what extent they have an influence on people's lives and why they have that degree of influence. this shifts the way you see the impact of national politics and ideologies over peoples lives and ambitions. The reality of politics and how it influences society is far more intricate then I imagined and lead me to explore this aspect of history with tremendous curiosity.
When studying revolutions in Russia in the early 20th century and South American independence I realized how politics, philosophy and economics were so entwined, so I feel that in order to understand current changes in government and changes throughout history I need to understand the relationship between the three. When reading “Simon Bolivar A Life” by John Lynch, I was surprised to find that the revolution in South America was sparked by American interests, justified with philosophy and than, developed into a new form of government. (I had always thought philosophy came first)As revolutions unfold they became a battle of avarice vs. ideology. Ideology comes later to test, explain, legitimise and clarify the revolution. I found that weight of habit can induce obedience to established powers and it's usually only when comfort is disturbed or our habits no longer benefit us economically, that we choose to change. There is some sort of security in being ignorant of the happenings of the world around us its easier to be a slave to ignorance than to face difficult decisions that political freedom requires. Even when change does come about the governments that succeed aren't those that adopt the “best” system by ideological standards, but the one that's most suited to the nature of the nation for which it was set in place and that appeals more importantly than to people's beliefs, to their interests.
Having been self-taught most of my life has encouraged my curiosity as it was unhindered by any syllabuses. I have had the privilege of pursuing my personal interests to a greater depth than most of my peers. Additionally, the need to take responsibility for my own learning has helped me to develop strategies to learn effectively, to plan and evaluate my progress and to reflect on how to improve. I began my A level studies having newly arrived in the UK after living with my missionary parents in South America. Not only did I have to manage a new culture but also a new school system, a new family and find myself a job to meet my personal expenses. These dramatic changes, especially being away from the security of my family, have been really challenging but I consider that I have grown from the experience. At college I'm part of the debating team that came to the finals in both the Cambridge, Oxford and Debating Matters competitions. I enjoy the preparation that takes place before the debate, the thought process and watching my argument being challenged and moulded as the debate unfolds. It's often interesting to see how different my opinion can be in light of new facts and how our bias can be exposed. This concept of “natural bias” interested me, and I went on to read Eliezer Yudkowsky's articles on “Less Wrong” and am currently reading “What is History Now?”. To understand that we all are bias, that it shades our perception of reality, was something new to me as I had always believed in an ultimate, almost empirical answer that just had to be found. It was frustrating to realize that I only saw the world from certain angles and my aim is to get a more complete view, to be challenged and pushed out of my comfort zone.
I also find it interesting how the Church controlled politics. I ask myself why this is, how it came to be the case and how was it legitimised. This lead me to read into the ideal of liberty in Quentin Skinner's “Foundations of Modern Political Thought”.
I've gained analytical skills thanks to my science based subjects yet can still pull together essays with great enjoyment thanks to History. The analytical skills that I have developed through studying science I've found to be equally useful when researching different resources either for history or debating . Discussing ethical issues behind scientific discoveries really interests me. One of the reasons I study physics is because I like the way abstract theories develop to become accepted facts.
Over the past year I've been promoting a charity called Mary's Meals which aims to give each child in undeveloped countries one meal a day at their schools, so that hunger will no longer prevent children receiving an education. I planned and presented talks which I gave throughout the school and really enjoyed seeing the response of other children keen to help. I plan to take a gap year and travel, hopefully to Malawi in order to experience the charity's success first-hand, but also to Bolivia to work with a program called groups of hope and to Russia to get a feel for one the most intriguing cultures I've ever come across. I enjoy many extra-curricular activities. I played basketball at a national level in Colombia and I've helped coach the lower years, something I greatly enjoyed. I like playing the bass and the piano and love extreme sports like BMX and speed skating.
I'm quite proud of her.:smallsmile: