Galactic Travelers

[Zexion]

GALACTIC TRAVELERS
Hello, and welcome to my new comic, Galactic Travelers! The story is basically about a small team of... sentient beings which travel around the galaxy. Most of the jokes are sarcastic or self-criticizing.

CURRENT STRIP
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ARCHIVE

013 (http://img28.imageshack.us/img28/5306/013cn.png)
012 (http://img155.imageshack.us/img155/1306/012z.png)
011 (http://img716.imageshack.us/img716/8706/011y.png)
010 (http://img138.imageshack.us/img138/8504/010s.png)
009 (http://img101.imageshack.us/img101/9325/009ee.png)
008 (http://img691.imageshack.us/img691/1485/008ma.png)
007 (http://img130.imageshack.us/img130/4157/007pk.png)
006 (http://img404.imageshack.us/img404/1733/006y.png)
005 (http://img638.imageshack.us/img638/221/005k.png)
004 (http://img704.imageshack.us/img704/3158/004wn.png)
003 (http://img706.imageshack.us/i/003i.png/)
002 (http://img227.imageshack.us/i/002p.png/)
001 (http://img532.imageshack.us/img532/5263/001vm.png)
Teaser Strip (http://img11.imageshack.us/img11/165/0characters.png)

Comments and constructive criticism are appreciated!

[Zexion]

Tomorrow the first five strips come out, and you get a general idea of what the plot is like.

Any feedback?

[Evil Mustache]

Hmmm... The art is good for a first strip. The character concepts equally so. The gun shot someone's foot but it was aimed to mid-air. It would be more likely he shot someone's hair or head.

Red shirt is a very interesting (If often used) character concept. That he dies in every strip reminds me of South Park. You know in every episode of the first five seasons, Kenny died. The creators ran out of ideas to kill him and so only made it every so often that Kenny would die. My concern is that will to you too. You'll run out of ideas how to kill him.

On the other hand his ability to come back to life would be a superb plot hole for you when your other characters seemed like they were about to die.

That's really all I have. On the whole good concept. I'll keep an eye on it to see how it goes.

[Darklord Xavez]

Great comic. Keep making new episodes.
-Xavez

[Zexion]

Hmmm... The art is good for a first strip. The character concepts equally so.
Thank you very much!

The gun shot someone's foot but it was aimed to mid-air. It would be more likely he shot someone's hair or head.
Good point. I'll fix that.

Red shirt is a very interesting (If often used) character concept. That he dies in every strip reminds me of South Park. You know in every episode of the first five seasons, Kenny died. The creators ran out of ideas to kill him and so only made it every so often that Kenny would die. My concern is that will to you too. You'll run out of ideas how to kill him.
Oh, trust me. I have a very long list of ways to kill him.
Also, Red Shirt is basically the "joke beneath the joke," in which, he's usually doing something funny in every strip, even if it doesn't directly relate to the joke.

On the other hand his ability to come back to life would be a superb plot hole for you when your other characters seemed like they were about to die.
I was actually thinking there is an infinite supply of Red Shirts, and the characters are aware of this, and exploit it.

That's really all I have. On the whole good concept. I'll keep an eye on it to see how it goes.
Thank you!

[licoot]

I like the water alien :smallbiggrin:

[Zexion]

I like the water alien :smallbiggrin:
Why thank you! :smallbiggrin:

[Dvandemon]

Ditto Licoot, can't wait

...and did you fix the laser that quick? :smalleek:

[Darklord Xavez]

I like the water alien :smallbiggrin:

Me too. Always have him give some sarcastic commentary, he's that kind of character.
-Xavez

[Zexion]

Me too. Always have him give some sarcastic commentary, he's that kind of character.
-Xavez
That's the plan.

[Zexion]

Well, for a start, it seems like another space comic. (Nah, just kidding.) I really, really hope the plot would be great, original and stuff like that.
It probably will. I have the basic story arc planned already.

'Bout the characters..in introduction, I love the water alien ("Vaark is too cheap to buy security drones.." :D). Is it a cynical and sarcastic character?
Yeah.

Kena's really my second fave character. I wouldn't be able to imagine a pathological liar mage, good one there. Something in the story like:"There aren't any deadly and angry robots behind us and trying to kill us." :D
She's a very deep character, a bit like Haley mixed with Belkar.

"Red Shirt". Two words for him - oh gods. Nah, I admit, he can be useful, but I can't think of how..(maybe making the story funny?)
He's more of a "where's Waldo" kind of running gag, he dies in every strip, but not always in an obvious way.

Vaark - "the big dumb fighter" :D Let's hope he won't destroy them all.
Yes. Let us hope.

Yay, I almost forgot about Insigna, the spaceship! Does it have a A.I.? (Maybe talking spaceship, eh?)
Yeah, it does have an AI. Although knowing how cheap Vaark is, don't expect anything fancy.

So - I'll wait 'till tomorrow, things will surely get interesting. I hope so, at least.
It will. :smallbiggrin:

[CrimsonAngel]

Redshirts are multipurposed. He can be, say, a sheild, an umbrella, a sword...

[Zexion]

Redshirts are multipurposed. He can be, say, a sheild, an umbrella, a sword...
...
Food. :smallbiggrin:

[Evil Mustache]

Redshirts are multipurposed. He can be, say, a sheild, an umbrella, a sword...

Even food for when you're near starving! But I'm not that into cannibalism, meself. It's not like I eat human flesh every 3rd Wednesday of the month. Heh. :smalleek: Yeah...

Anyway I'm looking forward for tomorrow. You also fixed the laser thing I pointed out earlier... very fast.

[Zexion]

Even food for when you're near starving! But I'm not that into cannibalism, meself. It's not like I eat human flesh every 3rd Wednesday of the month. Heh. :smalleek: Yeah...
Ninja'd! (about the food thing.)

Anyway I'm looking forward for tomorrow. You also fixed the laser thing I pointed out earlier... very fast.
Why thank you! :smallbiggrin:
Everyone, remember, tommorow 5 strips are coming out! I can assure you that there will be at least 4 out by 11:00 AM Pacific time. For the fifth, probably more around 4:00 PM Pacific time.

[Evil Mustache]

Why thank you! :smallbiggrin:
Everyone, remember, tommorow 5 strips are coming out! I can assure you that there will be at least 4 out by 11:00 AM Pacific time. For the fifth, probably more around 4:00 PM Pacific time.

OMGODS! I was just about to ask you about that in my last post but then I thought I would be rude. Weird. I'm always rude and the one time I stop and think about it, it happens without my consent. :smallconfused: I'll take it though!

[Zexion]

OMGODS! I was just about to ask you about that in my last post but then I thought I would be rude. Weird. I'm always rude and the one time I stop and think about it, it happens without my consent. :smallconfused: I'll take it though!
Weird... there's only one conclusion! It's a coincidence I'm psychic!

Also, I don't really mind. It's a perfectly normal question.

[Evil Mustache]

Weird... there's only one conclusion! It's a coincidence I'm psychic!

Of course. I knew it the whole time. This explains everything!


Also, I don't really mind. It's a perfectly normal question.

Of course. I knew it the whole time. This explains everything! But I usually am neurotic about what I say to people, even people who I am talking to over the internet. I'm just weird that way.

[Zexion]

Of course. I knew it the whole time. This explains everything! But I usually am neurotic about what I say to people, even people who I am talking to over the internet. I'm just weird that way.
:smalleek:
... okay then.

[Evil Mustache]

:smalleek:
... okay then.

Just imagine what I had just said. But really fast and with a weird laugh at the end of it.

But anyway! Do you have an arch-villain for the characters, yet?

[Zexion]

Just imagine what I had just said. But really fast and with a weird laugh at the end of it.

But anyway! Do you have an arch-villain for the characters, yet?
Nope! Well, kind of...
Does the rest of the known universe count as an arch-villain?

[Evil Mustache]

Nope! Well, kind of...
Does the rest of the known universe count as an arch-villain?

HA HA HA! Your puny crossing out doesn't affect me! I have laser vision! :smallcool: But yes, the rest of the known universe does count. HIT ME WITH YOUR BEST SHOT, YOU DARN UNIVERSE!!

[Szilard]

I would suggest taking "(NEW, PLEASE COMMENT)" out of the title, because after 30 or so days whatever title you have becomes permenant.

Otherwise, I am anticipating tomorrow's comics.

[Zexion]

I would suggest taking "(NEW, PLEASE COMMENT)" out of the title, because after 30 or so days whatever title you have becomes permenant.
Thanks. :smalleek:

Otherwise, I am anticipating tomorrow's comics.
Yeah! Just an hour and a half before- screw it, I'm posting them now.
001 (http://img11.imageshack.us/i/001eg.png/)
002 (http://img227.imageshack.us/i/002p.png/)
003 (http://img706.imageshack.us/i/003i.png/)
004 (http://img704.imageshack.us/img704/3158/004wn.png)

[Evil Mustache]

Yeah! Just an hour and a half before- screw it, I'm posting them now.


Heh. I did the exact same thing Friday on my comic. I post on weekends but decided to post it Friday, so I wouldn't have to worry about it.

Hey! Red Shirt didn't die in the first comic or in the third!

[Zexion]

Hey! Red Shirt didn't die in the first comic or in the third!
He did in the third.

[Evil Mustache]

He did in the third.

OOOH!! I see it now! Killed and shot out in the engine.

[Darklord Xavez]

Ooh...a plot hook.
-Xavez

[Zexion]

Ah, Xaves, perhaps you could add this banner to your sig? To the bit about "awesome webcomics"?
http://img153.imageshack.us/img153/2541/banner1sr.png (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=151661)

[Darklord Xavez]

Ah, Xaves, perhaps you could add this banner to your sig? To the bit about "awesome webcomics"?
http://img153.imageshack.us/img153/2541/banner1sr.png (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=151661)

Sure. But I'm only accepting your request because you're telling the truth. This is probably one of the 5 best webcomics so far, by which I mean the ones in my sig.
-Xavez
Edit: Yowza! Only 4 images allowed in a signature! I'll provide a link anyways.

[Zexion]

Sure. But I'm only accepting your request because you're telling the truth. This is probably one of the 5 best webcomics so far, by which I mean the ones in my sig.
-Xavez
Edit: Yowza! Only 4 images allowed in a signature! I'll provide a link anyways.
Thank you! :smallbiggrin:
That feeds my Zexion's ego, it does.

[Darklord Xavez]

Thank you! :smallbiggrin:
That feeds my Zexion's ego, it does.

You're welcome. It's what I'm here for.
-Xavez

[Zexion]

You're welcome. It's what I'm here for.
-Xavez
Great. So, just so all of you know, the fifth strip is going to be rather text-heavy.

[Evil Mustache]

Great. So, just so all of you know, the fifth strip is going to be rather text-heavy.

And plot heavy?

[Zexion]

And plot heavy?
Yes. Very.

[Evil Mustache]

Yes. Very.

Good, good. Or else I'd have to go all James Bond on you.

[Zexion]

Good, good. Or else I'd have to go all James Bond on you.
:smalleek:
Um... the next three strips will be plot-heavy as well.
Please don't hurt me.
:smallbiggrin:

[Evil Mustache]

:smalleek:
Um... the next three strips will be plot-heavy as well.
Please don't hurt me.
:smallbiggrin:

MUAHAHAHAHAH- *cough* *cough* Stupid cough, ruining my evil laugh. And plot is good. It make the comics big und strong! :smallamused:

[Zexion]

MUAHAHAHAHAH- *cough* *cough* Stupid cough, ruining my evil laugh. And plot is good. It make the comics big und strong! :smallamused:
Vampire with asthma. :smallbiggrin:

[Evil Mustache]

Vampire with asthma. :smallbiggrin:

Correction: GERMAN Vampire with asthma attacks when they laugh. :smalltongue:

[Zexion]

Correction: GERMAN Vampire with asthma attacks when they laugh. :smalltongue:
:smallconfused:
Uh... sure.
Anyways, new comic will be up in less than a minute.

[Evil Mustache]

:smallconfused:
Uh... sure.
Anyways, new comic will be up in less than a minute.

60 seconds.

[Zexion]

60 seconds.
Oops. Formatting error.

Fixed.

[Evil Mustache]

HAHAHA!!! Saw it. Love how Zaark fantasizes about killing Red Shirt.

[Zexion]

HAHAHA!!! Saw it. Love how Zaark fantasizes about killing Red Shirt.
It's character development.

Oh, and if you haven't noticed yet, I have a tendency to pack my comic strips full of many smaller jokes.

Also, check out how Red Shirt dies in the new, updated strip #1.

[Evil Mustache]

It's character development.

Oh, and if you haven't noticed yet, I have a tendency to pack my comic strips full of many smaller jokes.

Also, check out how Red Shirt dies in the new, updated strip #1.

How does that qualify as character development. In the first strip I saw gears with lasers killing Red Shirt?

[Zexion]

How does that qualify as character development. In the first strip I saw gears with lasers killing Red Shirt?
Technically, it's not. That's what I find amusing.

Attack bots. Obviously Vaark has... priorities. Let me explain this with a mathematical equation.

Killing Red Shirts > Owning Security Drones

[Evil Mustache]

Killing Red Shirts > Owning Security Drones

Ahhhh... I see. And: Killing Red Shirts = Cool gags

[Zexion]

Ahhhh... I see. And: Killing Red Shirts = Cool gags
Alright. Time to start working on Strip #6.

[Zexion]

Yay, new strips! (I'm pretty late, eh?) PCTROPESCANNER wins!
Obviously no plot hooks. :D Poor alien.. he got zapped.
No, he's fine. PCs can never die.

*clapping* Very good - that increases the quality!
If I even notice them.
Well, the point is that you can go back and see something new in an old strip.

[Zexion]

Alright, Strip #6 will be released tommorow. Sorry for the slow update, but I'm not on my laptop much on Mondays and Tuesdays, so I doubt that there will be any new strips. I just started working on Strip 6, so... :smalleek:
Please don't hurt me.

Also, did anyone notice the sign on the Alien Burgers?

[Zexion]

Yes. They must be really delicious.
:smallbiggrin:

No comment.

[Zexion]

New strip is up!

[John Cribati]

Go random-ass beam from the sky!

[Zexion]

Go random-ass beam from the sky!
:smallconfused:
Um... yeah.

[chef781]

Not bad, But I can't throw any compliments at you yet. Keep them coming; This has potential. Good luck!

[Zexion]

Not bad, But I can't throw any compliments at you yet. Keep them coming; This has potential. Good luck!
Why no throwing compliments? Ah, just as well. They'd probably hit me on the head. Compliment Danger!

[Zexion]

:D So that's what the alien thingy was really for..
(Careful down there! Throwing compliment!)
But..isn't Kena a pathetic liar? So it's possible she found the techy stuff already..isn't it? Nah, you'll probably tell me stuff like we'll found that out in next strip.
:smallconfused:
What alien thingy? The techy device, or the water alien?

Also, I suggest that you wait. By Strip #10, the first plot sequence will become clear.

[Zexion]

The thing Red Shirt played with. (Techy device you call it.)
It was originally made for killing him.:smallamused:
Mm... not exactly. But close.

Red shirts are my personal army! Oh look, there they go, like lemmings. What a pity.

[Darklord Xavez]

This comic is TOTALLY one of the top five webcomics. You're welcome.
-Xavez

[Zexion]

This comic is TOTALLY one of the top five webcomics. You're welcome.
-Xavez
Um... great!:smallbiggrin:

What exactly am I doing right?

[Darklord Xavez]

Um... great!:smallbiggrin:

What exactly am I doing right?

Everything which Herpestidae fixed in Combo-Platter. It's a good comic (as is yours:biggrin:)
-Xavez

[Zexion]

New strip is up!

[Zexion]

What? No comments on the new strip?

[Zexion]

Sorry, other time zones :D

:smallbiggrin: Yes. Exactly like lemmings.
Anyway, really great job composing the death of RS to this strip. I thought you'll run out of gags soon and his death will be bothersome. This results in a lesson:

Never under-estimate Zexion! :D
Why, thank you! :smallbiggrin:

I'm beginning to think that the respawn portal should be another running gag... :smalltongue:

[Darklord Xavez]

What? No comments on the new strip?

Yes, comments on the new strip. I like the "superweapon" in this one. Also, I like how red shirt got to express his anger for once.
-Xavez

[Zexion]

Yes, comments on the new strip. I like the "superweapon" in this one. Also, I like how red shirt got to express his anger for once.
-Xavez
Yeah.

By the way, at 4:30, there's a new strip coming out, which might explain what the "superweapon" does. Also, this comic is going to update a lot more frequently now that I've convinced my teacher that I can make this my end-of-year project. :smallbiggrin:

[Zexion]

New strip's up!

[Bayar]

Yeah.

By the way, at 4:30, there's a new strip coming out, which might explain what the "superweapon" does. Also, this comic is going to update a lot more frequently now that I've convinced my teacher that I can make this my end-of-year project. :smallbiggrin:

How is a webcomic an end of the year project ? Has your teacher actually seen it ? Or does he WANT you to fail ?

[Zexion]

How is a webcomic an end of the year project ? Has your teacher actually seen it ? Or does he WANT you to fail ?
Yes, my teacher has seen it, and she loves it. Also:
*Ahem*
In my class, there is a lot of project-based-learning. And for the final project, you can basically do whatever you want, as long as you can convince the teacher that it is "educational." For example, last year two boys made a tennis ball cannon, another boy made a musical CD, and I did an animation.

... it's a pretty awesome class. :smallbiggrin:

[bvdk99]

Yes, my teacher has seen it, and she loves it. Also:
*Ahem*
In my class, there is a lot of project-based-learning. And for the final project, you can basically do whatever you want, as long as you can convince the teacher that it is "educational." For example, last year two boys made a tennis ball cannon, another boy made a musical CD, and I did an animation.

... it's a pretty awesome class. :smallbiggrin:

No offence, but how is making a webcomic educational!? :smalltongue:

[Zexion]

No offence, but how is making a webcomic educational!? :smalltongue:
Hm... let me see how I put it.
*searches through files*
Ah, here it is!
"Doing this project will help develop my artistic skills, especially in the branch of computer graphics. It will also function as a supplement to my previous project on animation, helping to enhance my artistic/creative intelligence."

:biggrin:

[Lord Raziere]

eh, with enough twisting and big-wording you can make anything sound educational.

for example lazily lying on the couch:
"Lying around like this develops my breathing skills so that I can better control my breath and allows me to calm my mind to achieve a higher state of clarity and rationality, while I think and philosophize upon the nature of life, the universe and humanity thus giving me a deeper insight into life and the world." :smallbiggrin:

[Zexion]

eh, with enough twisting and big-wording you can make anything sound educational.

for example lazily lying on the couch:
"Lying around like this develops my breathing skills so that I can better control my breath and allows me to calm my mind to achieve a higher state of clarity and rationality, while I think and philosophize upon the nature of life, the universe and humanity thus giving me a deeper insight into life and the world." :smallbiggrin:
Mind if I use that for my next school project?

Fair point.

[Darklord Xavez]

"Lying around like this develops my breathing skills so that I can better control my breath and allows me to calm my mind to achieve a higher state of clarity and rationality, while I think and philosophize upon the nature of life, the universe and humanity thus giving me a deeper insight into life and the world."



"Doing this project will help develop my artistic skills, especially in the branch of computer graphics. It will also function as a supplement to my previous project on animation, helping to enhance my artistic/creative intelligence."

You can do anything with euphemisms. Such as explaining how you broke a window with a ball:
"I shattered the transparent viewing area while utilizing my spheroid recreational object."
But that one's a stretch.

Anyways, great comic.
-Xavez

[Zexion]

You can do anything with euphemisms. Such as explaining how you broke a window with a ball:
"I shattered the transparent viewing area while utilizing my spheroid recreational object."
But that one's a stretch.

Anyways, great comic.
-Xavez
Yes. That one is a stretch.
And yes. This is a great comic.
No, I'm not that egotistical. Yet.

[Bayar]

Hm... let me see how I put it.
*searches through files*
Ah, here it is!
"Doing this project will help develop my artistic skills, especially in the branch of computer graphics. It will also function as a supplement to my previous project on animation, helping to enhance my artistic/creative intelligence."

:biggrin:

Well then, you should probably try and draw your characters every other strip, just to get more practice. because just duplicating the character, and maybe sometimes moving an arm a bit does not equal "develop my artistic skills".

The prologue. I'm looking at the fifth panel: Red Shirt has the same pose, although supposedly he died of lack of air in the vacuum of space. That should at least make him flail his arms a bit trying to gasp for air or something. Oh, and after carefully looking at it, I see that in the prologue, they all have the same body, only tweaked a bit in the case of Kena (since she is a female and all). But the arms and legs ? Same everywhere. Every damned humanoid character has the same arms and legs.

Strip 7: Red shirt seems to be a cardboard cutout. With moving eyebrows. Vaark doesnt even change his face in that one, like he had it painted on or something.


Seriously, even if the writing would be stellar, that kinda static cardboard cutout panels doesnt make this a great work. Oh, and the writing. Lets see, the generic guy in the tavern informs us about incredible technology on a moon, former colony of humans that destroyed their home planet.Then he says "put a stop to the war that's going on". What war ? That didnt appear nowhere in the comic and it doesnt appear again. And a 4th wall breaking joke about "the DM". WOW HOW ORIGINAL !



And as a last tip: you cant see stars from a moon because of the light reflected from the planet it's orbiting. Unless that is some kind of snow.

[Zexion]

Well then, you should probably try and draw your characters every other strip, just to get more practice. because just duplicating the character, and maybe sometimes moving an arm a bit does not equal "develop my artistic skills".

The prologue. I'm looking at the fifth panel: Red Shirt has the same pose, although supposedly he died of lack of air in the vacuum of space. That should at least make him flail his arms a bit trying to gasp for air or something. Oh, and after carefully looking at it, I see that in the prologue, they all have the same body, only tweaked a bit in the case of Kena (since she is a female and all). But the arms and legs ? Same everywhere. Every damned humanoid character has the same arms and legs.

Strip 7: Red shirt seems to be a cardboard cutout. With moving eyebrows. Vaark doesnt even change his face in that one, like he had it painted on or something.

Seriously, even if the writing would be stellar, that kinda static cardboard cutout panels doesnt make this a great work. Oh, and the writing. Lets see, the generic guy in the tavern informs us about incredible technology on a moon, former colony of humans that destroyed their home planet.Then he says "put a stop to the war that's going on". What war ? That didnt appear nowhere in the comic and it doesnt appear again. And a 4th wall breaking joke about "the DM". WOW HOW ORIGINAL !

And as a last tip: you cant see stars from a moon because of the light reflected from the planet it's orbiting. Unless that is some kind of snow.
Thank you for the, um, constructive criticism. :smalleek:
But yeah, I'll try to start fixing this up.

Also, the strip about the DM wasn't making a joke about the DM, the joke was the "that was for my fans" bit.

[bvdk99]

Well then, you should probably try and draw your characters every other strip, just to get more practice. because just duplicating the character, and maybe sometimes moving an arm a bit does not equal "develop my artistic skills".

The prologue. I'm looking at the fifth panel: Red Shirt has the same pose, although supposedly he died of lack of air in the vacuum of space. That should at least make him flail his arms a bit trying to gasp for air or something. Oh, and after carefully looking at it, I see that in the prologue, they all have the same body, only tweaked a bit in the case of Kena (since she is a female and all). But the arms and legs ? Same everywhere. Every damned humanoid character has the same arms and legs.

Strip 7: Red shirt seems to be a cardboard cutout. With moving eyebrows. Vaark doesnt even change his face in that one, like he had it painted on or something.


Seriously, even if the writing would be stellar, that kinda static cardboard cutout panels doesnt make this a great work. Oh, and the writing. Lets see, the generic guy in the tavern informs us about incredible technology on a moon, former colony of humans that destroyed their home planet.Then he says "put a stop to the war that's going on". What war ? That didnt appear nowhere in the comic and it doesnt appear again. And a 4th wall breaking joke about "the DM". WOW HOW ORIGINAL !



And as a last tip: you cant see stars from a moon because of the light reflected from the planet it's orbiting. Unless that is some kind of snow.

I think you should calm down. It's no big deal if there are a few little mistakes here and there.

[Zexion]

I think you should calm down. It's no big deal if there are a few little mistakes here and there.
I think he was referring to the art, which I am trying to improve. :smallbiggrin:

[CrimsonAngel]

They naver open there mouths.

[Bayar]

I think you should calm down. It's no big deal if there are a few little mistakes here and there.

Yes, it is no big deal. That doesn't mean that they cannot be fixed. Someone needs to criticize it. And I wouldn't have bothered if I didn't think that Zexion has potential. The basic skeleton of the characters is well done. All it needs is a bit more character differetiation between bodies and a lot more movement.

If you think that these mistakes dont need correcting, what DO you think about the comic ? Go look at OotS. Look closely at the fluidity of the characters. Then come back and look at this comic. If no one would have said "Hey Zexion ! Your characters look like they are cardboard cut-outs ! Could you try to fix that ? That would improve your webcomic !", would Zexion be aware of this issue ? Maybe, maybe not. While "That strip was awesome !" comments are a welcomed sight for webcomic artists and scriptwriters, they only encourage the artist to keep the same art style, thinking that it has no flaws. See where I am going here ?

[Zexion]

Yes, Bayar, and I appreciate the constructive criticism.
However, if you have any more ideas for improving the comic, please unload them... at a slower pace. The long list of flaws kind of felt like you were criticizing me for the sake of criticizing me.

Also, if you're wondering why the new comic is taking so long, I'm trying to improve the posture and all of that stuff. :smalltongue:

[Zexion]

Strip 009 is up!

I hope the art is much improved?

[Zexion]

No comments?

[Zexion]

There are comments, improve your Spot skill :D
(As I said, we got different time zones. It was 11.48 PM for me when you posted that new strip is up.)

Yay, art uprgrade! I see, I see. What do you draw in? (Inkscape?)
I love that "spaceship". It's obvious you worked hard on it.
And the best part of the improve is - I can kill Redshirt with "Delete" button! Yay!
Actually, I've been drawing in Inkscape for a while. The difference is, I just found the Unify tool. So my speech bubbles are that much better, and so on.

[Zexion]

I see. It looks really nice!
Thank you! :smallbiggrin:

[Bayar]

Ok, maybe I was a bit harsh back there. I want to apologise if I seemed rude. And the reason I didn't reply sooner is because of exams.

That Traction City must have taken hours of designing (although you probably had fewer headaches after you made the basic building blocks :smallwink:).

Even if it doesn't seem like a big deal, Kena's arms in this strip is such a breath of fresh air.

I see signs of improvement, and can't wait to see more.

[Zexion]

Ok, maybe I was a bit harsh back there. I want to apologise if I seemed rude.
It's fine.

And the reason I didn't reply sooner is because of exams.
Alright, then. :smallbiggrin:

That Traction City must have taken hours of designing (although you probably had fewer headaches after you made the basic building blocks :smallwink:).
Yup. :smalltongue:

Even if it doesn't seem like a big deal, Kena's arms in this strip is such a breath of fresh air.
It took quite a while to make it work, but I like how it looks as well!

I see signs of improvement, and can't wait to see more.
Me too! (For both things.)

[bvdk99]

Yes, Bayar, and I appreciate the constructive criticism.
However, if you have any more ideas for improving the comic, please unload them... at a slower pace. The long list of flaws kind of felt like you were criticizing me for the sake of criticizing me.

Also, if you're wondering why the new comic is taking so long, I'm trying to improve the posture and all of that stuff. :smalltongue:

This is what I meant, Bayar. It seemed like he was being a bit harsh.

[Zexion]

Strip #10 is is up!

[Zexion]

Oh, also, for the sake of clarity, whenever Kena is lying, she talks in italics.:smalltongue:

[John Cribati]

May I suggest a different set of eyes for "knocked out" mode? Looks like you've got a TPK on your hands.

[CrimsonAngel]

Oh, I thought he just killed the cast!!!

[Zexion]

May I suggest a different set of eyes for "knocked out" mode? Looks like you've got a TPK on your hands.
I thought that the crossed-eyes was "knocked out"/dead?

[CrimsonAngel]

Roy wasn't knocked out when he fell to his doom... http://www.giantitp.com/comics/oots0444.html Panel 3.

[Zexion]

Roy wasn't knocked out when he fell to his doom... http://www.giantitp.com/comics/oots0444.html Panel 3.
Fair point. Perhaps I should use some sort of spiral pattern?

[Zexion]

New strip is up!

[Zexion]

Is anyone going to comment?

[Zexion]

Anyone?
:frown:
Sad Zexion is sad...

[Darklord Xavez]

Anyone?
:frown:
Sad Zexion is sad...

NOT ANYMORE!

But anyways, the comics are okay. Number one is by far the best, the rest are pretty average.
-Xavez

[Zexion]

NOT ANYMORE!

But anyways, the comics are okay. Number one is by far the best, the rest are pretty average.
-Xavez
*cries*

Really? What was so great about Strip 1?

EDIT: Also, Strip 12 is up! I hope it's better. :smallbiggrin:

[Bayar]

I think it was an unladen swallow. Meaning one without any extra baggage. Like a coconut.

[Zexion]

I think it was an unladen swallow. Meaning one without any extra baggage. Like a coconut.
You're right. I'll fix it.
So, is anyone going to try and predict the constantly shifting plot? :smalltongue:

[Darklord Xavez]

*cries*

Really? What was so great about Strip 1?

EDIT: Also, Strip 12 is up! I hope it's better. :smallbiggrin:

Number 12 is great! You're currently about on par with Murphy's Law in terms of quality, but that comic is not as good as it usually is right now, in my opinion.

Also: I liked the plot twist in number 11!
-Xavez

[Zexion]

Number 12 is great! You're currently about on par with Murphy's Law in terms of quality, but that comic is not as good as it usually is right now, in my opinion.

Also: I liked the plot twist in number 11!
-Xavez
Thank you.

Also, Strip 13 will be delayed until I can get an admin to approve it. It's a religious joke. :smalleek:

[Zexion]

DUN DUN DUN DUNN!!!

New strip's up!

[Darklord Xavez]

It appears that I am the only person who regularly responds to you updates... you need a comfort hug. *hugs*

Anyways, I liked the joke in this one.
-Xavez

[Zexion]

It appears that I am the only person who regularly responds to you updates... you need a comfort hug. *hugs*
Unfortunately so.

Anyways, I liked the joke in this one.
-Xavez
Thank you. :smalltongue:

[Darklord Xavez]

Unfortunately so.

It's what I'm here for.

Thank you. :smalltongue:

You're welcome.
-Xavez

[Zexion]

You're welcome.
-Xavez
You're thanked. And I'm pretty sure that's not even a common phrase...
:smalltongue:

[Darklord Xavez]

You're thanked. And I'm pretty sure that's not even a common phrase...
:smalltongue:

It's still an awesome one.:smallsmile:
-Xavez

[Zexion]

It's still an awesome one.:smallsmile:
-Xavez
Sheesh, if you keep that up
OUR EGO WILL ASCEND TO NEW HEIGHTS, AND WE WILL-
Sorry. :smalltongue: