Dream world

[Ninjaman]

Well, this is my web comic.

Dream world is about a bunch of people, from all around the world, who all suddenly got a blackout. and when they woke up, They were in a world like nothing they had ever seen before.

Intruduction Ignite http://lh5.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TD9arWyINZI/AAAAAAAAAGo/ivs5JBalvYw/s795/ignites%20comic.png.jpgEgon http://lh3.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEABV2e_9gI/AAAAAAAAAGw/hO06S4NihOw/s800/pirate%20comic.png.jpg Xing zen hu Number 1
http://lh4.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEWuN79PqEI/AAAAAAAAAHA/FbdGZCQ0Y-s/s800/Phsyker%20comic%20comic.png.jpg
Number 2
[IMG]http://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEWuTm-C0GI/AAAAAAAAAHE/ce1LIPoGudo/s800/phsyker%20comic%202.png.jpg (http://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEWuTm-C0GI/AAAAAAAAAHE/ce1LIPoGudo/s800/phsyker%20comic%202.png.jpg)] ReverNumber 1
http://lh4.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEXkjTJtCVI/AAAAAAAAAHM/3wJK3gHQer8/s800/Brawler%20comic.png.jpg
Number 2
http://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEXkjoomEoI/AAAAAAAAAHQ/w0ldxt5_E-8/s800/Brawler%20comic%202.png.jpg Paulhttp://lh4.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEbI-jXXZ_I/AAAAAAAAAHw/CIwy-lPanJ4/s800/mummy%20comic.png.jpg The mystic snowboarder which name we never really heardhttp://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEgashvH3nI/AAAAAAAAAH4/yjm3br2uz2M/s800/Wind%20srider%20comic.png.jpg

I still don´t know all the options but i´m working on it.

Feel free to post.

[Cizak]

Looks pretty good, but you have a few spelling errors. Maybye you should et someone to read your comics before you post them?

Spelling errors in comic #1:

Panel 1: "precident" should be "president".
"promissed" should be "promised".
"Well about the story, well". Not a spelling error, but when you repeat "well" like that it sounds weird.
"exacly" should be "excactly".

Panel 3: "becourse" should be "because".
"vidio" should be "video".
"No Little Alex loved something---" This would look better with "No, little Alex".

Sorry to post something so boring as your first comic, but it's a major thing that needs improvement. Otherwise, it looks good. The art ids nice and it sounds like an interesting story.

[Lyinginbedmon]

The massive blocks of text may dissuade readers...try stretching the page out a bit and separating them into smaller chunks.

[Roland St. Jude]

Sheriff: I'll give you a little leeway on this first comic, but if this comic is about real world politics, you shouldn't post/link it here.

[Ninjaman]

Looks pretty good, but you have a few spelling errors. Maybye you should et someone to read your comics before you post them?

Spelling errors in comic #1:

Panel 1: "precident" should be "president".
"promissed" should be "promised".
"Well about the story, well". Not a spelling error, but when you repeat "well" like that it sounds weird.
"exacly" should be "excactly".

Panel 3: "becourse" should be "because".
"vidio" should be "video".
"No Little Alex loved something---" This would look better with "No, little Alex".

Sorry to post something so boring as your first comic, but it's a major thing that needs improvement. Otherwise, it looks good. The art ids nice and it sounds like an interesting story.

I have edited them, i will try to double check in the future

Thanks


The massive blocks of text may dissuade readers...try stretching the page out a bit and separating them into smaller chunks.

It is just the intruductions which include this much text. The real comic will be more speechbubbles and action.


Sheriff: I'll give you a little leeway on this first comic, but if this comic is about real world politics, you shouldn't post/link it here.

It wouldn´t, i don´t even know what´s going on in politics

[Ninjaman]

New comic is up

Intruduction Egon http://lh3.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEABV2e_9gI/AAAAAAAAAGw/hO06S4NihOw/s800/pirate%20comic.png.jpg

[Threeshades]

Are the next two going to be a pilot (who crashes due to turbulences) and a miner (who gets buried in a collapsing shaft)?

[Ninjaman]

Are the next two going to be a pilot (who crashes due to turbulences) and a miner (who gets buried in a collapsing shaft)?

No. Why you ask?

[Ninjaman]

A new comic is up, or 2 actually

Number 1
http://lh4.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEWuN79PqEI/AAAAAAAAAHA/FbdGZCQ0Y-s/s800/Phsyker%20comic%20comic.png.jpg
Number 2
[IMG]http://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEWuTm-C0GI/AAAAAAAAAHE/ce1LIPoGudo/s800/phsyker%20comic%202.png.jpg (http://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEWuTm-C0GI/AAAAAAAAAHE/ce1LIPoGudo/s800/phsyker%20comic%202.png.jpg)]

[Lyinginbedmon]

Did she just petrify and fall over? :smallconfused:

[Ninjaman]

Another (two) is up

Number 1
http://lh4.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEXkjTJtCVI/AAAAAAAAAHM/3wJK3gHQer8/s800/Brawler%20comic.png.jpg

Number 2
http://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEXkjoomEoI/AAAAAAAAAHQ/w0ldxt5_E-8/s800/Brawler%20comic%202.png.jpg

[Threeshades]

No. Why you ask?

Oh I just thought I was beginning to see a pattern.

The last few comics are kind of confusing, people seem to tip over for no apparent reason.

[Ninjaman]

Oh I just thought I was beginning to see a pattern.

The last few comics are kind of confusing, people seem to tip over for no apparent reason.

Propably best that way. If you think the intro is confusing you don´t stand a chance in the real story, as it is kinda "Alice in wonder land" the bloody version.

[Ninjaman]

New comic is up

http://lh4.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEbI-jXXZ_I/AAAAAAAAAHw/CIwy-lPanJ4/s800/mummy%20comic.png.jpg

This means i am half the way through the introductions

[Bayar]

New comic is up

http://lh4.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEbI-jXXZ_I/AAAAAAAAAHw/CIwy-lPanJ4/s800/mummy%20comic.png.jpg

This means i am half the way through the introductions

Ok, I didn't want to post in this thread at first, but this just made me crack. Get a spellchecker. Seriously. It will improve the comic a bit. Proper punctuation and capitalisation is the key to a good reader response.

http://i241.photobucket.com/albums/ff15/bayar_m2003/rect2495.png

[Mina Kobold]

Ok, I didn't want to post in this thread at first, but this just made me crack. Get a spellchecker. Seriously. It will improve the comic a bit. Proper punctuation and capitalisation is the key to a good reader response.

http://i241.photobucket.com/albums/ff15/bayar_m2003/rect2495.png

There's only one "e" in Swedish.

My spell checker say so :smalltongue:

[Zexion]

There's only one "e" in Swedish.

My spell checker say so :smalltongue:
You are correct. Also, seriously put these through a spellchecker AND improve the drawing. The lines are too thick, and you've copied and pasted almost everything.

[Bayar]

There's only one "e" in Swedish.

My spell checker say so :smalltongue:

Well my spell checker says so :smalltongue:

[Zexion]

Well my spell checker says so :smalltongue:
Bang (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Swedish_language). :smallbiggrin:

[Threeshades]

Oh now i get it, all the inexplicable tipping over is meant to be inexplicable.

scientists say the average human understands or best memorizes a pattern once it repeats the third time.

But this does confuse me, why did nobody fall over in the other two comics?

[Ninjaman]

Oh now i get it, all the inexplicable tipping over is meant to be inexplicable.

scientists say the average human understands or best memorizes a pattern once it repeats the third time.

But this does confuse me, why did nobody fall over in the other two comics?

They did, you just couldn´t see it, the first gets set on fire, the second hit by lightning, the important thing is not that they fall over, but that they all got a blackout.

[Ninjaman]

http://lh6.ggpht.com/_VNsRqOWzhhw/TEgashvH3nI/AAAAAAAAAH4/yjm3br2uz2M/s800/Wind%20srider%20comic.png.jpg

Next one is up, i spell checked this one.

[Bayar]

Bang (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Swedish_language). :smallbiggrin:

Actually, I was reffering to the word "say" needing an s at the end so it would be gramatically correct in Keveak's post. Won't go modify the comic since I didn't save the .svg file.

[Dvandemon]

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