[Exalted] Concordant-Dragon Style PEACH

[Rhyvurg]

I made this as a celestial upgrade to five-dragon style, I used the same charms as a base with some slight modifications to cost, and increased the power of the charms themselves. It's meant to be a simple utilitarian style, just like the terrestrial version, and uses the same form weapons and allows all types of armor. This is my first attempt at Exalted homebrew, so don't be to harsh. :smallfrown:

Concordant-Dragon Claw
Cost: 1m; Mins: Martial Arts 3, Essence 1
Type: Supplemental
Keywords: Combo-OK
Duration: Instant
Prerequisite Charms: None
Giving her fingers the aspect of the Five Elemental Dragons’
claws, whose perfected natures slice through the thickest of godhides,
the Exalt's attacks cuts flesh to ribbons without
concern for the armor before it. Attacks made with this Charm
inflict lethal damage and ignore a target’s Hardness and adds the Exalt's
Essence to post-soak damage rolls.

Concordant-Dragon-Force Blow
Cost: 2m; Mins: Martial Arts 3, Essence 2
Type: Simple
Keywords: Combo-OK
Duration: Instant
Prerequisite Charms: Concordant-Dragon Claw
With a brief invocation to the might of the Five Dragons, the
Exalted martial artist lays out his foe with a single attack.
This attack doubles the normal base damage from an attack
(which does not include extra successes) before subtracting soak.
Also, if the attack generates more raw damage than the target’s
(Stamina + Resistance), the target must make a Stamina+Resistance
roll vs the attacker's Essence or lose conciousness.

Concordant-Dragon Fortitude
Cost: 1m per 4B or 2L; Mins: Martial Arts 3, Essence 2
Type: Reflexive (Step 7)
Keywords: Combo-OK
Duration: Instant
Prerequisite Charms: None
The impervious hides of the Elemental Dragons lend the practitioner
of Concordant-Dragon Style a small portion of their strength. Invoking
this Charm in response to a specific attack, the Exalt increases
her soak by four bashing or two lethal for each mote spent.

Concordant-Dragon Blocking Technique
Cost: 4m; Mins: Martial Arts 3, Essence 2
Type: Simple (Speed 5, -0 DV)
Keywords: Combo-Basic
Duration: One scene
Prerequisite Charms: Concordant-Dragon Fortitude
Letting the Dragons guide him, the Exalt aids his defense
with Essence. For the rest of the scene, he adds his permanent
Essence to his PDV. If unarmed, he can also parry lethal attacks
without a stunt or other magic.

Concordant-Dragon Form
Cost: 5m; Mins: Martial Arts 4, Essence 2
Type: Simple (Speed 5)
Keywords: Form-type
Duration: One scene
Prerequisite Charms: Concordant-Dragon-Force Blow, Concordant-Dragon Blocking Technique
Performing a quick series of motions that offer thanks and
claim guidance from the earth, sky and sea, with the martial artist
herself representing fire and life, the Exalt takes aspects
of all five elements into her technique.
Her unarmed Martial Arts attacks inflict lethal damage instead
of bashing, and she soaks aggrevated damage with her full bashing soak.
If she’s wielding one of the form’s weapons, she treats it as though
it has +2 Accuracy. Also, she adds double her Essence to her Dexterity
or Strength for determining running speed, jumping distance and
feats of strength.

Concordant-Dragon Fist
Cost: 6m; Mins: Martial Arts 5, Essence 4
Type: Simple
Keywords: Obvious
Duration: Instant
Prerequisite Charms: Conordant-Dragon Form
Calling upon the Elemental Dragons of Earth and Fire, the
Five-Dragon Stylist endows a single attack with streaking bands
of white and red Essence that tear through his opponent’s very
soul. The martial artist makes a single attack that inflicts
aggravated damage.

Concordant-Dragon Invulnerability
Cost: 5m, 1wp; Mins: Martial Arts 5, Essence 4
Type: Reflexive (Step 7)
Keywords: Combo-OK
Duration: Instant
Prerequisite Charms: Concordant-Dragon Form
Dragons are above the petty blows and mosquito-stings of their
mortal enemies. Activating this Charm allows the Exalt
to ignore all damage from a single attack. This Charm suffers from
one of the four flaws of invulnerability.

Concordant-Dragon Wrath
Cost: 1m per attack + 1hl; Mins: Martial Arts 5, Essence 4; Type: Extra Action
Keywords: Combo-OK, Obvious
Duration: Instant
Prerequisite Charms: Concordant-Dragon Fist, Concordant-Dragon Invulnerability
Calling upon the endless energies of the Elemental Dragons,
the Exalt explodes into a furious assault. This rain of blows is the
apex of the Concordant-Dragon Style and is immediately recognizable to
any who have seen it in action before.
For every mote spent, the Exalt makes one attack at his full
attack dice pool. All attacks must be against the same target. He
may not spend more motes on this Charm than twice his Essence.
Using this Charm inflicts one level of unsoakable bashing damage on the
Exalt.

[Jokasti]

I don't have much experience with the crunch involved in how a good martial art works but I'll say this: the style, fluff-wise, doesn't really work. The Immaculate Order only ever endorsed the Five Dragon Style and the Elemental Dragons. I don't think they would accept a 7th, because each emulates an element or the harmony between the elements. I also think that Celestial Styles are supposed to imitate an aspect of nature, such as an animal or something.
Sorry I can be more help.

[Rhyvurg]

The style also sees use by enlightened mortals, and some of those might exalt one day and seek to upgrade their repertoire with a celestial version of their style.