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ngilop
2013-10-06, 04:00 PM
Hello everybody. I am here to offer up my own evaluations, opinions, and thoughts on your self-created works.

I have nothing against Jeff the Green or his own PEACH EXCHANGE (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=263949) In fact it is why I am doing this.

I just notice that there are a few homebrew that manage to slip through the cracks, peopel post their homebrew and sometimes it just never gets found. Or in my case found a little too late ( i.e after one can be banned for thred necromancy)

SO before I go about posthing this thread and opening it up for everybody a little info how I am going to go about my critques

I am going to critque the homebrew in a vacuum. When I critque I assume its only the PHB and the class itself. Unless other wise directed.

I am a null-optimizer. In that while i can do decent optimization (power attack>weapon focuz.. why is toughness even a feat?) I am nowhere near the abilityt hat most of the GiTP0ers are. Optimization is the last ( if i ever care about it anyways) think I am thinking of when I make a character.

SO without further ado I open my thoughts up to you all and will to the best of my abilities promise that i will post critiques on your homebrew.

If you want to critique mine well Ask,( i think most of my homebrew is now past the thread necromancy date But I can post to fix that)

I will never drop one liners that say "
won't play past lvl 1"

or as was said in regards to my Hexblade
So this is a Witch without healing, without 9th level casting, and instead getting full BAB and a companion?

or complain
" mount is worhtless, why would a paladin get a mount" and never ever give thoughts on how i would make a mount worth it

I will strive and endeavor to be as gentle and respectful to you and I would hope you would be to me.

CinuzIta
2013-10-06, 05:34 PM
well, since you're practically asking for it, I'd like you to peach my abjurer class! The class itself is completed, only things missing are shield skills but I'm not concerned by those, since they basically some minor boosts to the class' main ability (and the "powerful" ones have a level prerequisite)..I'll post them somewhen in the future, but it may take a while since I'm away from home and I don't have my pc with me!

You can find the class here:

http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=307084

ngilop
2013-10-06, 06:13 PM
Abjurer critique posted.

ngilop
2013-10-29, 12:19 AM
here is a list of things of mine you can critique.

one day I hope ot be recognized by the homebrew community at large but alas that will never happen even when one of the big names mentions me nothing happens

Take a look at my Ninja (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=277587)please

my samurai (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=278499)

My witch doctor (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=244811)

My Primal (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=264875)

My Soul Blade (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=288404)

My healer (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=272245)

my grappler (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=247200)

My monk (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=266100)

and lastly

My Hexblade (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=283621)

please :)

I am aiming for 'tier' 3 for them but 'tier' 4 will suffice.

gooddragon1
2013-10-30, 04:54 PM
Reviewed your ninja (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?p=14964862#post14964862).

Please review my hexer (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=311375) if you have time.

Amnoriath
2013-10-30, 11:00 PM
I have my Incarnum PrC fixes here.
Incandescent Champion fix
http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?p=16080244#post16080244
Incarnum Blade fix
http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=291173

WaylanderX
2013-10-31, 03:56 AM
Hello Ngilop,

I have a nice clichee Dragon Rider (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?p=16065048#post16065048) prc I need some feedback at. It needs Tome of Battle and Draconomicon to work (Martial initiating and dragons) but for the rest, it should be pretty explanatory.

On a side note, if you want, you can pm me the links to your homebrew which you want PEACHed. I'll send you my feedback as a PM, to prevent thread necromancy. I'll hear from you if you want to exchanged a few PEACHes ^^. I have some artifacts and disciplines in the making if you're further interested.

Cheerio,
WaylanderX

Draconi Redfir
2013-11-01, 12:06 AM
if you want something simple i'm always looking for seccond opinions on a Written language (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=311251) i've been working on recently. just note that the image on the first post is obsolite now, my most recent post has the updated version after some changes.

nonsi
2013-11-01, 04:15 AM
here is a list of things of mine you can critique.

one day I hope ot be recognized by the homebrew community at large but alas that will never happen even when one of the big names mentions me nothing happens

Take a look at my Ninja (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=277587)please

my samurai (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=278499)

My witch doctor (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=244811)

My Primal (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=264875)

My Soul Blade (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=288404)

My healer (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=272245)

my grappler (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=247200)

My monk (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=266100)

and lastly

My Hexblade (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=283621)

please :)

I am aiming for 'tier' 3 for them but 'tier' 4 will suffice.


Regarding your Monk (not posting there, because it's borderline thread necromancy... but you can bump it if you feel like it, because it's your thread):

Acrobatics - not enough to count.
Ki Strike - not enough to count.
Slow Fall - inferior to featherfall
Wholeness of Body - not enough to count
Bonus Ability - nice build-versatility, but it seems like all could be enlightenments (i.e. seems a bit like a filler feature).
Fists of Fury - requires proper wording.
Unrestrained Combat - specify that attacking does not force the monk to end her movement, and that she may complete her full movement after attacking.
Diamond Body - nice. I'm stealing this one
Diamond Soul - should have a clause that a monk can let spell effects through as a free action.
Ex-Monks - lose that one, as well as the alignment restriction.

CinuzIta
2013-11-02, 08:47 PM
I'm willing to peach both your hexblade (I can immediaty tell you that I like what I see) and your witch doctor (even tough I'd like to have some details on the concept/fluff, since I'm not familiar with it). So if you can post on those thread I'll peach them as soon as I can! (also, sorry for not having done that before, but I hadn't seen your post with the classes on this thread)

In exchange for the second peach, could you peach back my magus archetype? You can find it here:

http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=312140

ngilop
2013-11-04, 08:46 PM
Hexer reviewed here (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=16356615&postcount=6)

SOrry just don't know much abotu incanrum to accurately critque it.


Dragon Rider revieewed Here (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=16357085&postcount=24)

im going to pass on the language thing.. no way i cna ever think that creating a whole new language is anywhere close to 'simple' and I do not want to spned the next few years of my life studying a language i am never going to use in my day to day life.

Dragon age in pathfidner..here (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=16357155&postcount=5)

Draconi Redfir
2013-11-04, 08:57 PM
...i'm not asking you to spend years on a languge you're never going to use though? i'm just asking for a seccond opinion. a "does it look good and if not what do you think could be changed", nothing else.

Rizban
2013-11-04, 09:27 PM
My Soul Blade (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=288404)

I'll write a review for this. Bump that thread if you'd like me to post it, as I'm not willing to necro post.

ngilop
2013-12-01, 02:42 PM
I have recently been making fixed PrCs (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=311379) id like those other thna the requestees to give aonce over and let me know.

also.. I am fine with anybody giving me more requests

I have a list of the various PrCs ive done spoilered at the bottom.. my GHostwalker iss till unfinished as I cannot think of a capstone.. and request a homebrew has not been helpful :(

Grod_The_Giant
2013-12-01, 03:36 PM
My Seer (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?p=16426183#post16426183) never seemed to gather any attention. I'll trade critique for critique here.

Naomi Li
2013-12-01, 08:00 PM
My "race" (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=316718) that I created (using the Pathfinder create a new race rules) that I built for flavour and a decent amount of power would be something I would love to see some reviewing on.

ngilop
2013-12-02, 03:14 PM
I almost forogt..

also having some people take a look at my NPC classes (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=317055)would be nice

ngilop
2014-01-04, 05:05 PM
Ive been working on a big Fighter revision project (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=318268) and AM looking for more ideas. post #11 (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=16568597&postcount=11)has my fluff for a fighter, so it be nice to get a few words on if that sound decent or not.

I still am coming up blank with what i should put in as a 17th level ability.

im thinking of bumping momentum down to like lvl 9 or 10 and adding in a new ability that lets the fighter be a bit more deadly.



for 17th I am throwing the idea around in my head of a universe rending strike that duplicates Gate, but only the travel aspect.. In a long ago thread I suggested that FIghters should gett abilities that replciate the power of heracles and such.. and one of the thing heracles did was sunder a damn mountain top to travel to the underwolrd.. seems pretty gate ish to me.

classy one
2014-01-04, 07:25 PM
I'm gonna post a peach for your fighter revision. I'll take an IOU for some of my future homebrews.

Zman
2014-01-04, 08:34 PM
I'll give your Fighter a more complete once over. I posted in your initial stages and haven't revisited it.

My main project, Zman's E10 Varian (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?p=16710332#post16710332) designed to be used with my Overhaul (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?p=14687166#post14687166) but also as a stand alone Variant.

It's large, but I'd appreciate any time spent on any portion of it.

Erberor
2014-01-05, 08:50 PM
I would love some feedback on my prestige class the Stormlord Blade!

link http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=322760

Amechra
2014-01-05, 10:31 PM
I would like some nice, detailed feedback on my Husk (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=320653).

Please don't even mention Effing Worms (dear lord people, it's supposed to emulate Dune Sandworms!)

EDIT: I'll critique it, Erberor.

Waker
2014-01-05, 10:39 PM
My Seer (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?p=16426183#post16426183) never seemed to gather any attention. I'll trade critique for critique here.

I looked over your Seer for you. I did so in thanks for looking over my Soul Singer (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=322814).

Sardonik
2014-01-06, 01:01 PM
I'd very much like to get a second oppinion on my Dragon Age for Pathfinder E6 (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=323617) project. Mainly, I'm interested in if you think the magic schools and specializations are out of the whack.

ngilop
2014-01-09, 10:51 PM
Did my critique here (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=16760548&postcount=11) for sardonik's Dragon Age :)

CryWolfCorrupt
2014-01-10, 10:08 AM
Honestly I just want to get any of my homebrew for 3.5 looked at. I'll take a look at your Witch Doctor and another class or two if you want and PM you my PEACH.

Shadow Shifter (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=320682): A savage melee class that turns the shadows into material weapons.

Strategist (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=322270): A leader class (no Leadership feat necessary) buffer that grants bonuses to the party as long as certain criteria are met. Eventually gains the ability to potentially avoid spells.

Opportunist (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=324492): A class I've been thinking of for a while but don't know how to work it. It is based almost solely on Attacks of Opportunity, but adds a lot of new options for having them provoked against you (if an enemy attacks and misses, large or larger enemies provoke multiple, etc).

I am not by any means asking you to look over all of them... just whichever you feel like. I am new to homebrewing and want as much feedback as I can get.

Sardonik
2014-01-10, 01:49 PM
P.E.A.C.H. (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=16764102&postcount=48) of nglops fighter fix.

Kazyan
2014-01-10, 01:50 PM
I have a bunch of races and racial substitution levels here (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=324076), and would like some feedback--not necessarily limited to the newest ones.

ngilop
2014-01-13, 04:17 PM
Critiqued Kazyan racial substitution classes (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=16782873&postcount=12)

Critiqued Strategist (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=16782939&postcount=8)

ngilop
2014-02-09, 04:30 PM
I also have a Vale Walker (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=323920), my attempt at a tier 3 druid


im going to start working on dragon shaman tomorrow :)

Rizban
2014-02-09, 06:02 PM
I'm always looking for input on R'E6 (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=273643)...

Mighty_Chicken
2014-02-09, 11:07 PM
I want my Ogre Changeling (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=329946) race PEACHed! I'll read your classes soon.

Alabenson
2014-02-10, 12:39 AM
If anyone has an opportunity, could someone please give me some feedback on my Feyblessed (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=329798) class.

ngilop
2014-02-13, 05:14 PM
Critque for Ogre changling here (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=16991235&postcount=5)

Critique for teh Fey Blessed here (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=16991594&postcount=7)

Here is my Dragon Shaman (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=330720), if things seem a bit wierd, read my 2nd post that explains why i did what I did to the dragon shaman

BelGareth
2014-02-13, 08:09 PM
I'll take a gander at some of these when I get the time, for the time being, a subscription of this thread.

Grod_The_Giant
2014-02-21, 12:02 AM
I'll trade critiqe for critique on the new version of my Beastman (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=328962). (Or at the very least, an answer to my question in the second post)

ngilop
2014-02-21, 02:32 PM
critique for beastman here (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=17046682&postcount=3)

SillySymphonies
2014-02-22, 09:33 AM
I am going to critque the homebrew in a vacuum. When I critque I assume its only the PHB and the class itself. Unless other wise directed.

I am a null-optimizer. In that while i can do decent optimization (power attack>weapon focuz.. why is toughness even a feat?) I am nowhere near the abilityt hat most of the GiTP0ers are. Optimization is the last ( if i ever care about it anyways) think I am thinking of when I make a character.
Which makes you an ideal reviewer for the kind of game I tend to run. Kudos! :smallsmile:

If you have the time, would you be so kind to review my fire archon (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=330392) base race? It's a LA 0 fire elemental, in the same vein as warforged (LA 0 constructs), shifters (LA 0 lycanthropes) and changelings (LA 0 doppelgangers).

If you like, I could review something similar brief of yours.

Thanks. :smallsmile:

Alabenson
2014-02-22, 10:35 AM
I've added a critique of the Beastman.

If anyone has an opportunity, I'd love some comments on my Templar (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=332566) clss.

Grod_The_Giant
2014-02-22, 11:21 AM
I've added a critique of the Beastman.

If anyone has an opportunity, I'd love some comments on my Templar (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=332566) clss.
You scratched my back, so I've scratched yours.

ngilop
2014-02-22, 12:15 PM
critique for Fire archon here (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=17052318&postcount=2)

Critique for Templar here (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=17052385&postcount=3)

Fax Celestis
2014-02-23, 01:13 AM
Reviewed your hexblade. Can you review my wizard (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=309205)?

EDIT: also looked at Grod's Beastman, though I cant say I was really any help.

ngilop
2014-02-23, 12:00 PM
Looked at your wizard Not gonna get infractioned for thread necro as now I am super leary about anything like that.. And I got the same opinion of it as I did the pathfinder advanced playtest.

Is this supposed to be a Wizard on crack and steroids? if so then you did a bang up job. I do like the 'eternal' spell.


I think this class only has a place if the PhB Wizard, PhB Sorcerer, warmage, dread necro, beguiler, and warlock are all replaced, Since you wizard does the same things but vastly in a superior way.

Its a class that I myself would never play. But I am just not a power player. So classes that I can tell are a bit too much out of the gate I steer away from, and I don't think there is a way to actually tone your wizard down.

Fax Celestis
2014-02-23, 03:20 PM
I'm not sure how you think it's mechanically superior. It has a rather severely limited spell list. It doesn't get access to the global sor/wiz list like PHB wizards do: the only spells it gets are the ones provided by its mastery and mysteries.

Jormengand
2014-02-27, 12:26 PM
Hmm... don't suppose you could do something with my Base Prestige classes, the Arcane Archer (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=332782) has already been done, but the Arcane Trickster (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=332972) would be nice.

I can do something in return, too.

Ralcos
2014-02-27, 12:28 PM
Here's my class.
Any comments / tips / criticisms are accepted.

Spiritualist
http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=333912

Jormengand
2014-02-27, 01:18 PM
Here's my class.
Any comments / tips / criticisms are accepted.

Spiritualist
http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=333912

I can get that if you could get mine?

ngilop
2014-02-27, 01:38 PM
Arcane Trickster critquehere (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=17087031&postcount=2) I like the idea behind it, but feel it needs some polishing.

Spritualist critique here (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showpost.php?p=17087289&postcount=13)

Wargamer
2014-02-27, 01:46 PM
I would have liked to get some feedback on my Runecaster (link in sig). It's seriously old now though so posting may count as thread necromancy. :(

But for reference, it's intended to replace Wizards / Sorcerers in the setting it's used in.

Edit: I'm going to submit some Prestige Classes for it, so that'll justify (I hope!) any attempts people make to comment...

ngilop
2014-05-06, 12:56 AM
GOt a new homebre class, this time i dipping my hand in pathfidner.

i did a marshal port over and I think ive done allright so far.. still missing a few abilities I think.

http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?346471-Marshal-re-tool-for-PF

ben-zayb
2014-05-06, 01:19 AM
I'd appreciate some PEACHing for my Scout fix (sig below). Mechanically it should ideally be around (or a bit higher) the playing field as the ToB classes and Bard, except plenty higher in terms of archetypal scout roles of Perception and Stealth.

I'm not too familiar with PF, but if you have recent 3.5 projects I can do some PEACHing as well

Gildedragon
2014-05-06, 11:53 AM
Ben: I posted some thoughts on the scout.

I am looking for critiques (or at least naming aid) for my magic-user generic spellcaster (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?346515-3-5-Magic-User-A-Multi-Purpose-Base-Class-PEACH)

Ralcos
2014-05-08, 01:33 PM
I built another class and I want some criticism!

http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?347231-The-Adept-(PEACH)

Hopefully it's good.

MagnusExultatio
2014-05-09, 05:37 PM
I could definitely use some criticism/critique for my grappler.

http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?338858-The-Grappler-A-DnF-Conversion!

Ralcos
2014-05-15, 11:24 AM
I revised my Adept class.
It now has a Table! Yay!

http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?348787-Adept-(Revised)-(3-5-PEACH)

ngilop
2018-09-22, 12:06 AM
What up

I have a Fighter re-tool for pathfinder (http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?568764-Pathfinder-Fighter-Re-Tool) if anybody wants to take a look at it and give me some hints and suggestions.

Cestes
2018-09-22, 02:24 PM
If you would be willing to, I would love for you to look at a Martial Initiator that I made a few days ago, It has passed my DM's balance check, for two campaigns, and I am somewhat proud of it... It uses the Akashic Magic rules, Path of War stuff, most notably the Radiant Dawn Discipline. There is a Playtest Version of the Radiant Dawn discipline available here: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1bxvxLR5IDD2J_EHV0n60dxoS504TPwZXeun7HeKumN4/edit#


My class is called the Celestial Adept: https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/d/1A9ZMA0iiWxxxey_jxI-IS-BbgRYQY1nVWIdyrct-mlo/edit?usp=sharing

(I think something might have gone wrong with the hyperlink feature, here is the straight link: https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/d/1A9ZMA0iiWxxxey_jxI-IS-BbgRYQY1nVWIdyrct-mlo/edit?usp=sharing )

Even if you never get around to looking at it, or decide that it isn't worth your time, thank you for considering it, and letting me share my brainchild here.

Hope you have a great day!

Cestes
2018-10-03, 07:53 PM
I revised my Adept class.
It now has a Table! Yay!

http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?348787-Adept-(Revised)-(3-5-PEACH)


Heya, Ralcos! I reviewed your Adept, and I have to say, I loved it! I appreciate the amount of versatility that they gain through the class, and I've been looking for something like this, which allows me to dabble in a little bit of everything. I would suggest makin' the "Casting Points" a bit clearer, in both their usage, and their role in the class as a whole. I wish you the best in your endeavors with revising, and using the class, and I hope you will take the time to look at my class!

(Shamelessly inserting my homebrew for review)

The Celestial Adept (https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pbhJVLN6cO0NnbrYeUYCKnwvvGsz4V7YFvbUrBUsI-A/edit?usp=sharing)