Novawurmson
2013-11-20, 03:53 PM
Hello! I'm Nova Wurmson, and I'm writing a few undead-themed disciplines for a future Dreamscarred Press Path of War product. Adreas has given the go ahead to move into playtesting, so I'm here to ask your help in making these the best that they can be.
The playtest document can be found here (https://docs.google.com/document/d/19L9z9MHrK7npDqD0IWrkb0HwV_LgCljr0LUFebmO1z8/edit?usp=sharing)!
These four disciplines are meant to embody both the fighting styles of living creatures trying to emulate the undead as well as the fighting styles of undead themselves. The four disciplines and their themes are as follows:
Eternal Guardian - A loyal undead that defends allies with unshakeable oaths and sinister darkness.
Insidious Desire - A sinister undead that torments opponents with bleed effects and hemomancy before going in for the kill.
Hungering Mind - An evolving undead that spreads plague and starvation.
Vengeful Revenant - An unrelenting undead that will not be put to rest.
At this point, I'm looking for feedback in every area, including balance, themes, clarity, grammar, spelling, punctuation, and style. What discipline feels the least cohesive to you? What parts of each discipline would you like to see refined, and which parts of each would you like to see discarded? What are some maneuvers that feel "out of place" either by power, concept, or something else entirely?
FAQ:
What's the Path of War?
The original announcement (http://dreamscarredpress.com/dragonfly/ForumsPro/viewtopic/p=35160.html) sums it up best: It's a Pathfinder reintroduction and expansion of the martial initiator system first released in the Tome of Battle.
Where can I read more about the actual systems?
This thread (http://dreamscarredpress.com/dragonfly/ForumsPro/viewtopic/t=3066.html) has links to each class, including archetypes, organizations, and feats.
The playtest document can be found here (https://docs.google.com/document/d/19L9z9MHrK7npDqD0IWrkb0HwV_LgCljr0LUFebmO1z8/edit?usp=sharing)!
These four disciplines are meant to embody both the fighting styles of living creatures trying to emulate the undead as well as the fighting styles of undead themselves. The four disciplines and their themes are as follows:
Eternal Guardian - A loyal undead that defends allies with unshakeable oaths and sinister darkness.
Insidious Desire - A sinister undead that torments opponents with bleed effects and hemomancy before going in for the kill.
Hungering Mind - An evolving undead that spreads plague and starvation.
Vengeful Revenant - An unrelenting undead that will not be put to rest.
At this point, I'm looking for feedback in every area, including balance, themes, clarity, grammar, spelling, punctuation, and style. What discipline feels the least cohesive to you? What parts of each discipline would you like to see refined, and which parts of each would you like to see discarded? What are some maneuvers that feel "out of place" either by power, concept, or something else entirely?
FAQ:
What's the Path of War?
The original announcement (http://dreamscarredpress.com/dragonfly/ForumsPro/viewtopic/p=35160.html) sums it up best: It's a Pathfinder reintroduction and expansion of the martial initiator system first released in the Tome of Battle.
Where can I read more about the actual systems?
This thread (http://dreamscarredpress.com/dragonfly/ForumsPro/viewtopic/t=3066.html) has links to each class, including archetypes, organizations, and feats.