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Raistlin1040
2007-02-21, 12:30 PM
Another quest? (http://img226.imageshack.us/my.php?image=talissueone1yr.png)
Mcdonalds (http://img478.imageshack.us/my.php?image=issuetwojpg9xl.jpg)
Min-maxer (http://img225.imageshack.us/my.php?image=issuethree4is.jpg)
enter the doodman (http://img368.imageshack.us/my.php?image=talissuethree5it.png)
Freelance wealth distributor (http://img151.imageshack.us/my.php?image=issuefive2jf.png)
A shocking revelation (http://img61.imageshack.us/my.php?image=talissue6ow1.png)
A word from the Author (http://img250.imageshack.us/my.php?image=talissue7ei2.png)
Okay I've been making these comics for a while but these are my salvaged ones. I like making them and if anyone wants me to I'll keep making new ones. I'll try to get 1 up per week but it might not happen. If it's late I'll either get it up the next day or, in rare cases, get a guest author to write a filler strip.

Q. What's this thread for?
A. It's for people talking about my comic and me posting new ones.

Q. DOOD! Why can't you draw worth crap?!
A. It's called a buddy. Created by Runescape players a while back, there are now many kinds.

Q. Can I help you?
A. Sure! If you want to be a guest writer just drop me a PM and I'll call on you sometime.

Q.I LOOOOOOOOVE your comic!
A. That's not a question. But thank you.

Q. Okaaaaaay... Can I give you Fan Art?
A. Yes. If you have drawn a picture, used a program like GIMP or Inkscape, or used Paint, Pm it to me and I'll put it on the first post. If you want to be anonomous specify and I won't give your name. Also please don't send me buddy art. I already have it all.

Q.OMG!!!!1111 You used Doodman's, Kereo Takana's, and Wallo's names! I'm telling!
A. Save it. I already have permission from the aforementioned to use their names.

Q. Can I send you a character in buddy form?
A. Sure. I'll try to fit them into a comic somehow. Again PM me.

Q. Can I send you plot ideas?
A. Sorry but no. I want my plots (excluding guest fillers) to be 100% thought by me.

Also if anyone has anymore questions, you guessed it, PM them to me and I'll answer them on the FAQ.
Raistlin1040
2007-02-22, 08:33 PM
Could someone even try to care? Please?
Raistlin1040
2007-02-24, 06:23 PM
Nobody cares but I have a new comic.
theKOT
2007-02-24, 06:56 PM
That's because it is not funny and impossible to read. The background in the early comics burns my eyes and the characters positioning is confusing. The text placement is also off. It reminds me of fighter's comics.
Raistlin1040
2007-02-24, 07:14 PM
Click it. It makes it bugger. And if you're just going to criticize it then go bug someone else. I'm not in the mood.
Flabbicus
2007-02-24, 11:40 PM
Criticism does make a comic better, which I'm sorry to say, you're "comic" does need. So I wouldn't be so quick to discount it. I would suggest not using a sprite/whatever that is format for a comic as there are a lot of them, and they typically stink.

And you can't click the comic to make the text bigger, unless you are referring to the actual links. The text is nigh incomprehensible, either choose a different font, color, make text boxes, or do all of the above. Some of the comics make no sense, and I have trouble determining who is talking and what they are saying.


You can't expect everyone who reads your comic to act with such positive remarks for the "comics" as the fictional responses you posted in the thread did.
Raistlin1040
2007-02-24, 11:48 PM
It's the style I've always used and I'm sticking to it. The style may suck but that's not enough reason for me not to try. Second you do need to click them. It says at the bottom (Or top) Clicking it enlarges the entire comic. And why do you keep putting comic in quotes?

edit: I have no issue with criticism. It's the people who say: "Your comic sucks. Go find something else to do." That bugs me
Flabbicus
2007-02-24, 11:51 PM
Because it is not a real comic yet, you are just hosting it on a thread and posting links to the image site. It doesn't say that clicking on it (on the bottom or top) will enlarge it when I go there. It must be something that only you can see as it is your account. I would recommend Smackjeeves or Drunkduck if you want to find a free comic site, but they have tons of comics just like that, in similar formats I might add.
Raistlin1040
2007-02-24, 11:53 PM
I don't have an account first. Second it's above the comic. It says "This image has been scaled down to fit your computer screen. Click on it to show it in the original size"
Flabbicus
2007-02-25, 08:14 AM
I think it only says that for your account, I can't see any place on the page that says it has been scaled down.
Raistlin1040
2007-02-25, 10:37 AM
Take a screenshot and PM it to me. It should be there.
theKOT
2007-02-25, 10:52 AM
It's the style I've always used and I'm sticking to it. The style may suck but that's not enough reason for me not to try. Second you do need to click them. It says at the bottom (Or top) Clicking it enlarges the entire comic. And why do you keep putting comic in quotes?

edit: I have no issue with criticism. It's the people who say: "Your comic sucks. Go find something else to do." That bugs me
But I didn't. I simpy stated the things that are wrong with it. It really does bear a strong resemblance to fighter's comics (http://www.nuklearpower.com/daily.php?date=010817). The text placement is off the dialogue is monotonous and flat and there is nothing funny or interesting about it. This is very specific criticism, not just blanket statements about how terrible your comic is. I never suggested that you go do something else either, so you shouldn't have any problem with my criticism, according to your classification.
Raistlin1040
2007-02-25, 10:59 AM
Well other than changing my style (Which I'm not doing) what would you reccomend?
theKOT
2007-02-25, 11:30 AM
Well other than changing my style (Which I'm not doing) what would you reccomend?
Arrange your text so that it is easy to read in the correct order. Add some punctuation and bolding and italics to give it some feeling. And try not to have colors that make it hard to differentiate, like that black on grey in the first dungeon strip.

Also...
Well... your writing is really an uninspired hodge-podge of stuff I've read in other comics. Try to find your own Identity. You weren't so much ripping off OOTS as being completely unoriginal all together.

Try to develop your characters a little more. Once you have developed unique characters, your jokes and even plotlines will flow naturally from their interactions instead of feeling so forced. Additionally, it should be easy to make original jokes off of original characters.

Slow the plot down. It's hard to make heads or tails of what is going on. Pace yourself a little more and expand upon ideas.


It needs a lot of work, and in this retool period I might suggest starting over. Whether or not you have a storyline in mind, it would be better to just restart with a comprehensible beginning.
Raistlin1040
2007-02-25, 11:34 AM
Well I don't really want to start over but I would like to develop my PC's more. Perhaps some backstory strips are in order?
theKOT
2007-02-25, 11:48 AM
Well I don't really want to start over but I would like to develop my PC's more. Perhaps some backstory strips are in order?
You pretty much have to if you aren't going to start over. However, I can't figure out what happened why in the strips. I would highly recommend starting over.
Raistlin1040
2007-02-25, 11:52 AM
Well the first 5 were basicly intro stips so I could work the NPC's in. The 6th was the intro of a plot. And the 7th was just me venting.