Ninja_Grand
2014-09-28, 02:07 AM
Well hello Playground. I am here to post some of my merger writing for you to enjoy/throw in a fire. Tell me what you think!
Please Evaluate And Critique Honestly
Endlessly dose the beast wrack
the rusted bars that hold him back.
Weakened by his maddened howl
It seems soon he will be on the prowl
The wardens care, but they cant meet his eyes
For they know the reason that the moon cries
This vile entity shares his fate
With the Titan that you all elate
So beware, for you all have earned his ire
Soon at his claws you will expire
You know who he is, so speak his name!
The name of the daemon who dances in flame!
(Ps, if you read them all, remember that last stanza!)
Such a tragedy my eyes witnessed that day
When her innocence started to decay
He dress was as short as her sight
Of what the men wanted from her that night
She used to know wrong from right
But when he grabbed her, she did not fight
Now in the bedroom they play
And such acts are the source of my dismay
You have damaged shoes, with worn down souls
Ripped shirts, Cut from the storms of the world
Come on in, the rain will pass with time
Welcome travelers, Hurry before the fire grows cold.
Goodbye friends, we have patched the holes.
The road is long, but you’ll be fine
Warm clothes, dried from the warm sun
You have sturdy shoes, with stable souls
As I walk through the forest, the most enticing scent crosses my nose. A wonderful mix of honey, chocolate, and cinnamon. Where its coming from I do not know, But I'm hell bent on finding out.
Following the smell, I have the strangest thought. What if this is a trap, a lure to some foul fate? What if I'm already caught? I ignore these thoughts, I have to find the source.
The smell comes from the clearing ahead ahead. Looking into it my eyes fall on the most beautiful creature. A seductive mix of bee and woman, she beckons me closer. When i approach she shows me her most interesting feature; A stinger straight to the heart.
One day while walking though the park, I came across the most amazing girl. Her perfume smelt of honey, chocolate and cinnamon. With a smile she sends my heart into a whirl. Bit by the love bug, it all felt like a dream.
With each step I bring my weight onto Creation.
Weight not of body, but of mind.
Weight of my daemon cursing me to damnation
And how I forget the ones who are left behind.
Each step tells a tale, one heard before.
How a boy takes the mantle of a man
"This is my lie." he says, his eyes to the floor.
So he wanders around, thinking of a new plan.
My story is not new, nor well written.
A mishmash of plots bordering on insane.
Feeling surround by wolfs, but I'm just a kitten.
I guess poems are how I explain.
One who dances with Fire will get burned.
But what if someone burns brighter than any flame?
Can he dance with such an inferno without losing his name?
Beware Fire, for the tables may have turned.
Long do I wish to feel your deadly embrace.
I have tried, but all I felt was but an ember.
I gave you my heart, but you returned it to sender.
Fighting your heat is a trial I must face
But today I build up this facade of bravado!
Fearing my soul once more, love has made me become a jewel!
Taking Fire by the hand, I shall not become its fuel!
This love is chaos, but i enjoy its tornado!
My sweet Fire, who burn her name into my soul.
I found that I can’t live without your touch.
Your lovey face has become my crutch.
Look upon a Madman and his Fire, about to lose control
And last one...
Return to the cinders ghosts of mine
for the fire in me has faded
Soon to extinguish, soon to die
Return while you can, lest you be hated.
Return to the cinders ghost of anger
The beast in the rusted cage
Warded by those you endanger
I no longer need your endless rage
Return to the cinders Ghost of Sadness
Your tears that formed the stones
But without I have not achieved greatness
I no longer need your woeful bones
Return to the cinders ghost of joy
Always I searched for your light
My hope kept you coy
I no longer need your great delight
Return to the cinders ghosts of mine
be still, lay with the ashes at last
So much to say, so little time
But forgive those who live in my past
One more, Please peach.
Edit: 20 views and no thoughts? Please, say ANYTHING that comes to mind
Please Evaluate And Critique Honestly
Endlessly dose the beast wrack
the rusted bars that hold him back.
Weakened by his maddened howl
It seems soon he will be on the prowl
The wardens care, but they cant meet his eyes
For they know the reason that the moon cries
This vile entity shares his fate
With the Titan that you all elate
So beware, for you all have earned his ire
Soon at his claws you will expire
You know who he is, so speak his name!
The name of the daemon who dances in flame!
(Ps, if you read them all, remember that last stanza!)
Such a tragedy my eyes witnessed that day
When her innocence started to decay
He dress was as short as her sight
Of what the men wanted from her that night
She used to know wrong from right
But when he grabbed her, she did not fight
Now in the bedroom they play
And such acts are the source of my dismay
You have damaged shoes, with worn down souls
Ripped shirts, Cut from the storms of the world
Come on in, the rain will pass with time
Welcome travelers, Hurry before the fire grows cold.
Goodbye friends, we have patched the holes.
The road is long, but you’ll be fine
Warm clothes, dried from the warm sun
You have sturdy shoes, with stable souls
As I walk through the forest, the most enticing scent crosses my nose. A wonderful mix of honey, chocolate, and cinnamon. Where its coming from I do not know, But I'm hell bent on finding out.
Following the smell, I have the strangest thought. What if this is a trap, a lure to some foul fate? What if I'm already caught? I ignore these thoughts, I have to find the source.
The smell comes from the clearing ahead ahead. Looking into it my eyes fall on the most beautiful creature. A seductive mix of bee and woman, she beckons me closer. When i approach she shows me her most interesting feature; A stinger straight to the heart.
One day while walking though the park, I came across the most amazing girl. Her perfume smelt of honey, chocolate and cinnamon. With a smile she sends my heart into a whirl. Bit by the love bug, it all felt like a dream.
With each step I bring my weight onto Creation.
Weight not of body, but of mind.
Weight of my daemon cursing me to damnation
And how I forget the ones who are left behind.
Each step tells a tale, one heard before.
How a boy takes the mantle of a man
"This is my lie." he says, his eyes to the floor.
So he wanders around, thinking of a new plan.
My story is not new, nor well written.
A mishmash of plots bordering on insane.
Feeling surround by wolfs, but I'm just a kitten.
I guess poems are how I explain.
One who dances with Fire will get burned.
But what if someone burns brighter than any flame?
Can he dance with such an inferno without losing his name?
Beware Fire, for the tables may have turned.
Long do I wish to feel your deadly embrace.
I have tried, but all I felt was but an ember.
I gave you my heart, but you returned it to sender.
Fighting your heat is a trial I must face
But today I build up this facade of bravado!
Fearing my soul once more, love has made me become a jewel!
Taking Fire by the hand, I shall not become its fuel!
This love is chaos, but i enjoy its tornado!
My sweet Fire, who burn her name into my soul.
I found that I can’t live without your touch.
Your lovey face has become my crutch.
Look upon a Madman and his Fire, about to lose control
And last one...
Return to the cinders ghosts of mine
for the fire in me has faded
Soon to extinguish, soon to die
Return while you can, lest you be hated.
Return to the cinders ghost of anger
The beast in the rusted cage
Warded by those you endanger
I no longer need your endless rage
Return to the cinders Ghost of Sadness
Your tears that formed the stones
But without I have not achieved greatness
I no longer need your woeful bones
Return to the cinders ghost of joy
Always I searched for your light
My hope kept you coy
I no longer need your great delight
Return to the cinders ghosts of mine
be still, lay with the ashes at last
So much to say, so little time
But forgive those who live in my past
One more, Please peach.
Edit: 20 views and no thoughts? Please, say ANYTHING that comes to mind