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cloudncali
2006-07-04, 06:32 PM
Hello. Iív started a web comic a wile ago and have recently started it agen I donít have a web site but Iím working on that (my HTML sucks) so far I have 5 pages and a cover but these are old ones im currently going a huge graphic overhall on it so bare with me with the crapping drawing. This comic is OOTS-ish but its less stick figure and more ummm non...stickfigure-ish any way here are the first five pages
Cover:
http://img179.imageshack.us/my.php?image=heroslandscover8yj.gif
Episode 1
http://img284.imageshack.us/my.php?image=heroslandse0018nh.gif
Episode 2
http://img312.imageshack.us/my.php?image=heroslandse0020pb.gif
Episode 3
http://img312.imageshack.us/my.php?image=heroslandse0035ma.gif
Episode 4
http://img284.imageshack.us/my.php?image=heroslandse0048jx.gif
Episode 5
http://img179.imageshack.us/my.php?image=heroslandse0058zo.gif
here is a sample of the Graphics over hall
http://img214.imageshack.us/my.php?image=bayrima2gq.jpg
Please only constructive criticism Please I donít want to here:
YOUíRE DRAWING SUCKS
Or
THIS COMIC SUCKS!!!
So please try to be nice.
-cloudncali

Ing
2006-07-04, 06:36 PM
is...it translated into english because it is not making sense with the synthax....

or is it supposed to be that way in a "SOMEONE SET US UP TEH BOMB!!! ALL YOUR BASE ARE BELONG TO US!!!" sort of way?

The Prince of Cats
2006-07-04, 06:36 PM
You want 'break' in episode 4, not brake.

Other than that, the art is not distracting and the story has not got far enough for me to judge the writing.

Sneak
2006-07-04, 06:40 PM
Please only constructive criticism Please I donít want to here:
YOUíRE DRAWING SUCKS
Or
THIS COMIC SUCKS!!!
So please try to be nice.
-cloudncali

YOUR DRAWING SUCKS! THIS COMIC SUCKS!

Oh. Wait. You didn't want to hear that? Well then. Ahem.

It's OK, but the spelling and grammar could use a little work (in the first comic it's painful). Other than that, well...in the alarm clock one I couldn't really tell what was going on, and there seems to be not much humor.

But keep working at it! With just a simple spellchecker, it could be a lot better.

cloudncali
2006-07-04, 06:54 PM
Thanks for the positive feedback. ;D yeah I know these are from a while ago, as I said Iím doing a graphic over hall.
I plan to use spell check more often and I am a horrible speller, always have been. But thanks again for a good feedback and I will up the graphic soon.
:D
edit: here is what the new ppl will look like
http://img214.imageshack.us/my.php?image=bayrima2gq.jpg

Sol
2006-07-04, 10:55 PM
overhaul.

also, I like the original artwork better than the new character sketch...it just looks like you're trying too hard.

Keep it simple, and use some sort of spell check software on the script before you add the text to the images.

Also, if you can, invest in Adobe Illustrator or another vector based graphic program, these look like you drew them in MS Paint.

bluish_wolf
2006-07-04, 11:11 PM
I think your problem lies in grammar, not spelling.

cloudncali
2006-07-05, 12:29 AM
Well yes I understand my spelling sucks and I should use spell check.


also, I like the original artwork better than the new character sketch...it just looks like you're trying too hard.

Well I donít like the old one because it looks like I did not try hard enough...


Also, if you can, invest in Adobe Illustrator or another vector based graphic program, these look like you drew them in MS Paint.

Yeah I got a better graphics program called graphics gale

Any way I did use paint on the old one and am currently working on a web site for the comic.

WANTED: Any one that can help me with web site design or maybe help me with HTML or PHP.
If you can help email me at [email protected] or give me a message on aim: cloudncali

ARMOURERERIC
2006-07-05, 01:36 AM
Thanks for the positive feedback. ;D yeah I know these are from a while ago, as I said Iím doing a graphic over hall.
I plan to use spell check more often and I am a horrible speller, always have been. But thanks again for a good feedback and I will up the graphic soon.
:D
edit: here is what the new ppl will look like
http://img214.imageshack.us/my.php?image=bayrima2gq.jpg


Mrs. Timbertoes from Highlights, lookin' fine!!!