Xerxelipse
2019-08-12, 08:50 AM
This is my second backstory ive ever wrote, im fairly new to dnd...anyway, i was hoping that by going on ther interwebs (lol) i might find some people willing to and wanting to help me fix any typing errors and plot screw ups. In this post i have two versions, the second of which is closer to my original idea. The second idea also banks on the fact that you can change the alignment on monsters such as metallic dragons which ten to lean toward the good alignment, so don't be too harsh on the idea if at all possible. I am also open to new ideas and alterations as well so if you have any good ideas im willing to listen.
Thank You!!!
My First Character,
Xerxelipse Ainrod
Smit Fang
Alcross Alabaster
Half-Elf
Paladin
Born in the North Ward slums of Waterdeep to a woman whose only memory is her name. Alcross is the bastard child of human Cecilia Alabaster and high elf Brindel Cinderpine. Born to a mother who couldn’t support her child and a father who had no interest in a half breed son, Cecilia thought it best to leave her child at the doorstep of a local temple, a temple of Bahamut, and disappeared. Being raised in a temple the clerics and paladins schooled him in manners and honor, grace and grit, as well as magic and sword. Though being of half elven blood he felt alone, humans seeing him as an elf and elves seeing him as a human. Trusting only the temple and Bahamut who had so welcomed him he had came across a half-elf paladin of Bahamut named Trinity Bismeld, gaining the trust of Alcross he had offered to take him in as a disciple and train him as a paladin. For two years he trained, finally by the time he had turned 17 he took an oath as a paladin of Bahamut. Four years passed as the two travelled and spread the word of Bahamut as well as divine judgment, Alcross learning to trust others along the way. Throughout the years Alcross had noticed his friend and mentor, Trinity, would occasionally disappear from time to time. After 8 years of fellowship together Alcross’ curiosity got the best of him, and confronted Trinity about it, getting only “It’s a personal project I’ve been working on for years no need to worry my friend.”
But something seemed off about his story, Trinity seemed nervous and a slight look of deception came across his face as he spoke. Alcross, even more curious this time decided to follow him, they walked for hours in the dead of night finally reaching a cave somewhere off the coast of the Dock Ward area, looking in the cave Alcross seen piles of gold, pearls,jewels, coral, and more beautiful treasures. As he snuck his way in further he saw what looked to be an adult bronze dragon, knowing that the metallic dragons are of good nature and all he walked up to it, quizzing it about his mentor Trinity and it’s name. The dragon nervous and shocked, pointed to the cave exit and said, “My name is Smite Fang and I know not where your friend may be but this is no place for a child like you.” Alcross confused, thanked the dragon, left the cave and returned to the temple shrugging of the whole experience. A couple weeks later when him and Trinity set out again, Alcross noticed Trinity was acting strange and wasn’t himself, when asked what's wrong his only reply was “It’s nothing to worry about Alcross, let’s just finish what we set out to do.”
That night Alcross would try again, this time making sure to follow closer. Following Trinity to the same cave, he sneaks in again, but as he enters the cave he watches as his friend and mentor change and grow into a large adult bronze dragon. Seeing this his first instinct is to pull his sword and get into a defensive stance, now completely visible to the bronze dragon, he yells, “WHO ARE YOU AND WHAT HAPPENED TO TRINITY BISMELD!” The bronze dragon now visibly shaken, looks at Alcross with a disheartening look and says, “Look kid it’s not like I wanted to deceive you but, y'know, not all metallic dragons are good. You really have seen too much I’m sorry.” Then the dragon lunged at him, Alcross barely dodging out of the way. This time Alcross looking disheartened says to the bronze dragon, “Then who are you…” The
dragon repeats and exclaims, “I am Smite Fang!” this time swinging his claws. The battle dragged on for not but two hours before both are worn and nearly broken when Alcross delivers the final killing blow, putting his friend and mentor to rest. Alcross taking a claw and a new name as a remembrance of the friend, mentor, enemy, and only genuine father figure he’s ever known. As he leaves the cave beaten, broken, and untrusting once again, he finds himself in search of friends who he can trust and answers long forgotten about his mother’s disappearance.
Bonds
Well known in temples across the continent, and has connections with many of the temples that worship Bahamut.
Flaws
Untrusting of others who claim they know whats its like to feel alone.
Personality Traits
Stutters when really nervous.
Ideals
“If your willing to hurt others, I’m more than willing to pass divine judgment on you”
Alignment
Lawful Good
Age Height Weight Eyes Skin Hair
(23yr) (5’11) (185lb) (Light Gray) (Lightly Tan) (Long Deep Blonde)
(often put in a bun)
and here in an alternative version under, in your opinion which is better and please go easy on me...im new to writing so my grammar and plots thing are pretty bad lol
Born in the North Ward slums of Waterdeep to a woman whose only memory is her name. Alcross is the bastard child of human Cecilia Alabaster and high elf Brindel Cinderpine. Born to a mother who couldn’t support her child and a father who had no interest in a half breed son, Cecilia thought it best to leave her child at the doorstep of a local temple, a temple of Bahamut, and disappeared. Being raised in a temple the clerics and paladins schooled him in manners and honor, grace and grit, as well as magic and sword. Though being of half elven blood he felt alone, humans seeing him as an elf and elves seeing him as a human. Trusting only the temple and Bahamut who had so welcomed him he had came across a half-elf paladin of Bahamut named Trinity Bismeld, gaining the trust of Alcross he had offered to take him in as a disciple and train him as a paladin. For two years he trained, finally by the time he had turned 17 he took an oath as a paladin of Bahamut. Four years passed as the two travelled and spread the word of Bahamut as well as divine judgment, Alcross learning to trust others along the way. Throughout the years Alcross had noticed his friend and mentor, Trinity, would occasionally disappear from time to time. After 8 years of fellowship together Alcross’ curiosity got the best of him, and confronted Trinity about it, getting only “It’s a personal project I’ve been working on for years no need to worry my friend.”
But something seemed off about his story, Trinity seemed nervous and a slight look of deception came across his face as he spoke. Alcross, even more curious this time decided to follow him, they walked for hours in the dead of night finally reaching a cave somewhere off the coast of the Dock Ward area, looking in the cave Alcross seen piles of gold, pearls,jewels, coral, and more beautiful treasures. As he snuck his way in further he saw what looked to be an adult bronze dragon, knowing that the metallic dragons are of good nature and all he walked up to it, quizzing it about his mentor Trinity and it’s name. The dragon nervous and shocked, pointed to the cave exit and said, “My name is Smite Fang and I know not where your friend may be but this is no place for a child like you.” Alcross confused, thanked the dragon, left the cave and returned to the temple shrugging of the whole experience. A couple weeks later when him and Trinity set out
again, Alcross noticed Trinity was acting strange and wasn’t himself, when asked what's wrong his only reply was “It’s nothing to worry about Alcross, let’s just finish what we set out to do.”
That night Alcross would try again, this time making sure to follow closer. Following Trinity to the same cave, he sneaks in again, but as he enters the cave he watches as his friend and mentor change and grow into a large adult bronze dragon. Seeing this his first instinct is to pull his sword and get into a defensive stance, now completely visible to the bronze dragon, he yells, “WHO ARE YOU AND WHAT HAPPENED TO TRINITY BISMELD!” The bronze dragon now visibly shaken, looks at Alcross with a disheartening look and says, “Look kid it’s not like I wanted to deceive you but, y’know not all metallic dragons are good. You really have seen too much I’m sorry.” Then the dragon lunged at him, Alcross barely dodging out of the way. This time Alcross looking disheartened says to the bronze dragon, “Then who are you…” The dragon repeats and exclaims, “I am Smite Fang!” this time swinging his claws. The battle dragged on for not but two hours before both are worn and nearly broken when Alcross delivers the final killing blow, putting his friend and mentor to rest. Alcross taking a claw and a new name as a remembrance of the friend, mentor, enemy, and only genuine father figure he’s ever known. As he leaves the cave beaten, broken, and untrusting once again, he finds himself in search of something long forgotten. Lost and unknowing of his fate, he had broken his oath to his deity and had found himself stealing and murdering those who had crossed him- just as Trinity had done to him. For three years this went on until he had discovered a guild had arose in a nearby city southeast of Waterdeep, they were new and were recruiting. They were called “The Order of the Crows”, but common folk just call them “The Murder”. Alcross being known for his new identity Smite Fang, a ruthless paladin whos mercy lends itself to only those who beg, had decided to join. Four years were gone in merely seconds, with many close calls with death, he held a high position in the guild. One night after straying so far from his former deity Bahamut, in his dreams he had a vision, a vision of his long forgotten mother, in the vision his mother stood there in the streets wearing a beggers robe and in her arms a babe, a babe he understood was him. Then the vision changes to his mother standing at the enterance of a home most common folk live in next to her a man in his mid twenties, a man of similar facial composer to his, the man wore a farmers attire and had looked to have worked all day. Just before the vision fades he hears a voice, the voice of a woman, she says “Alcross find your mother, find her and live like you dreamed of so long ago.” The vision fades as he wakes up to find the moring sun stretching across the room, immediatly on his feet he flees the guild. A day goes by, then a week, seven months goes by trying to rekindle the flame with his goddess Bahamut, taking back the oath he once held. This time bound and determined to do what is right, he sets out on his vision quest to find his mother.
Bonds
Well known in temples across the continent, and has connections with many of the temples that worship Bahamut as well as many crime syndicates in and near Waterdeep, even feared by those who recognize him.
Flaws
Is quick to anger and sometimes even getting violent
Personality Traits
Often responds to someone when they say the word smite, even refering to just smiting something.
Ideals
“If your willing to hurt others, I’m more than willing to pass divine judgment on you”
Alignment
Lawful Good
Age Height Weight Eyes Skin Hair
(31yr) (5’11) (185lb) (Light Gray) (Lightly Tan) (Long Deep Blonde)
(often put in a bun)
Thank You!!!
My First Character,
Xerxelipse Ainrod
Smit Fang
Alcross Alabaster
Half-Elf
Paladin
Born in the North Ward slums of Waterdeep to a woman whose only memory is her name. Alcross is the bastard child of human Cecilia Alabaster and high elf Brindel Cinderpine. Born to a mother who couldn’t support her child and a father who had no interest in a half breed son, Cecilia thought it best to leave her child at the doorstep of a local temple, a temple of Bahamut, and disappeared. Being raised in a temple the clerics and paladins schooled him in manners and honor, grace and grit, as well as magic and sword. Though being of half elven blood he felt alone, humans seeing him as an elf and elves seeing him as a human. Trusting only the temple and Bahamut who had so welcomed him he had came across a half-elf paladin of Bahamut named Trinity Bismeld, gaining the trust of Alcross he had offered to take him in as a disciple and train him as a paladin. For two years he trained, finally by the time he had turned 17 he took an oath as a paladin of Bahamut. Four years passed as the two travelled and spread the word of Bahamut as well as divine judgment, Alcross learning to trust others along the way. Throughout the years Alcross had noticed his friend and mentor, Trinity, would occasionally disappear from time to time. After 8 years of fellowship together Alcross’ curiosity got the best of him, and confronted Trinity about it, getting only “It’s a personal project I’ve been working on for years no need to worry my friend.”
But something seemed off about his story, Trinity seemed nervous and a slight look of deception came across his face as he spoke. Alcross, even more curious this time decided to follow him, they walked for hours in the dead of night finally reaching a cave somewhere off the coast of the Dock Ward area, looking in the cave Alcross seen piles of gold, pearls,jewels, coral, and more beautiful treasures. As he snuck his way in further he saw what looked to be an adult bronze dragon, knowing that the metallic dragons are of good nature and all he walked up to it, quizzing it about his mentor Trinity and it’s name. The dragon nervous and shocked, pointed to the cave exit and said, “My name is Smite Fang and I know not where your friend may be but this is no place for a child like you.” Alcross confused, thanked the dragon, left the cave and returned to the temple shrugging of the whole experience. A couple weeks later when him and Trinity set out again, Alcross noticed Trinity was acting strange and wasn’t himself, when asked what's wrong his only reply was “It’s nothing to worry about Alcross, let’s just finish what we set out to do.”
That night Alcross would try again, this time making sure to follow closer. Following Trinity to the same cave, he sneaks in again, but as he enters the cave he watches as his friend and mentor change and grow into a large adult bronze dragon. Seeing this his first instinct is to pull his sword and get into a defensive stance, now completely visible to the bronze dragon, he yells, “WHO ARE YOU AND WHAT HAPPENED TO TRINITY BISMELD!” The bronze dragon now visibly shaken, looks at Alcross with a disheartening look and says, “Look kid it’s not like I wanted to deceive you but, y'know, not all metallic dragons are good. You really have seen too much I’m sorry.” Then the dragon lunged at him, Alcross barely dodging out of the way. This time Alcross looking disheartened says to the bronze dragon, “Then who are you…” The
dragon repeats and exclaims, “I am Smite Fang!” this time swinging his claws. The battle dragged on for not but two hours before both are worn and nearly broken when Alcross delivers the final killing blow, putting his friend and mentor to rest. Alcross taking a claw and a new name as a remembrance of the friend, mentor, enemy, and only genuine father figure he’s ever known. As he leaves the cave beaten, broken, and untrusting once again, he finds himself in search of friends who he can trust and answers long forgotten about his mother’s disappearance.
Bonds
Well known in temples across the continent, and has connections with many of the temples that worship Bahamut.
Flaws
Untrusting of others who claim they know whats its like to feel alone.
Personality Traits
Stutters when really nervous.
Ideals
“If your willing to hurt others, I’m more than willing to pass divine judgment on you”
Alignment
Lawful Good
Age Height Weight Eyes Skin Hair
(23yr) (5’11) (185lb) (Light Gray) (Lightly Tan) (Long Deep Blonde)
(often put in a bun)
and here in an alternative version under, in your opinion which is better and please go easy on me...im new to writing so my grammar and plots thing are pretty bad lol
Born in the North Ward slums of Waterdeep to a woman whose only memory is her name. Alcross is the bastard child of human Cecilia Alabaster and high elf Brindel Cinderpine. Born to a mother who couldn’t support her child and a father who had no interest in a half breed son, Cecilia thought it best to leave her child at the doorstep of a local temple, a temple of Bahamut, and disappeared. Being raised in a temple the clerics and paladins schooled him in manners and honor, grace and grit, as well as magic and sword. Though being of half elven blood he felt alone, humans seeing him as an elf and elves seeing him as a human. Trusting only the temple and Bahamut who had so welcomed him he had came across a half-elf paladin of Bahamut named Trinity Bismeld, gaining the trust of Alcross he had offered to take him in as a disciple and train him as a paladin. For two years he trained, finally by the time he had turned 17 he took an oath as a paladin of Bahamut. Four years passed as the two travelled and spread the word of Bahamut as well as divine judgment, Alcross learning to trust others along the way. Throughout the years Alcross had noticed his friend and mentor, Trinity, would occasionally disappear from time to time. After 8 years of fellowship together Alcross’ curiosity got the best of him, and confronted Trinity about it, getting only “It’s a personal project I’ve been working on for years no need to worry my friend.”
But something seemed off about his story, Trinity seemed nervous and a slight look of deception came across his face as he spoke. Alcross, even more curious this time decided to follow him, they walked for hours in the dead of night finally reaching a cave somewhere off the coast of the Dock Ward area, looking in the cave Alcross seen piles of gold, pearls,jewels, coral, and more beautiful treasures. As he snuck his way in further he saw what looked to be an adult bronze dragon, knowing that the metallic dragons are of good nature and all he walked up to it, quizzing it about his mentor Trinity and it’s name. The dragon nervous and shocked, pointed to the cave exit and said, “My name is Smite Fang and I know not where your friend may be but this is no place for a child like you.” Alcross confused, thanked the dragon, left the cave and returned to the temple shrugging of the whole experience. A couple weeks later when him and Trinity set out
again, Alcross noticed Trinity was acting strange and wasn’t himself, when asked what's wrong his only reply was “It’s nothing to worry about Alcross, let’s just finish what we set out to do.”
That night Alcross would try again, this time making sure to follow closer. Following Trinity to the same cave, he sneaks in again, but as he enters the cave he watches as his friend and mentor change and grow into a large adult bronze dragon. Seeing this his first instinct is to pull his sword and get into a defensive stance, now completely visible to the bronze dragon, he yells, “WHO ARE YOU AND WHAT HAPPENED TO TRINITY BISMELD!” The bronze dragon now visibly shaken, looks at Alcross with a disheartening look and says, “Look kid it’s not like I wanted to deceive you but, y’know not all metallic dragons are good. You really have seen too much I’m sorry.” Then the dragon lunged at him, Alcross barely dodging out of the way. This time Alcross looking disheartened says to the bronze dragon, “Then who are you…” The dragon repeats and exclaims, “I am Smite Fang!” this time swinging his claws. The battle dragged on for not but two hours before both are worn and nearly broken when Alcross delivers the final killing blow, putting his friend and mentor to rest. Alcross taking a claw and a new name as a remembrance of the friend, mentor, enemy, and only genuine father figure he’s ever known. As he leaves the cave beaten, broken, and untrusting once again, he finds himself in search of something long forgotten. Lost and unknowing of his fate, he had broken his oath to his deity and had found himself stealing and murdering those who had crossed him- just as Trinity had done to him. For three years this went on until he had discovered a guild had arose in a nearby city southeast of Waterdeep, they were new and were recruiting. They were called “The Order of the Crows”, but common folk just call them “The Murder”. Alcross being known for his new identity Smite Fang, a ruthless paladin whos mercy lends itself to only those who beg, had decided to join. Four years were gone in merely seconds, with many close calls with death, he held a high position in the guild. One night after straying so far from his former deity Bahamut, in his dreams he had a vision, a vision of his long forgotten mother, in the vision his mother stood there in the streets wearing a beggers robe and in her arms a babe, a babe he understood was him. Then the vision changes to his mother standing at the enterance of a home most common folk live in next to her a man in his mid twenties, a man of similar facial composer to his, the man wore a farmers attire and had looked to have worked all day. Just before the vision fades he hears a voice, the voice of a woman, she says “Alcross find your mother, find her and live like you dreamed of so long ago.” The vision fades as he wakes up to find the moring sun stretching across the room, immediatly on his feet he flees the guild. A day goes by, then a week, seven months goes by trying to rekindle the flame with his goddess Bahamut, taking back the oath he once held. This time bound and determined to do what is right, he sets out on his vision quest to find his mother.
Bonds
Well known in temples across the continent, and has connections with many of the temples that worship Bahamut as well as many crime syndicates in and near Waterdeep, even feared by those who recognize him.
Flaws
Is quick to anger and sometimes even getting violent
Personality Traits
Often responds to someone when they say the word smite, even refering to just smiting something.
Ideals
“If your willing to hurt others, I’m more than willing to pass divine judgment on you”
Alignment
Lawful Good
Age Height Weight Eyes Skin Hair
(31yr) (5’11) (185lb) (Light Gray) (Lightly Tan) (Long Deep Blonde)
(often put in a bun)