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    Ettin in the Playground
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    Default Re: Playground Writers Workshop (Read 1st Post)

    Kallisti's "From Absent Friends"
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    I like this a lot. The pacing in the second paragraph was a little bit off somehow in my mind, I don't know if I was reading it with the wrong inflection or what. The first line, perhaps, could have a few of the words switched around ("Must I say" instead of "I must say"), if you wanted. It's not really that bad, just something I like in poetry.

    Good job, though. Tell us how that goes!
    Last edited by SamBurke; 2011-06-13 at 10:39 PM.
    James/TheDoge Avatar by Ceika!

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    *snip* ...Hands down the funniest class critique ever... *snip*
    I cannot tell you the number of times I laughed while reading this.

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