Asthix, thank you very much for your feedback. Of course I appreciate ego-stoking (its rather hard not to), but your praise helps point out strong points and your criticism has much merit.

Yes, I did mean both types of funny, playing into how I did use double meanings many times.

I do realize some of the lines aren't exactly poetic, but I was feeling like adding colloquialism to a poem would both point out the absurdity of philosophical poems, and make it more earthy and less scholarly. However, I am going to look at the phrases you mention for flow.

I capitalized the Pain of all pains because it is the worst pain, the King Pain, one that threatens to end life as one knows it, although my imagination isn't fertile or worldly enough to imagine what that horror would be.