2019-03-06, 12:22 AM (ISO 8601)
Re: [PF] Prologue to the End - (Open to New Interest)
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Originally Posted by Nishai
It's a decent start, the only major thing I would add is what else does Ise have besides her family to keep her going. If Kalius really did try to break her out after she was exiled, he's probably dead. If not done in by the Inquisition in an effort to hide their dirty secret, then by the Club, after likely being imprisoned himself. The Cayla Vronds you know is a cold and meticulous woman, and nothing is off the table when it comes to keeping tight reins on her Gales.
This comes back to the 'intrinsic motivation', again. You'll need something else to fight through the day if your entire family is murdered, or worse. What else defines her and drives her forward? She survived the Long Night, and only lost an arm, no small accomplishment; and before the rise of the Club into its present fame. There is evidently a powerful initiative that has gotten her this far, even before she married, that needs to have a chance to be fleshed out.