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2010-07-21, 07:06 PM (ISO 8601)
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Plot line poem
Edited for horrible typos:(dessert =/= desert, thrown =/= throne)
Back story: I'll be running a campaign (not sure whether it will be in 4e or E6, but that's neither here nor there) and I am planning on having a well known childrens song be the main driving force behind the campaign.
In the distant history of the setting a great hero (Andras) defeated the father of all Vampires (Vectus), heralding a new time of peace and prosperity. So much so that the year is currently recorded in terms of A.V. (After Vectus) the countries (Andrasin) currency has the profile of Andras (the countries first king) on one side. However, we're now at 960 A.V. and most of his accomplishments and steeped in legend; fact indistinguishable from fiction.
Along some plot line the adventurers will find (and maybe rescue) a scholar type who has found some original writings of Andras. Here is my first crack at them (spoiler for length):
Spoiler
In a time of need
someone shall heed
the desperate cry of the nation.
So heed this rhyme
and you will find
a tool to aid your mission.
Although he was banished
I never managed
to slay whome I assailed.
So I forged a blade
specifically made
to succeed where I had failed.
In dragons lair
near maiden fair
up on her lofty tower
you'll find the first
of which you thirst.
Just don't forget to shower!
Dry desert air
combs through your hair
as you stare at your reflection.
Sky at your feet
into the deep
You'll find another section.
The forest fey
by light of day
shields your hidden prize.
Search by night
near pools of blight,
don't believe your eyes.
The final piece
is in the east.
along the rocky coast.
A giants throne,
you'll wish you'd flown.
But climbing ducks the ghost.
Seek out the map
to find my trap
shining in the sun.
Bind him in Oath
then smash them both
And he will be undone.
In this poem are clues for finding four locations that will all hold sections of a map to a blade of awesome "Andras' Oath". Which can be used to destroy the BBEG of the setting who the players will probably not even meet for a damned long time.
What I would love from you:
1) Tell me what you glean from the four location stanzas. What would you expect from the location it is describing?
2) I also intend to have much of the poem re written into common children songs that have been twisted from years of verbal communication. Here are some reworded stanzas that I have worked out:
Spoiler
In a time of need
Andras did heed
the desperate cry of the nation.
So give a cheer-o
for our great hero
who's risen to his station.
A dragons lair
A maiden fair
A purple painted turtle
Fulfill your vows
See to the cows
Before the milk should curdle
Anyone with any fun re-writes for other verses or someone more poetically minded than myself who sees a better way for something to be written will be awarded one internet.
Thanks,
-BreawLast edited by Breaw; 2010-07-21 at 08:06 PM.
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2010-07-21, 07:31 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: Plot line poem
Okay.
I'm imagining a dark cave, the lair of an ancient and famous dragon, which is located by a lake that is marked by an enormous statue of a fair lady upon a tall pedestal. The cave also contains a river that feeds into the lake. The map piece is in a chest inside a secret area that lies hidden behind a waterfall.
I'm picturing some kind of upside down dungeon in the desert, accessed by magically entering a horizontal mirror.
A living forest which moves around during the daytime, obscuring the treasure that it protects. At night, it's possible to locate, but there is noxious poison and illusions guarding its resting place.
Some type of really high place? For some reason, it's difficult or near impossible to fly there. I can't think of any good metaphors for "ghost."
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2010-07-21, 07:43 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: Plot line poem
1) Tell me what you glean from the four location stanzas. What would you expect from the location it is describing?
Dry dessert air
combs through your hair
as you stare at your reflection.
Sky at your feet
into the deep
You'll find another section.
The forest fey
by light of day
shields your hidden prize.
Search by night
near pools of blight,
don't believe your eyes.
The final piece
is in the east.
along the rocky coast.
A giants thrown,
you'll wish you'd flown.
But climbing ducks the ghost.Last edited by Vaynor; 2010-07-21 at 07:44 PM.
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2010-07-21, 08:02 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: Plot line poem
Last edited by waterpenguin43; 2010-07-21 at 08:03 PM.
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2010-07-21, 08:02 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: Plot line poem
I'm not sure how well I can try to understand your clues, since anyhting like this will probably rely a lot on setting specific fluff and backstory. But here are my first thoughts:
In dragons lair
near maiden fair
up on her lofty tower
you'll find the first
of which you thirst.
Just don't forget to shower!
Dry dessert air
combs through your hair
as you stare at your reflection.
Sky at your feet
into the deep
You'll find another section.
The forest fey
by light of day
shields your hidden prize.
Search by night
near pools of blight,
don't believe your eyes.
The final piece
is in the east.
along the rocky coast.
A giants thrown,
you'll wish you'd flown.
But climbing ducks the ghost.Last edited by Yucca; 2010-07-21 at 08:15 PM.
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2010-07-21, 08:11 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: Plot line poem
I would say in a cave behind a waterfall,which is inhabited by a dragon?No idea of the maiden bit, perhaps is the name of the lake or something.
In a dungeon beneath an oasis in a desert, an oasis is the only thing I relate to a desert that reflects the sky.
In a forest, protected by some sort of illusion("don't belive your eyes") that is negated by the moon light? Near a part of the forest that is sick ("blight").
Well, this one is quite difficult IMO, so my guess will be a little crazy. In the east(of course) a kind of flying place (wish you'd flown).Not sure about ghosts.
Did I get one of them right?
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2010-07-21, 09:26 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: Plot line poem
I'm thinking it's in the tower of some maiden who was captured by a dragon. Obviously it's in a dragon's lair, but the maiden's tower part is potentially confusing. Perhaps the map piece is encased in a famous statue that was stolen by the dragon.
I'm going to agree with the people who suggested an oasis or desert lake. You could do a dungeon, but you could also get away with the desert itself being the dungeon, and the map fragment being hidden in a chest or other container at the bottom of the lake.
I'm going with a "fey forest", that is, a magically-altered forest, probably watched over by some powerful fey or elemental creature. During the day, the forest is cloaked by illusions of some kind, making it treacherous to navigate, and impossible to locate anything within it. At night, the illusions die down, but are replaced by some sort of poison gas in certain areas. The map fragment is in one of these pools.
Rocky coastline on the eastern edge of the kingdom or continent, the map fragment is likely in the possession of a cloud giant, who rules that area. The giant's lair is guarded by some form of bound undead, a powerful ghost or wraith, which is alerted to the approach of anyone who tries to reach the lair by flying. Ergo, one can climb up to the lair, and not trigger the ghost guardian thing.
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2010-07-21, 10:29 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: Plot line poem
I assume the "maiden" is a geographical feature and that if we don't wash ourselves (ritual purification?) something terrible will happen.
Dry desert air
combs through your hair
as you stare at your reflection.
Sky at your feet
into the deep
You'll find another section.
The forest fey
by light of day
shields your hidden prize.
Search by night
near pools of blight,
don't believe your eyes.
Also I am used to thinking of "fey" as plural (it can be singular or plural, but you don't usually think of a solitary pixie) but the grammar hear implies a single fey guarding the place. Dryads are often solitary but they are only "fey" in the D&D rulebook; they are not fey in legend or myth. So if this is a hint to a dryad guardian it kind of requires metagaming to make that connexion.
The final piece
is in the east.
along the rocky coast.
A giants throne,
you'll wish you'd flown.
But climbing ducks the ghost.
Seek out the map
to find my trap
shining in the sun.
In any case these two lines are more scary than helpful.
Bind him in Oath
then smash them both
I do really like the idea of the poem and especially having it distorted into children's songs. One thing that I wonder (it always seems hard for me to believe) is why he would leave a poem describing how to kill the vampire. I mean he obviously made the tools needed (sword, trap) to kill it and knew where to find it. As a great hero why didn't he just use the tools to slay it? Why make a map and leave it for someone else to get the glory?
Also if he did have a reason to leave it for someone else, why a riddle poem? Either make it public knowledge so everyone knows how to rid the land of the vampire or, if it has to be secret, don't give away hints that anyone with Int 13 can decipher.
That always nags at my mind with this kind of thing. It's largely because of the tone - the riddle is always written in the second person, instructing the PCs how to do something, which makes me wonder at the motivation.
An easy fix for that would be to write it in the first person, meant more as a memoir (either boasting his own success or bemoaning his own failure). People like to record their deeds and it does not beg a motive. Everyone understand the motive for recording your life accomplishments, it's the hope you won't be forgotten. Here is an example:
SpoilerIn a time of need
I endeavoured to heed
the desperate cry of the nation.
One fight I won
But my work is not done
Without the sword of salvation.
Although he was banished
I never managed
to slay whom I assailed.
So I sought a blade
That legend said
Would succeed where I had failed.
In dragon's lair,
near maiden fair,
up on her lofty tower
I first of the signs
I managed to find
But woe I did not shower!
That way instead of him making the sword and not using it (douche!) he sought the sword and never managed to get it, but the PCs can find the same clues he found and hope to do better.
Then again that stuff may not bother other people as much as it bothers me.
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2010-07-21, 11:23 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: Plot line poem
Thanks for everyone that has responded so far. I appreciate the input. There certainly is no 'right answers' considering the setting is going to be largely defined by how I decide to make the various locations hide the components of the map (and then build a world around them). But here are the locations as I envisioned them:
1)In dragons lair
near maiden fair
up on her lofty tower
you'll find the first
of which you thirst.
Just don't forget to shower!
SpoilerThe main hint is the dragons cave, but which dragons cave? I envision not too far from one cave is an old wizards tower with a statue of a women looking east on the roof. At the time of the adventure the tower will have crumbled in disrepair and the statue will likely have collapsed into the upper level of the tower. Further investigation of this site could be a small adventure in itself.
Anyway, the shower bit was initially just intended to hint at a trap that can be avoided by walking through a waterfall rather than taking the more obvious road.
2)Dry desert air
combs through your hair
as you stare at your reflection.
Sky at your feet
into the deep
You'll find another section.
SpoilerMost of you guys got it exactly as I had envisioned. One particularly pristine, clear pool of water with either a chest at the bottom or an entrance to a cave. Again, not sure how I'll run that one.
3)The forest fey
by light of day
shields your hidden prize.
Search by night
near pools of blight,
don't believe your eyes.
SpoilerThe thought on this one was just a forest known for having fey creatures in it (pixies most likely) that is magically protected by day. Think confusion for a forest. By night you can move around and find a site of an ancient battle where the land was permanently scarred. A magically hidden entrance to a sneaky place will lead you to the map.
4)The final piece
is in the east.
along the rocky coast.
A giants throne,
you'll wish you'd flown.
But climbing ducks the ghost.
SpoilerMy plan for this one was a huge 2 level coastal cliff that looks like a chair when viewed from the right angle. It will be the roosting spot for many nasties. Not exactly sure what the 'ghost' will be but I was originally picturing sort of an albino pterodactyl.
As to my motivations, here's the story as I see it. When Andras faced off against Vectus he was unable to destroy him (think lich, but without the need of a phylactery), but instead banished back to some deep dark place for a long time. However, knowing that someday he would likely return, he forged a blade that could kill him. Andras Oath works like this: You deal a killing blow to the demon (it'll be a pretty impressive demon killing dagger? sword? not sure...) and the blade traps the demon soul within itself. Destroying the blade afterwords will also destroy the demon.
Much of this knowledge will be aquireable with impressive lore checks or by asking the right sort of people.
So he then wrote a song and made sure it was sung by the masses (omitting the second and the last stanza so it wasn't totally obvious what he was writing about) in hopes that the knowledge will survive long enough to be useful. His hope was that in obscurity the blade would be safe until it was needed. It's terribly corny, but it seems to me that it will suffice.
The real edge that the party will have is that they will encounter the initial text, which will include the non time-degraded verses, even the ones he never made public.