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    Dwarf in the Playground
     
    BarbarianGuy

    Join Date
    Apr 2011

    Default Character Fluff - C&C Please

    http://www.myth-weavers.com/sheetvie...sheetid=289976

    Even though this specific character is an alternate for a currently running campaign, I'd like to use the fluff's concept for future characters in other campaigns. However, I'm a bit rusty when it comes to description: anything I should have edited?

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    Dwarf in the Playground
     
    BarbarianGuy

    Join Date
    Apr 2011

    Default Re: Character Fluff - C&C Please

    bumpity-bump

    A few notes: I'm only concerned with the fluff, not the crunch, and C&C = comment and criticize

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    Troll in the Playground
     
    SwashbucklerGuy

    Join Date
    Aug 2010
    Gender
    Male

    Default Re: Character Fluff - C&C Please

    What does the dragon need him for that's worth paying that kind of swag? Your guy's primary skill seems to be "bossing people around," which the dragon should have no trouble with. Also, shouldn't LeVanz have tried to leave right after his family never showed up, since he wasn't getting paid for his servitude after that?

    On a grammatical note, in the second sentence of the second Background & Other Info paragraph, "spurned" should be "spurred."

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