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    Pixie in the Playground
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    Default Herolands My new Web comic

    Hello. I’v started a web comic a wile ago and have recently started it agen I don’t have a web site but I’m working on that (my HTML sucks) so far I have 5 pages and a cover but these are old ones im currently going a huge graphic overhall on it so bare with me with the crapping drawing. This comic is OOTS-ish but its less stick figure and more ummm non...stickfigure-ish any way here are the first five pages
    Cover:
    http://img179.imageshack.us/my.php?i...dscover8yj.gif
    Episode 1
    http://img284.imageshack.us/my.php?i...ndse0018nh.gif
    Episode 2
    http://img312.imageshack.us/my.php?i...ndse0020pb.gif
    Episode 3
    http://img312.imageshack.us/my.php?i...ndse0035ma.gif
    Episode 4
    http://img284.imageshack.us/my.php?i...ndse0048jx.gif
    Episode 5
    http://img179.imageshack.us/my.php?i...ndse0058zo.gif
    here is a sample of the Graphics over hall
    http://img214.imageshack.us/my.php?image=bayrima2gq.jpg
    Please only constructive criticism Please I don’t want to here:
    YOU’RE DRAWING SUCKS
    Or
    THIS COMIC SUCKS!!!
    So please try to be nice.
    -cloudncali

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    Barbarian in the Playground
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    Default Re: Herolands My new Web comic

    is...it translated into english because it is not making sense with the synthax....

    or is it supposed to be that way in a "SOMEONE SET US UP TEH BOMB!!! ALL YOUR BASE ARE BELONG TO US!!!" sort of way?

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    Barbarian in the Playground
     
    The Prince of Cats's Avatar

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    Default Re: Herolands My new Web comic

    You want 'break' in episode 4, not brake.

    Other than that, the art is not distracting and the story has not got far enough for me to judge the writing.

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    Troll in the Playground
     
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    Default Re: Herolands My new Web comic

    Quote Originally Posted by cloudncali
    Please only constructive criticism Please I don’t want to here:
    YOU’RE DRAWING SUCKS
    Or
    THIS COMIC SUCKS!!!
    So please try to be nice.
    -cloudncali
    YOUR DRAWING SUCKS! THIS COMIC SUCKS!

    Oh. Wait. You didn't want to hear that? Well then. Ahem.

    It's OK, but the spelling and grammar could use a little work (in the first comic it's painful). Other than that, well...in the alarm clock one I couldn't really tell what was going on, and there seems to be not much humor.

    But keep working at it! With just a simple spellchecker, it could be a lot better.

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    Pixie in the Playground
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    Default Re: Herolands My new Web comic

    Thanks for the positive feedback. ;D yeah I know these are from a while ago, as I said I’m doing a graphic over hall.
    I plan to use spell check more often and I am a horrible speller, always have been. But thanks again for a good feedback and I will up the graphic soon.
    :D
    edit: here is what the new ppl will look like
    http://img214.imageshack.us/my.php?image=bayrima2gq.jpg

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    Bugbear in the Playground
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    Default Re: Herolands My new Web comic

    overhaul.

    also, I like the original artwork better than the new character sketch...it just looks like you're trying too hard.

    Keep it simple, and use some sort of spell check software on the script before you add the text to the images.

    Also, if you can, invest in Adobe Illustrator or another vector based graphic program, these look like you drew them in MS Paint.

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    Bugbear in the Playground
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    Default Re: Herolands My new Web comic

    I think your problem lies in grammar, not spelling.

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    Pixie in the Playground
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    Default Re: Herolands My new Web comic

    Well yes I understand my spelling sucks and I should use spell check.

    also, I like the original artwork better than the new character sketch...it just looks like you're trying too hard.
    Well I don’t like the old one because it looks like I did not try hard enough...

    Also, if you can, invest in Adobe Illustrator or another vector based graphic program, these look like you drew them in MS Paint.
    Yeah I got a better graphics program called graphics gale

    Any way I did use paint on the old one and am currently working on a web site for the comic.

    WANTED: Any one that can help me with web site design or maybe help me with HTML or PHP.
    If you can help email me at [email protected] or give me a message on aim: cloudncali

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    Dwarf in the Playground
     
    SwashbucklerGuy

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    Default Re: Herolands My new Web comic

    Quote Originally Posted by cloudncali
    Thanks for the positive feedback. ;D yeah I know these are from a while ago, as I said I’m doing a graphic over hall.
    I plan to use spell check more often and I am a horrible speller, always have been. But thanks again for a good feedback and I will up the graphic soon.
    :D
    edit: here is what the new ppl will look like
    http://img214.imageshack.us/my.php?image=bayrima2gq.jpg

    Mrs. Timbertoes from Highlights, lookin' fine!!!

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