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Thread: Herolands My new Web comic
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2006-07-04, 06:32 PM (ISO 8601)
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Herolands My new Web comic
Hello. I’v started a web comic a wile ago and have recently started it agen I don’t have a web site but I’m working on that (my HTML sucks) so far I have 5 pages and a cover but these are old ones im currently going a huge graphic overhall on it so bare with me with the crapping drawing. This comic is OOTS-ish but its less stick figure and more ummm non...stickfigure-ish any way here are the first five pages
Cover:
http://img179.imageshack.us/my.php?i...dscover8yj.gif
Episode 1
http://img284.imageshack.us/my.php?i...ndse0018nh.gif
Episode 2
http://img312.imageshack.us/my.php?i...ndse0020pb.gif
Episode 3
http://img312.imageshack.us/my.php?i...ndse0035ma.gif
Episode 4
http://img284.imageshack.us/my.php?i...ndse0048jx.gif
Episode 5
http://img179.imageshack.us/my.php?i...ndse0058zo.gif
here is a sample of the Graphics over hall
http://img214.imageshack.us/my.php?image=bayrima2gq.jpg
Please only constructive criticism Please I don’t want to here:
YOU’RE DRAWING SUCKS
Or
THIS COMIC SUCKS!!!
So please try to be nice.
-cloudncali
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2006-07-04, 06:36 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: Herolands My new Web comic
is...it translated into english because it is not making sense with the synthax....
or is it supposed to be that way in a "SOMEONE SET US UP TEH BOMB!!! ALL YOUR BASE ARE BELONG TO US!!!" sort of way?
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2006-07-04, 06:36 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: Herolands My new Web comic
You want 'break' in episode 4, not brake.
Other than that, the art is not distracting and the story has not got far enough for me to judge the writing.I played: Arin of the Silver Tongue, Barri Poari
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2006-07-04, 06:40 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: Herolands My new Web comic
Originally Posted by cloudncali
Oh. Wait. You didn't want to hear that? Well then. Ahem.
It's OK, but the spelling and grammar could use a little work (in the first comic it's painful). Other than that, well...in the alarm clock one I couldn't really tell what was going on, and there seems to be not much humor.
But keep working at it! With just a simple spellchecker, it could be a lot better.
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2006-07-04, 06:54 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: Herolands My new Web comic
Thanks for the positive feedback. ;D yeah I know these are from a while ago, as I said I’m doing a graphic over hall.
I plan to use spell check more often and I am a horrible speller, always have been. But thanks again for a good feedback and I will up the graphic soon.
:D
edit: here is what the new ppl will look like
http://img214.imageshack.us/my.php?image=bayrima2gq.jpg
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2006-07-04, 10:55 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: Herolands My new Web comic
overhaul.
also, I like the original artwork better than the new character sketch...it just looks like you're trying too hard.
Keep it simple, and use some sort of spell check software on the script before you add the text to the images.
Also, if you can, invest in Adobe Illustrator or another vector based graphic program, these look like you drew them in MS Paint.
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2006-07-04, 11:11 PM (ISO 8601)
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Re: Herolands My new Web comic
I think your problem lies in grammar, not spelling.
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2006-07-05, 12:29 AM (ISO 8601)
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Re: Herolands My new Web comic
Well yes I understand my spelling sucks and I should use spell check.
also, I like the original artwork better than the new character sketch...it just looks like you're trying too hard.
Also, if you can, invest in Adobe Illustrator or another vector based graphic program, these look like you drew them in MS Paint.
Any way I did use paint on the old one and am currently working on a web site for the comic.
WANTED: Any one that can help me with web site design or maybe help me with HTML or PHP.
If you can help email me at [email protected] or give me a message on aim: cloudncali
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2006-07-05, 01:36 AM (ISO 8601)
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- New Edoras (Ramona) California
Re: Herolands My new Web comic
Originally Posted by cloudncali
Mrs. Timbertoes from Highlights, lookin' fine!!!