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Thanks so much for your feedback!
Sick Licks is indeed all “while you are raging,” I’ll adjust the wording for clarity.
Burning Spectacle. The heavy lifting of this feature is done by Scorching Ray, but the other options are ribbons that communicate intent of the feature. And it’s true, the effect of Pyrotechnics isn’t increased with slot level, but it is harder to counter or dispel. I should actually add control flame Cantrip as well.
November Rain. It’s widely accepted that Storm of Vengeance is terrible. ~21d6 to 6 creatures, only 11d6 to anything else in its massive area, but it requires every target to fail every save for 10rds to get that damage and some of those are Con saves, statistically the strongest, it also doesn’t discriminate between allies and foes. With that in mind, the fact you’re hit with exhaustion means it’s practically a ribbon as well. You can take a minute to hurt a city real bad, maybe annoy a dragon if it’s hiding in its lair. Maybe flood a dungeon? But compared to the call lightning option, whose single target potential is 50d10 over the same time period. (Probably higher since it targets 10ft cubes so you’re likely to hit multiple creeps a few times)...
Is there ever a time a Druid is going to cast this instead of Shapechange?
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Thank you for the kind words.
I'd commentate but I'm inexperienced enough with 5e's ruleset that it'd be entirely fluff-based. Might try to give that a shot later."Come play in the darkness with me."
Thanks for the avatar, banjo1985!
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2020-08-03, 08:19 AM (ISO 8601)
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Thanks for the review and thoughts!
I tend to go towards more simplified classes, that still have option. I've found that 5e leans that way, give the player options while still making it simple enough to play once a month with only a quick read to play. I think that is part of the reason 5e is as popular as it is, so I want to keep the paradigm.
I actually left the "how far away can allies be and still hear you" purposely vague since I wanted the DM to be able to control that somewhat based on the circumstances. However, it would likely be simpler to just spell it out, that way it's less effort for the DM in general.
I'm never completely happy with my naming of things, and you are completely right there. Valor makes a lot of sense.
I'm not overly concerned with the Tundra Storm Herald since that one widely panned as one of the worst subclasses out there (I feel pretty safe stealing from Storm Herald and Purple Dragon Knight without anyone getting to upset), but there is one significant difference between this and the storm herald. Storm Herald is automatic each round, to get the benefit of the Song of Vitality the ally must spend a bonus action. For some builds this is a fairly significant cost.
I was trying to give something to casters and something to martials that represents focus on a battlefield. But completely tossed it for this instead.
14: Song of Survival: Allies who hear this song are spurred to endure even the most brutal conditions. When an ally takes cold, thunder, lightning, or fire damage, they may use their reaction to gain resistance to the damage source for that one strike. It only applies to a single cause of damage and doesn't last for additional damage types or hits.
Battle Rage was absolutely a pseudo bardic inspiration that is renamed and slightly nerfed.
To give it a slightly different feel and help with the damage problem, I actually changed it to add damage when you hit rather than give a bonus to chances of hitting. It seems more thematic and differentiates it more from Bardic Inspiration, plus then I can make the die grow without stepping on bardic inspirations toes.
An at will reaction seems like a little much to me, even if it's gated with a wisdom save. However, I bumped it to 2x Prof Mod to allow for more uses of it and bumping your overall damage.
You have a lot of very, very solid points here. I wanted this to be a support class for the barbarian for much of it's career, which is why I didn't have it affect the barbarian and I think I will keep it this way. Especially with the Song of Vitality, that is a lot of temporary hit points for a class that is already getting less damage due to raging. I will toss out the bonus action switching of song, because you are absolutely right about raging at will. There is no reason whatsoever to have this ability here.
Instead I tossed much of the level 14 ability to do this instead.
Transcendent Voice
At level 14, you can bolster yourself with your battlesongs. Additionally, each battlesong gains strength or new features and now affects you as well as your allies.
Additionally, your singing takes on a mythical property. Even if you are affected by silence or your allies are deaf, as long as they are within 30 feet and can see you they still gain the bonus from your Battlesong.
My goal here was to add power in the songs themselves and make it harder for someone to take the core subclass feature away from you.Pronouns he/him/his
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That makes sense on Dual Wielding, I just figured I would mention it since it seemed a little bit off to me. That's fine.
As for the specific vs general, I agree with you that it should be that way. I just thought it may be a good idea to spell it out to avoid confusion by someone else.
I think you are overly concerned about your uselessness within a silence spell. A silence spell isn't something that will come up all the time, and it isn't a bad thing for a PC to have an occasional encounter where they aren't all that great in it. I think them being able to immediately get rid of the silence isn't the solution either, it still seems to much to me. Worse comes to worse, you are in heavy armor, you can still get in the middle of combat with a decent AC and use the help action.
The "as a reaction to your turn" feels off to me still. As far as I know, all reactions in the official rules are "as a reaction to X." Still, I understand the concept, so it should work as it is currently.
Capping it at 20 would probably work, I think that it's still a little much as it is now changed. Personally I liked the finales. They are powerful, yes but it's high level and the cost is extremely high.
I like the changes, I don't have a whole lot else to add in.
Spoiler: Way of the Sublime Chord Re-review
The phrasing is much, much better on things. There is no need to worry about the confusion of rules, for those not as comfortable with the edition it can be confusing.
Svadhishthana/Sacral Chord (Orange, D)
3rd - Still a lot of attacks at this level. That's 4 attacks at level 3 for the cost of one ki. You will mow people down at levels 3-4 with this. It does get a lot less powerful overtime though. It would be interesting for a multiclass.
Anahata/Heart Chord (Green, F)
6th level- Frightened is actually a pretty powerful condition. If you are going to give it for more than 1 round allow them to make the save at the end of each of their turns to end it early.
Overall I really like the changes!
I like the changes to your song to make it less powerful. Are you concentrating on the song? As in, could I cast Dust Devil and then start singing in the next round? Use my action to keep singing and my bonus action to do things with the dust devil?
I don't think you need an action type to command your companion, the way you updated it clarified it nicely.
Your regalia is either clothing or jewelry. It could be argued that gauntlets are considered clothing. DMs prerogative though. It isn't worth arguing over at this point though since it's likely not a huge deal.
I agree on the reprise. Great changes made :)
That makes sense on the spell choices, it helps to understand your reasoning behind it.
For instruments of than lute and guitars you can make it a magical effect. There is no reason that a magical bard can't create a magic voice while playing their instrument. It would just be good fluff in there IMO.
As for the last two, if you make changes to them let me know and I will re-look over it.Pronouns he/him/his
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2020-08-03, 01:17 PM (ISO 8601)
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Storm of Vengeance is an army/city wrecker. Let's say you're facing an army of 100,000: Meteor Swarm will take out about 25,000 of them if they're standing shoulder-to-shoulder (1 foot apart) with massive overkill, but Storm of Vengeance is the solution, and you can cast it from hundreds of miles away on a clear day. It isn't weak, it's situational, a geopolitical spell.
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2020-08-03, 01:36 PM (ISO 8601)
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Any time you're casting a spell with a casting time of longer than 1 action, it uses your concentration.
https://www.dndbeyond.com/sources/ba...erCastingTimes
When you cast a spell with a casting time longer than a single action or reaction, you must spend your action each turn casting the spell, and you must maintain your concentration while you do so.Last edited by Damon_Tor; 2020-08-03 at 01:37 PM.
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2020-08-03, 01:59 PM (ISO 8601)
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Spoiler: Feedback for the AvantguardianAlways an entertaining read.
The perverse incentive to keep a negative charisma modifier is thematically appropriate, but I'm not sure that's the best way to do it. The subclass should probably include a way to voluntarily lower charisma, otherwise you're effectively locking any +2 CHA races out of the feature.
Strictly speaking, Wanna See my Collection doesn't work very well due to the rules for casting spells as a bonus action: you would be limited to thunder and enchantment cantrips to trigger the ability. You should probably include an exclusion to the bonus action casting rule in the ability.
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I added some fluff and examples to clarify the subclass. It is not about the greek goddesses as much as it is about the artistic concept of muses being sources of inspiration.
The warlock abilities are usually not that strong what I can see so I don't want to empower it to much. I am worried expanding the love song into giving disadvantages on enchantment spells might make it to strong with how it buffs spells like hold person. Contagious Captivation seems strong enough to me, the power level of warlock's level 14 abilities are rather low; e.g. a once per rest 15-28 hp self-heal with retaching body parts, a once per long rest automatic skip of death saves with a small AoE, a single target unlimited duration charmed condition.
I rewrote Infatuated fool to make it let you reroll saving throws, and added that Lyrics of love acts like poor man's subtle spell but it ends the love song to limit how often it can be used.Last edited by Fnissalot; 2020-08-04 at 04:29 AM.
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2020-08-08, 09:31 AM (ISO 8601)
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Finally got my submission up.
Monk subclass: way of the Golden bell
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Review time then :)
Spoiler: Way of the Golden bell
First of all I really like the concept and the fluff on this. It's a really cool and unique idea.
Please excuse the somewhat stream of consciousness review. I tend to write out my thoughts as I'm reading it so others can see my thought process and how I am processing the subclass.
Campanologist - History (Bells) is a little specific I don't see it coming up all that often, but hey it's more fluff than impactful. Kudos to the DM that can make it happen though. Is there a reason you went with perform (bells) rather than just giving proficiency with Bells as a musical instrument? I believe is equates to the same thing overall. The only questionable thing I see here is the optimizer in me wondering if I can carry around a big bell and make it a greatclub instead of a regular club (however, now that I think about it more that is exactly like a quarterstaff wielded 2 handed so there is literally no difference and my thought above is completely moot).
I'm assuming that all saves for Vibration Point abilities key off wisdom like Ki abilities?
I does feel a little bit odd to me that you aren't using your Ki for abilities as a monk, the use of a separate/unique point value really frees up the monk to land more stunning strikes and use the ki for base abilities.
Oscillating defense - This one actually feels a bit pointless to me due to the way that 5e sets up the object interactions and reactions. You are allowed to do this once per round, which causes you to knock a weapon to the ground. However, since it it still their turn they can simply use their object interaction to immediately pick the weapon back up and attack you again. The only time that would really be useful is in round 1 when everyone draws their weapon or when the bad guy has already used their object interaction. The problem I see is that if you didn't allow them to pick it back up, I would see it as overpowered. I honestly don't see a good middle ground for this sort of feature.
Gentle fist - A melee touch attack isn't a thing in 5e (like it was in 3.5 and earlier). I'm assuming that what you mean by this is that the attacks ignores all bonuses from armor, but you will need
Resonant strike - I read this as "if I hit with two unarmed strikes, I can also trigger this abliity" is that correct?
Shattering strike - Melee touch attacks is still not a thing (see above). Honestly, I'm not a huge fan of this ability. This feels like it's penalizing martials pretty hard. Are there any rules for armor being repaired in a PvP situation or anything like that? In a non-PvP situation it is likely okay, considering that you will likely need at least a round or two to get your VP high enough to be able to use it and most combats only last 3-4 rounds anyways.
Death Knell - This one is confusing me, power word kill has a 60 foot range. Does this have a 300 foot range? Also you have
"The sound of a bell tolling can be heard in a 300ft radius if target dies, Take 2d10 necrotic damage as a backlash if the target is unaffected."
Can you re-phrase that sentence, it is extremely confusing.
The abilities beyond level 3 seems good to me. I don't feel like anything is broken is problematic. The level 17 ability is a little bit boring, but I see the level 17 ability VP ability as more of the capstone than this ability. I also appreciate that there isn't an ability that allows you to start combat with X vp. I think doing that would cause some significant balance issues.
Also as a side note, if anyone needs an idea and can figure out how to make it work I would love to see a subclass based on the Garth Nix Sabriel series of book. I wanted to do it, but couldn't make it work myself.Pronouns he/him/his
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I missed this one. Thanks for taking a look under the hood. Both good catches on the technical end. I changed the expertise qualifier to "if your Charisma modifier is zero or less." That should bring those +2 CHA's back in the fold.
For Wanna See My Collection, I changed it to "Whenever you cast a spell of 1st level or higher of the Enchantment school or that deals Thunder damage to a creature, you may cast the spell Sleep as a 1st level spell as a bonus action without expending a spell slot." in the hopes that I'm creating a specific-beats-general type situation, and thus allow for Sleep to be cast as a bonus action. I think that works under the ruleset, but let me know if it doesn't.Spoiler: Homebrew Subclasses by RickAsWrittenRoguish Archetype – Bladecloak - 1st Place, Subclass Contest X
Martial Archetype – Irradiated - 1st Place, Subclass Contest XI
Warlock Otherworldly Patron – The Nilbog - 1st Place, Subclass Contest XII
Barbarian - Path of the Bureaucrat
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Thanks for your input! You make a lot of good points! I’m working on making some changes, should be up in not too long.
I’ve split up your feedback and my responses below:
Spoiler: Campanologist
Yeah, this was mainly for fluff and RP purposes. At least you’ll know what to look for when buying your next bell.
Maybe I made things too specific. I did mean for it to be an instrument that the monk knows how to play. Proficiency with it as an instrument does make a little more sense in that sense. I also thought a metal bell would hurt a lot if you got hit with it.
I did consider someone using a giant bell with a big handle. As entertaining as that might be, I thought the “2 handed” property would disqualify it’s use in martial arts. I guess if it’s treated as a quarter staff it would be ok.
Yes, I’ll include that in the text for clarity.
Yeah... Although having 2 different resource pools can seem a little awkward, I wanted my monk to be able to do cool stuff even if they are blowing all their Ki on stunning strike, . Also I feel like making use of and redirecting energy is very “monk-like”. I might simplify it a little if it seems too problematic.
Spoiler: Oscillating defense
Spoiler: Touch attacks
Shoot! you are right, still got some pathfinder and 3.5 influence in my understanding of the rules.
I wanted an attack that bypassed armor for “gentle fist” gonna have to rework that somehow. Would a flat +X to attack roll vs armored targets do the trick? Maybe just simplify it as attack with advantage...
I was a bit iffy about “shattering strike” myself. Armor is expensive, don’t really want to be facing any more enemies that can destroy it than I need to. Thinking of just replacing with the spell “Shatter” though then it is basically “gong of the summit”...
Spoiler: Resonant Strike
Spoiler: Death Knell
Yeah, I’ll clean that up a little. The 300 ft sound was fluff, but not really necessary. Spell was still meant to function as 60ft range.
The backlash necrotic damage and extra VP cost was because I thought it would be too powerful if it was just based on Ki or short rest. As a lvl 9 spell I though a monk shouldn’t be running around casting it left and right.
I’ll work on rephrasing it for clarity.
Spoiler: lvl abilities and starting with VP
Again, thanks a lot for your feedback. Still getting the hang of homebrewing and the 5e rules.
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Oscillating defense - I like this a lot better than before. It will work on natural weapons now when it didn't before and it just feels better.
Shattering Note - I think this is overpriced for the cost of it. By level 6, you are giving up 3 attacks (3d6 + dex*3) for a 3d8 AoE spell. Don't get me wrong, there are going to be times when it's useful since it's a AoE. However, it's pretty darn expensive with 4 VP and 2 Ki. Personally, I would drop the ki requirement.
Resonant strike - Not that I see it as a problem, but by level 11 you get this you can attack 4 times in a turn. So, getting 2 hits with unarmed strikes isn't that hard.Pronouns he/him/his
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● XV-Monk, Way of the Shrine Guardian
● XVI-Cleric, Madness Domain
● XVIII-Fighter, Chef
● XXI-Artificer, Battling Bowman
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Spoiler: Homebrew Subclasses by RickAsWrittenRoguish Archetype – Bladecloak - 1st Place, Subclass Contest X
Martial Archetype – Irradiated - 1st Place, Subclass Contest XI
Warlock Otherworldly Patron – The Nilbog - 1st Place, Subclass Contest XII
Barbarian - Path of the Bureaucrat
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Thanks!
Yeah I guess it is a little pricy. Decided to reduce the cost to 3 VP and 1 Ki. Kept the 1 Ki because it’s a 2nd level spell. Other monk subclasses that cast 2nd lvl spells usually cost Ki.
Hmm... While it could potentially trigger often, it burns Ki to fuel so it might be ok? You’ll just run out of steam earlier.
Maybe I could have it scale depending on how many hits you land in the round before you trigger... so if you land 2 you could trigger it, but maybe you want to risk trying to land a 3rd hit before you do?
Not sure.
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I think 3 VP and 1 Ki is fine for shatter. I also don't think that Resonant Strike needs to be changed, there is nothing wrong with giving the monk more chances to trigger their ability. I just wanted you to know about the increased chances if it mattered to you.
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● XV-Monk, Way of the Shrine Guardian
● XVI-Cleric, Madness Domain
● XVIII-Fighter, Chef
● XXI-Artificer, Battling Bowman
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Hey frens old and new. Feedback time and patches for College of Defiance! 'pologies for the delay, The Greys are a hell of a malady.
Spoiler: Patch Notes
Added replacement and targeting text for Beyond 11.
Removed silent Dispel Magic clause from Can't Stop the Rock.
Slightly tweaked HP --> THP damage conversion text.
Reduced the range of Song of Defiance to 25ft.
Creatures can now save every round against the Chorus of The Only Thing They Fear Is You.
Good Luck, You're F#$%^'d Distortion effect phrasing is reworked.
Good Luck, You're F#$%^'d Passive effect now grafts to the Attack action instead. (PEACH, is this too good?)
Can't Kill Us Chorus now stipulates that you must be able to hear the song (not deafened, Incapacitated or Unconcious are fine).
Animus Vox Passive caps at 20 AC.
Animus Vox Distortion phrasing changed.
Invoking a Finale now breaks magical silence within 300ft.
Stand Proud Finale phrasing changed.
End of an Empire Finale now lasts for another round.
Spoiler: Muse Warlock
Expanded Spell List: Seems fine.
Perpetually Charmed: Now this is a very interesting idea. Before reading the rest of this analysis riddle me this: is "You are always charmed by your muse" a flavor-only statement? If yes, skip the rest of this paragraph. Now, the meat. First, what even is the text surrounding status conditions? What does happen if an enemy casts charm person on you, then an ally does? Does it have no effect since you are already suffering the charmed condition? Does it cancel out? Does the new effect replace the old? Do they combine? What happens if you cast it on yourself? What does it mean to be charmed by to concept of the ocean or the wind? What happens if you enter a null-magic zone? If someone uses an effect on you that breaks mental statuses like charmed? If you receive mind blank, which can hedge out even gods? I don't know, but if there is no formal ruling, you may wish to make one. Or not if I'm just overcomplicating things.
Singing Love Songs: Clarify "By being affected by silence." Other than that, it seems fine. Is it necessary to gate Performance proficiency through this feature? I feel like just granting it or ignoring it would both be fine, since it's the sort of thing one would want on this sort of character all the time, not just while already doing this one specific thing. Important note: Can you talk while using this feature, or need the song be constant?
Lyrics of Love: All creatures, do you think, or just creatures you are targeting with the spell? Otherwise looks good, though certainly a bit specific.
Infatuated Fool: Pretty straightforward. Specify "Use your reaction" instead of "take a reaction" for clarity on the action cost (minor).
Contagious Captivation: Not bad, I like it, especially how it piggybacks off of another feature. I'd name it something like Love Beyond Death or somesuch though, as it is it sounds like a more offensive feature (though this is totally subjective). Also possible typo: *wear off, not bear off.
Not bad, pretty good. One thing I usually like to see with Warlock subclasses though is a Pact Boon and various Invocations, both for the pact, and for the boon.
Spoiler: Soul of Song
Music of Creation: Pretty standard.
Song of Destiny: Good feature, but why would anyone willingly fail the save? Do creatures have to save every turn even if they succeed? Also, should probably stipulate whether or not the creatures must be able to hear you in order to be affected. Oh, and, at who point during the casting is the slot consumed?
Fated Companion: So, me and my singing/talking Crab/Stirge walk into a bar...wait, can I have a singing/snapping to the rhythm crawling claw? Hilarious. Just seems like familiar with more steps other than that though. Which is good, make no mistake, but it's still just a familiar.
Regalia: Well, this is pretty good. I love the flexibility. Rainbow pimp gear on custom order!
Reprise: There's some hidden power here. My first instinct to to just use all of my Songs in order to buffer a bunch of "subtle" spells. Also, please don't forget, since you have access to Bard spells, this means that if you cast a Glyph of Warding using Song of Destiny, you can buffer a second (or third, or fourth) casting as an action. Casting Glyph as an action is potentially insane, since Glyph can be used to violate the rules of Concentration (a spell stored in a Glyph when triggered will be concentrated on by the Glyph, not you). I'd personally love this, but you may want to watch out.
I wasn't convinced at first, but looking at it as a whole, I quite like it! Just needs a few phrasing tweaks and it's legit.
Spoiler: College of Musical Theater
Musical Number: I like the idea, but required backup singers is a little off-putting. I get the idea, it's why I added Chorus bonus action to my class after all, but how exactly does it work? Does at least 1 creature need to have used the special Help action before the beginning of your next turn in order for the performance to work/continue working? Typo in exposition, "out of *reach". Can a song's effect be used every turn al long as it lasts? Phrasing is a little unclear (Though I'm one to talk...).
Soloist: I'll be honest, this feels like a bandaid for something that should be a default feature at 3rd level. Use this design space for something more interesting. Allies need their bonus actions sometimes, which is why my Chorus is optional.
Versatile Song:This is pretty spicy, and could be hilarious flavorwise. Just be aware that it basically means you can succeed at anything once per long rest.
Spoiler: Sublime Chord Monk
Welcome to the fold, fellow complexity addict . You're gonna fit right in!
Instrumentation of Body:
Usually I'm a little leery of ye olde generik Wutai interpretation, but you've done an excellent job here. I'm quite impressed at how it all fits together, how it integrates with existing features, and the Mantra-style flavor is on point.
Root Chord: Everything looks good here. What happens with Mantra of Being (and by extent, other mantras) if you don't take a short rest, though? Does it just last indefinitely?
Sacral Chord: (Muffled ORA ORA in the distance). Also, since Stunning Strike has no action cost and works in a manner similar to a Smite, does this mean that as long as you hit an attack, you can keep chaining ki and blow your entire pool in a blizzard of fists? That's crazy if so, awesome too.
Waist Chord: Solid.
Heart Chord: While I love the effect, wouldn't it be easier for Wind Dance to just say "Your movement can pass through but not end in solid objects, and you do not trigger attacks of opportunity"? Or is it intentional that you get access to the Ethereal Plane during your turn, potentially allowing you to put the hurt on something like a Phase Spider? I love having 15ft of extra reach, but what's the flavor here? Is it a sort of wind shockwave thing, an invisible ki thing, or more of a Hadouken deal? Monk with Control Weather is such an awesome image, good froggin idea.
Throat Chord: You can remove ANY condition? That's pretty crazy. So you could literally punch someone to cure them of petrification, I love it. What happens if you remove the unconscious/incapacitated condition from someone who has 0hp? Do they stand back up with 0hp? Also, despite being treated somewhat differently, exhaustion is technically a condition, so I recommend each level of exhaustion be treated as a separate condition.
Brow Chord: Echoing Moon dance looks like fun. Especially if you use the Dodge action beforehand, forcing the atack to be at disadvantage.
Crown Chord: Crown Rhythm is pretty sweet. Disadvantage on all saves and your pick of contested ability makes for a spicy ability. Does the simulacrum stick around if you attune to a different Chord? It's pretty crazy to have, I love it.
Overall, excellent work! Hope you stick around, it's really refreshing to get new participants!
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Deadly Instruments: Aka. the reason that an electric guitar is sometimes referred to as an "ax". Alternatively, a mariachi Luchador that dual wields maracas morningstars. Typo: "Simply". Looks good!
Sick Licks:...wouldn't a tool use check with an instrument you're proficient with just be a perform check? Why not just give proficiency in Performance, which becomes Expertise while raging? Otherwise, looks great! Everything checks out.
Doctor Feel Good: "For Every multiple of 10" is a weird way to acheive this result but the result and the feature are solid.
Burning Spectacle: Clunky phrasing on the spells, but a good feature. I don't know why, but I feel like having one spell choice for each element would be cool. Just spitballing though.
November Rain: Do you have to concentrate on the spells? That might be an issue if you're a frontliner.
It's very cohesive, which is important. I think it could use a little more spice though. And that whole "Tool use check" thing leaves an odd taste in my mouth. Might be a me thing though.
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Skald/Rage Song: Sweet. Instead of "Effects that will dominate" you could go with just the charmed condition, most mind control effects are riders keyed on that condition.
Battle Rage: Bardic Inspiration for damage, cool. Nice catch on the Magic Missile interaction .
Battlefield Mockery: Honestly, this is what Vicious Mockery should just be as usual. Smiting with an insult, exquisite.
Transcendent Voice: Looks great! Perfect capstone. "And not affects you as well as allies" sorry, what?
I think it comes together quite nicely! The Songs are just spicy enough, and I love the Vicious Mockery "smite".
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Also Sweet Licks: "And gain Expertise if your Charisma Modifier is 0 or less" PFFFFHAH. Good feature, love it.
Wanna See My Collection: Sleep as a rider effect is hilarious and powerful. Please tell me it takes effect after the main spell does? Because that makes me think that a Fireball converted to a Sonicball though Sorcerer Levels or the new Metamagic feat could be an amazing tool for nonlethally executing large groups. Maximizing the Sleep dice is just gravy on icing. You may want to include a clause for maximizing if the player roll a 20 on a main spell attack roll as well, just so that spell attack rolls aren't left out.
Haughty Airs: "Myeeeees, you see, as the minotaur rapper Great Johndinski once said, never sneeze on your vinyls BEFORE polishing them, but.."
Immutable "Charm": This is excellent, go out and charm those Gelatinous Cubes!
The Hidden Gem: At first I was confused, but then I read what they did to the Contagion spell and it made sense. Weird. Cool ability! I'd name it something else though, how about "Black Noise", or perhaps "Pop Trash"?
This is a pretty funny subclass, love the Sleep rider too.
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Campanologist: Does this actually do anything for Monk? I'm pretty sure History, Clubs, and Quarterstaves are all things that Monks are already proficient in.
Ki Resonation: Now this, I like. The mechanic of gaining resonance through all sorts of sources then expending it is a really cool mechanic. You could even stand to add a few more effects if you like, I love choice. And oof, the level 17 feature. It tolls for thee indeed.
Sacred Chiming: Nice, this is good. I almost want an alternative use though, that shifts in the offensive direction, summoning an adversarial spirit a la Bloodborne's bell-ringing woman.
Vibration Sensetivity: I love tremorsense. I feel like a default range of 15ft would be nicer though.
Master of Vibrations: I don't get it, the techniques that replace attacks spend all remaining VP anyway, so you wouldn't have any more VP to spend on the attack. In a sense, they only have a minimum requirement rather than a cost. Am I missing something?
I love sonic-type stuff, and this subclass is shaping up nicely. Welcome to the coolest corner of the Playground!
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Thanks for taking a look and I'm glad you like it. I made the modification to the Song of Strength, that does simplify it and make it more effective. For some reason I was thinking dominate didn't include the charmed condition.
Yup on Magic Missile, being able to add 1d10 to all your magic missiles would be a bit excessive
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I put up my own entry tonight. Kind of late in the contest. I will understand if no one critiques it but will appreciate it if they do. Should be fairly well edited. My wife and I both made several edit passes. The amount of red ink she used to point out my grammatical errors made the page look like it was bleeding.
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Excuse the lack of formatting and typos since I'm on a racket instead of the computer, but something is better than nothing.
For the healing channel divinity is that per round or at the end? Per rooms seems a little powerful, once at the end seems a little weak to me. The other channel dignity needs to mention if it's an action, bonus action, or whatever.
The aura of morale seems really, really powerful, although tempered by being only 10 feet. Maybe limits the users on our to only damage or not so many things? I don't know, just a thought.
How does the level 15 charm thing work if you attack after you attack.?
What is the action cost of song of hope?
How far away cam allies hear the song?
This seems really, really powerful, but it's level 20 so I tend to give lots off latitude on that.
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Uploaded version 3 of the pdf which contains clarifications on action cost of and area of effect of abilities.
The healing is per round. It is powerful at level 3 but is outshined by clerics and bards easily at later levels.
It is powerful. However, as an example the oath of the ancients aura gives magic resistance which is advantage on saves against spells. Advantage is equivalent to about a +4 to the roll. This ability can grant at most a +4 ( about 25% of the times it is rolled) therefore it has the potential to be equivalent to granting advantage but most of the time will be less than that. I would argue that it is less powerful than auras that grant advantage. It only seems like it is very powerful because it is versatile and grants a strict number increase to a roll which more easily quantified than advantage. It also can only be added to a roll or added to your AC once per round.
The whole point is that you haven't attacked them after charming them. If you did attack them, it would be treated the same as any other time you attack a non-hostile NPC.
Thank you for pointing out the missing action costs and area of effects. I have uploaded and linked to a new pdf with the edits included. Also yes the capstone is powerful but it takes time to build up to full power. Most combat encounters in D&D 5th edition seem like they last no longer than a minute. Assuming that first 3 or 4 rounds have gone badly enough that the paladin feels it is necessary to bring out his biggest gun the fight likely be over before it builds to its full power. Of course if they use it from the start of the battle it will likely be a curb stomp battle but I feel that capstones should be like that. After all wizards and sorcerers get access to the wish spell at those levels which when well worded can do the same. Clerics get Divine Intervention which lets them asks the literal gods to help them out. The barbarian gets unlimited rage and a boosted strength and constitution cap. The druid gets infinite HP through unlimited wild shape.Last edited by Crim the Cold; 2020-08-23 at 12:36 PM.
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Voting thread is going to be a day late; got a family birthday today. I didn't know what our plans were going to be when I made the original deadline.
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