Quote Originally Posted by Jokasti View Post
I'm working on my poem for one SMA I'm working on and would like some feedback.
The Student's Sutra of Sensation: Once, there was a guardian maiden
Who was placed on the tallest mountain
In the tallest spire
And told to watch.
"For what?" she asked.
"You will know when you see it."
She saw it, and she knew
But there was no way down anymore
The Elder's Sutra of Sensation: except for a window.
On the way down, she said,
"Life is not what you see, but what you
Looks good except for that last line. It just drops off.