Quote Originally Posted by Craft (Cheese) View Post
I think the 4.0 version flows better, but not due to any differences in tone: I wouldn't really call the 3.5 version "professional in tone", it just has a bunch of superfluous words.
I kinda agree here. The 3.5 is formatted in a more clear way, but is written in a highly legalistic manner, which gets very bad as you go on. My advise: Go simple, clear and short. And try to maintain some degree of formality, the writing is closer to an essay or instruction booklet than either a legal document or personal communication.