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First critique: Giant Wall of Text ... Good idea to space between paragraphs. This makes it difficult to read.

The land is full of jagged peaks of basalt, coal and obsidian.
Comma between "coal" and "and".

And I was right in the middle of this god-forsaken place.
If this is Forgotten Realms (like I think it is) then, "gods-forsaken". Forgotten Realms is very plural on the gods.

It wasn't always this way, however.
Their zealotry was their downfall, however.
The "however"s are not only unnecessary, but mess up the flow.

Lord Of Hell
Lord of the Nine Hells. Also, "Of" doesn't need to be capitalized.

(remember that scene from LOTR with the Ringwraths in the tavern? It was like that.)
"NO! NO! NO!"

Go away Daniel Bryan. This is my critique. Although, I agree. Outside references are okay in bio pages, and better for comedic reference in comments and critiques. They have no place in an actual story.

and the arrows I had looted numbered only 31.
have*

I tumbled about 28 feet
"About" suggests an estimate/guess. "28 feet" is too precise to be an estimate. "I tumbled 25 or 30 feet ... " would work better here. Also, you might want to spell your numbers out instead. Numbers in a sea of letters stand out.

I grabbed my shortbow and knocked an arrow.
notched*

it pawed at it's snout, drew back my feet and
Remove the comma and replace with a period. Then start the next sentence with "I".

I didn't bother chase after it,
Add "to" between bother and chase.

, I spent a few days at the town,
"in the town"

-Sariel Blackbriar.
A journal entry. Well the period after his name is then unnecessary.

Good work. Just need to really fix the "Giant Wall of Text" issue. Just press "enter" twice at the end of each paragraph and that will space things well.