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Thread: OOTS #1220 - The Discussion Thread

  1. 2020-11-30, 09:21 AM (ISO 8601) - Top - End - #213
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    Default Re: OOTS #1220 - The Discussion Thread

    Not sure if Rich noticed this, but the speech balloon in panel seven is incorrectly phrased. As a native speaker, this comes off as awkward.

    Haley says
    OK, I've got it figured it out.
    That is not quite correct.

    It's either
    OK, I've got it figured out.
    Or
    OK, I've figured it out.
    Or
    OK, I've got it. I figured it out.
    Or
    OK, I've got it - figured it out.

    Any of those passes muster. What's on the page does not quite work.

    That said, I love the sound effects and the FX in general on panel 9.
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