The Sapphire Mother

[aigiovanni]

This a Diety I am working on for a campaign I am going to be the DM for in the near future as her cult will be playing a major role in said campaign and I wanted to Hammer out any minor details from her Diety profile to her offical statistics. Any and all input is welcome and appreciated.

Deity Profile:

Neytiri
The Sapphire Mother
Lesser Deity
Symbol: A blue dragon head and wings wrapped around a smooth egg shaped sapphire
Home plane: Material Plane
Alignment: Lawful Evil
Portfolio: Conquest, Dragonkind, Destuction
Worshipers: Dragonbloods, anyone looking for acceptance.
Cleric Alignment: LN, NE, LE
Domains Evil, Dragon, Destruction, Hatred, Strength
Favored Weapon: Scythe (Claws)
Dogma:

Neytiri focuses heavily on increasing the number her worshipers, propagating War, and increasing the strength of her worshipers . She enjoys watching leaders of her cults convert more people, and slowly turn its them into soldiers in order to take over a kingdom or country. Neytiri constantly seeks to extend the power and dominion of her worshipers in areas where people are being oppressed or have lived to long in peace.

Clergy:

Cleric’s of Neytiri are constantly looking for new converts to worship their “mother”, and of dragon kind and have a real soldier mentality.

Despite her youth as a deity Neytiri has earned a few allies in the form or Kord, and Hextor. She would also like to consider Tiamat an ally but there has yet to be an official alliance between the two. Neytiri’s biggest enemies are Bahamut, and Tamara due to clashing interest, and desires. While neither an ally or a enemy Neytiri respects Io, and in on surprisingly friendly terms with the ninefold dragon, and his messenger Aasterinian.

Quest:

Quest of the Sapphire mother always involve either her worshipers or war. This can be something like saving one of her captured clerics from being executed & escorting said cleric to safety or joining an army and fighting in a newly declared war.

Prayers:

Prayers to Neytiri as simple and two the point she expects her worshipers to actually speak to her instead of just requesting something of her. A typical prayer to Neytiri beings with “Hello my great mother it is I your child ‘insert name‘.” usually followed by hoping she is well, and telling her what you have done in her name recently. Only at the end of ones prayer does one ask her for the strength to continue serving her properly.

Temples:

Temples of Neytiri though few in number still vary greatly from very simple such as a sapphire alter in a cave to incredibly complex such as a large building built entirely out of sapphire into the side of a mountain. Her primary temple is located in the center of a desert carved into the inside of a mountain made entirely out of sapphire that is surrounded by a large cluster of big Oasis’s.

Rites:

Followers of Tamara conduct rites in the form of war games, and large extravagant parties in honor of a victory on behalf of the cult that last for days. Any night where a blue moon is in the sky is considered sacred to the Sapphire cult, and on these days a large bonfire is lit and ground up sapphire powder is thrown into the flame causing it to take on a blue color and is constantly fed so it burns through out the night.

Heralds and Allies:

Neytiri’s Heralds consist of her five children who reside in the Primary temple. Her sons consist of a level 20 Half Blue Dragon Human warblade, a level 20 Half Blue Dragon Dwarf Cleric/Dracolyte, a level 20 Half Blue Dragon human swordsage, and her daughters consist of a level 20 Half Blue dragon Elf Sorcerer, and a level 20 Half Blue Dragon Human Ranger.

[aigiovanni]

Diety Statistics:

Character: Neytiri Vorel Vrak
Cult Title: The Sapphire Mother
Racial Hit dice: 30 Dragon
Class Levels: 12 Dragon Ascendant
Race: Blue Dragon
Alignment: Lawful Evil
Deity: N/A
Size: Huge
Age Category: Very Old (700)
Gender: Female
Height: 55 fet
Weight: 20,000 lbs
Eyes: Golden
Scales: Azure
Speed: Ground: 40 Feet/Burrow: 20 Feet/Fly: 150 feet (Average)
HP: 1000
Stats:
Strength: 34 (12)
Dexterity: 10 (0)
Constitution: 28 (9)
Intelligence: 18 (4)
Wisdom: 20 (5)
Charisma: 18 (4)
Armor Class: Total = 10 + Armor Mod + Shield Mod + Dex Mod + Size Mod + Natural Armor + Deflection Mod + Misc Mod
AC Total: 41 = 10 + 0 + 0 + 0 - 2 + 29 + 4 + 0
Touch: 12
Flat Footed: 41
Initiative: 0 = 0 + 0
Damage Reduction: 20/epic
Spell Resistance: 33
Saving Throws: Total = Base Save + Ability Modifier + Magic Modifier + Misc Modifier + Temp Modifier
Fortitude: 33 = 22 + 9 + 0 + 2
Reflex: 24 = 22 + 0 + 0 + 2
Will: 29 = 22 + 5 + 0 + 2
Base Attack Bonus: 42
Grapple: Total = Base Attack Bonus + Strength Modifier + Size Modifier + Misc Modifier
Grapple Total: 62 = 42 + 12 + 8 + 0

Feats:
Draconic Knowledge
Fast Healing
Great Fortitude
Improved Speed
Iron Will
Lightning Reflexes
Fly By Attack
Hover
Power Attack
Cleave
Great Cleave
Improved Critical
Weapon Focus
-Claws
Overwhelming Critical
Devastating Critical
Improved Maneuverability
Shape Breath
Spreading Breath
Extend Spreading Breath

Special Abilities:
Breath Weapon
Frightful Presence 270 feet
Create/Destroy Water 3/Day
Sounds Imitation
Ventriloquism 3/Day
Hallucinatory Terrain 1/Day
Keen Senses
-Dark Vision 120 feet
-Low-Light Vision
-Blind Sense 60 feet
Alternate Form - At Will
Awesome Aura 270 Feet
Immune
-Electricity
-Sleep
-Paralysis
-Transmutation
-Energy Drain
-Ability Drain
-Ability Damage
-Mind Affecting Effect
Resistance 20
-Fire
Immortality

Spells: Same as an 11th level Sorcerer & Cleric

Skills: Total = Ability Modifier + Ranks + Misc Mod
Max Ranks: 43/21
Skill Points: 430/430

Bluff: 40 = 4 +36 + 0
Concentration: 40 = 9 + 31 + 0
Diplomacy: 40 = 4 + 36 + 0
Heal: 40 = 5 + 35 + 0
Hide: 40 = 0 + 40 + 0
Knowledge Arcane: 40 = 4 + 36 + 0
Knowledge Religion 40: = 4 + 36 + 0
Listen: 40 = 5 + 35 + 0
Sense Motive: 40 = 4 + 36 + 0
Spellcraft: 40 = 4 + 36 + 0
Spot: 42 = 5 + 37 + 0
Use Magic Device: 40 = 4 + 36 + 0

Languages:
Common
Draconic
Elven
Celestial
Abyssal
Infernal

Humanoid Form:

While Neytiri can alter her physical appearance to look like any animal or humanoid of her choosing she prefers to take on the appearance of a tall elven woman with blue skin, long black hair that falls to her mid back, and large golden eyes. While in this form her body is often dotted with tiny bioluminescent spots on her back, and face similar to freckles, and tiger stripe like patches of skin that are a darker shade than the rest of her skin. Her physical structure while sleek and slender look if one where to look close they would see the hard toned muscles under her skin.

[DracoDei]

I recommend editing the first post of the thread to change the title of the post, and thus the thread to be "[3.5] [Diety] The Sapphire Mother [P.E.A.C.H.]". This will let people know what is in the thread. This, in turn will increase the number of people who will read it, and may choose to respond.

P.E.A.C.H. stands for Please Examine And Critique Honestly, and is to let people that not only are you looking for help, you also are going to be mature about how you take it.

You also seem to have more than the average frequency of English errors, which will also turn potential reviewers off. I would send at least that part of this by PM, but my mailbox is constantly overflowing.

This a Diety I am working on for a campaign I am going to be the DM for in the near future as her cult will be playing a major role in said campaign and I wanted to Hammer

Shouldn't be capitalized.

out any minor details from her Diety profile to her offical

official

Neytiri constantly seeks to extend the power and dominion of her worshipers in areas where people are being oppressed or have lived to long in peace.

too long

Clergy:

Cleric’s of Neytiri are constantly looking for new converts to worship their “mother”, and of dragon kind

This last phrase makes no sense in context.

and have a real soldier mentality.

Despite her youth as a deity Neytiri has earned a few allies in the form or Kord, and Hextor.

Why would Kord be her ally? They have diametrically opposed alignments I think.

She would also like to consider Tiamat an ally but there has yet to be an official alliance between the two. Neytiri’s biggest enemies are Bahamut, and Tamara due to clashing interest,

interests

and desires. While neither an ally or a enemy Neytiri respects Io, and in

is

on surprisingly friendly terms with the ninefold dragon, and his messenger Aasterinian.

Quest:

Quests

Quest of

Quests for

the Sapphire mother always involve either her worshipers or war.
Prayers:

Prayers to Neytiri as simple and two the point

are simple and to the point

she expects her worshipers to actually speak to her instead of just requesting something of her.

This needs at least a comma before it, and maybe the word "but". It seems to be in contrast with the previous statement about being simple an to the point.

A typical prayer to Neytiri beings with “Hello my great mother it is I your child ‘insert name‘.” usually followed by hoping she is well,

Goddesses get sick and such often enough to notice?

Temples:

Temples of Neytiri though few in number still

Temples of Neytiri are few in number and

vary greatly from very simple such as a sapphire alter in a cave

A sapphire encrusted altar (note spelling) is hardly my idea of "simple" let alone one make entirely of it.

to incredibly complex such as a large building built entirely out of sapphire into the side of a mountain. Her primary temple is located in the center of a desert carved into the inside of a mountain made entirely out of sapphire that is surrounded by a large cluster of big Oasis’s.

REALLY expensive temples. Does that mean the walls are transparent and people can see in and out? Does it end up very hot due to greenhouse effect? I don't know if sapphire has the right reflection/absorption/transmission spectra to produce a greenhouse effect.

Rites:
Any night where a blue moon is in the sky is considered sacred to the Sapphire cult, and on these days a large bonfire is lit and ground up sapphire powder is thrown into the flame causing it to take on a blue color and is constantly fed so it burns through out the night.

I'm not 100% sure, but I don't think this makes sense from a chemistry POV. Maybe it is magic(or near-magic... specially alchemical altered gems?), or maybe it actually works that way in your setting.

Heralds and Allies:

Neytiri’s Heralds consist of her five children who reside in the Primary temple. Her sons consist of a level 20 Half Blue Dragon Human warblade, a level 20 Half Blue Dragon Dwarf Cleric/Dracolyte, a level 20 Half Blue Dragon human swordsage, and her daughters consist of a level 20 Half Blue dragon Elf Sorcerer, and a level 20 Half Blue Dragon Human Ranger.

Just for variety, it might be better to give some variation in their class levels. In any case you should specify how many levels of each class the multi-classed ones have.

Consider looking up Divine Ranks at www.d20srd.org and using them.