GITP Monster Competition Chat Thread

[The Vorpal Tribble]

Have sent critiquing messages to all those who've entered so far.

[belboz]

The Man o'War (minus plot hook) has been submitted. Comments are, as always, much appreciated.

[levi]

Ok, I posted the Nudibranchae on the contest thread. They're mostly complete and ready for commentary, but still have some minor things to work out. The main statistics, description, combat tactics, and backstory are up. I haven't posted some ancillary details, such as thier religion, livestock, equipment, and a nice picture I drew of them.

Yes, the back story starts out as the usual "A wizard did it." and proceeds to turn into a retooling of Exodus. This wasn't entirely planned. While I was originally planning a violent slave revolt, followed by a hasty escape through the Astral Plane, I eventually went with something a little different (and rather longer). You see, once I started writing it, I was trying to think of a good reason for a race bread specifially for slavery would revolt. Eventually I decided to us the ol' dues ex machina of divine inspiration. (This was a good thing as it got me thinking about thier religion, which I'd forgotten about.)

Which was when it hit me, here you have a slave race with a prophet seeking to free her people, just like Moses in Exodus. So I decided to embrace the idea and as I wrote the ending, I intentionally copied the structure of Exodus. Hooray for archetype myth! An interesting side effect of this is that I had already planned to have them enter the Astral Plane at some point in thier history (they had Gith as bonus language from the begining), but now it fits nicely into the mythology I constructed. Funny how things work out sometimes.

Anyhoo, please give it a look over and tell me what you think. Thanks in advance.

[Hyrael]

Ah, a melding of D&D's two unliving creature types: constructs and undead. There's already alot of overlap between these two types, and the resulting style is just plain cool/creepy.

While I know there is only 1 entry/person, I intend to make three distinct varieteis of Graveforged constructs. Is this OK? after all, the Man'o'War entry technicaly contains two creatures.

The GraveForged Constructs grew out of a minor plot hook in DragonMarked, in the section on Cannith East. I made them world-specific, but I might change that, and just add specific eberron information as a separate paragraph. The Graveforged Constructs are also loosely based on MTG's Phyrexians, at least the undeady ones (phyrexians are pretty diverse).

[Fax Celestis]

Spideer are done!

[kuja.girl]

New entry added: Flent
a creature, that would make a good familiar, that combines traits of a rat and a raven.

pretty illustration added for your pleasure.

[Deus Mortus]

Still working on my strange creature, any comments are welcome since this is the first time I'm doing this.

[The Vorpal Tribble]

1 more hour to get your votes in for last month's Champions of Good contest.

These are all that I've been sent...

Anamnesis - |
Fergaast - ||
Golden Flame of Pelor - |
Name and the soul - |
Repenter of Heironeos - |
Windsider - |

[Phoenix Talion]

Mm. I'm going to drag the mutialted corpse of my entry into it's own thread for fine tuning.

[The Vorpal Tribble]

Well, I suppose I'll be calling the Fergaast the winner. Have recieved no more votes since the above.

Hopefully a poll will be possible with the current competition.

[Khantalas]

Who voted for me? I want to know!

[Fax Celestis]

That'd be me.

[Khantalas]

Woo! Fax is my hero! That must be known by all!

Cookies for Fax!

[The Vorpal Tribble]

My vote went to the Anamnesis. Loved everything about the critter.

[Khantalas]

I voted for Fergaast. The quote and the picture just won me over.

[Fax Celestis]

I am saddened that the Divine Spark of Inspiration wasn't voted for, but it's understandable. It was interesting, but not terribly unique.

[Phoenix Talion]

I voted for Fergaast. I liked the idea of good critters that were kinda ucky-looking.

[palcosmo]

So the fergaast did well because he was sardonic and nightmarishly ugly?

Awesome.

Thanks for the votes Khantalas and Phoenix! I really appreciate it. Especially after a lousy week. (The cookies are in the mail.) And thanks to everyone for a good contest.

Regarding the current contest: Dang, are there already more entries for 'A Wizard Did It' than 'Champions of Good'?

[Phoenix Talion]

Yep. :)

And 'cause the picture reminded me a little bit of Marvin.

[kuja.girl]

Anyone have any comments or suggestions for my entry into "A Wizard did it?" [#13] It's my first contest entry here, so I'd love to get some input back.

[The Vorpal Tribble]

I'll be going through all entries tomorrow and giving feedback.

[The Vorpal Tribble]

Everyone but Khant and Deus Mortus have been messaged to. Khant's isn't done and I'm going to have to take some medication before I begin Deus'.

[belboz]

I've got a specific request for advice/opinions about the Man o'War. Should it be a colonial entity, like a real man o'war, with an emergent intelligence and shared metabolism (as it's described now), or should the float actually be the command-and-control center of a single, unified, creature? If I did the latter, I'd take away the "homogeneous anatomy" Ex ability (i.e., the immunity to criticals). It does seem...weird (even in a magical universe) that the creature talks, manipulates, and propels itself using what is, essentially, a sack of fluid and gasses.

Thoughts?

Thanks much.

[The Demented One]

I've put my Lovecraft-monkey up on the AWDI contest.

[The Vorpal Tribble]

Everyone should now be messaged. 2 more days to go, folks...

[The Great Skenardo]

Added a little sketch of a Wupperhin marching band.

[ajkkjjk52]

Everyone should now be messaged. 2 more days to go, folks...

Um. I haven't been. Is this a problem? This is my first entry, so I don't know if I should have been messaged.

[The Vorpal Tribble]

Um. I haven't been. Is this a problem? This is my first entry, so I don't know if I should have been messaged.

You sure? I remember going through your entry and sending something... if you can't find it will look through it again.

[Single Shot Zombie]

Submitted a monster, having gotten inspiration for it just a few hours back. A cookie to whoever guesses which author's work the idea came from.

Hope I'm not too late. :P

(EDIT: Make that a whole platter; the reference is kinda obscure.)

[Calver]

The Zodiacal Hydra has at long last made its entry among the most fearsome and ridiculous beasts ever to threaten the material plane!

Many thanks to The Escapist for his input and suggestions (though I ignored a couple of them ) as well as the pending picture of this horrific beast.