PEACH Exchange

[TuggyNE]

So, I resurrected one of my older homebrews to see if I could garner some critiques: Persevering Spell metamagic. Also, Equalization is new and has no comments.

Gonna try to run through the Legionary and Telekineticist.

[Plato Play-Doh]

I've peached persevering spell. I would like to have the noble in my signature peached.

[Maquise]

Given the Noble class a lookover, made a suggestion.

Would like some ideas on how to turn the Psychanuan Drone into a more powerful melee variant.

[Jeff the Green]

Okay, I've PEACHed Vita Dominus, Persevering Spell, Equalization, and the Psychanuan.

I'd appreciate it if anyone would PEACH the theurge triptych of Twice-Bound Soul, Inspired Inventor, and/or Nightwearer, in my signature. Particularly the first two, since I'm having trouble with certain parts of those (see the author note at the top).

[DracoDei]

Alright, new class guys. Will someone please PEACH my Vita Dominus class?

I am in the process of reviewing this. Have posted, edited in more, and plan to post/edit in more.

. Also, Equalization is new and has no comments.

I PEACHED this.


I could use PEACH of my low-angst, non-evil, low LA vampire variant template, the Eripmav. Yes, I know the name is cheesy, but there is a very good reason I am using it. Not that I couldn't be talked into changing it for D&D purposes, but I did justify it.

There have been comments on this thread, but next to nothing that actually said anything about the template itself, other than something that was more about my homebrewing style in general (and which I provided a fix for) than to do with the template itself.

Going to go ahead and bump it...

[Maquise]

Peached Inspired Inventor. Would like a PEACH of my finished Psychanuan Warrior.

[Plato Play-Doh]

Done with the Noble. It would be nice to get the system in my signature PEACHed.

[Belial_the_Leveler]

PEACHed:
Concentration Metamagic, Deep fey, Equalization, Persevering Spell.

Requesting PEACH:
Greater Succubus; http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=274619

[Tesla]

Just posted in the Inspired Inventor thread, and Plato's system thread.

I could use some critique on the Zealous Scholar.

Thank you very much.

[Belial_the_Leveler]

Seeing as I'm not seeing any PEACH on the Greater Succubus, I am requestiong PEACH for the Generic Fighter:
http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=274874

[Grindle]

Will someone PEACH the redone version of the Detective?

[Jeff the Green]

Seeing as I'm not seeing any PEACH on the Greater Succubus, I am requestiong PEACH for the Generic Fighter:
http://www.giantitp.com/forums/showthread.php?t=274874

Be patient, it's only been a few days. As soon as I have time (tomorrow?) I'm going to go through and PEACH most of the things that have been posted since I did last and request more PEACHes of my own.

[DracoDei]

Just so nobody thinks I am falling down on my share of things, I will quote the end of a series of PMs I had with Gnomes2169 today.

Don't particularly need you to PEACH the rest, but I do appreciate what you have done. You are actually rather good at critiquing others' creations, and I found your advice rather helpful, I just seriously don't have time to work on it right now.

I'll be sure to shoot you a message when I get around to editing things, in case you still want to see version 2.0.

Admittedly it did take me a while to start this series of PMs after I had posted a partial PEACH, but I didn't want to triple-post and several other people have already PEACHed it by the time I got there.

[Jeff the Green]

I PEACHed the Psychanauan Warrior, the Detective, and the Zealous Scholar. I'm still looking on input on the three theurges in my signature, but as the Nightwearer hasn't seen any love (and I'm in the middle of revising the other two based on feedback), that's the specific one I'd like to see PEACHed.

(Oh, and if you PEACHed me and I didn't return the favor, PM me or mention it in your next request; I've been a little scatterbrained lately.)

[Empedocles]

Anyone for my proteus? Working on any homebrew right now would really help me kickstart the creative process a bit. Willing to PEACH whatever you need feedback on.

[DracoDei]

I'd PEACH the Nightwearer, but I don't feel I know enough about incarnum.

[Empedocles]

Will someone PEACH the redone version of the Detective?

Peached! I'd appreciate feedback on my proteus though

[Jeff the Green]

I did the Proteus, hopefully it helps. If you feel like it, the nightwearer in my sig could use some attention.

[Maquise]

I would help with Nightwearer, but I don't know anything about incarnum.

[Nightgaun7]

Working on the Bladesinger.

I'd be happy to take a look at other people's stuff, but I fear I'm not experienced enough to give a whole lot of feedback of my own.

[Waker]

I'm still looking on input on the three theurges in my signature, but as the Nightwearer hasn't seen any love (and I'm in the middle of revising the other two based on feedback), that's the specific one I'd like to see PEACHed.

Made a few suggestions for your Inventor and Nightwearer. Wouldn't object to you taking a peak at my Mage Scholar, link in my signature.

[DracoDei]

Still at Con, but on laptop for once.

Checking in to say that I got some P.E.A.C.H. going on the Eripmav, independent of this thread.

More would be welcome of course.

[anacalgion]

Peach my Shadowlord? Its my first bit of homebrew, so all ideas are appreciated. I'll peach anything people want me to, but it might take me a bit to get around to it.

[Maquise]

PEACHED Proteus, Shadowlord. Looked at Bladesinger.

Just posted the last of the psychanuan. Probably needs the most work done.

[bobthe6th]

Peach my Shadowlord? Its my first bit of homebrew, so all ideas are appreciated. I'll peach anything people want me to, but it might take me a bit to get around to it.

Done. Mind PEACHing the Razor?

[anacalgion]

Not at all. Let me fix up what you mentioned and then I'll get right on it.

[DracoDei]

Going to post something I said in a PM to someone who was requesting PEACH from me, but said that he didn't know enough about either PEACHing, or Homebrew/balance/enjoyability to PEACH in return.

If your problem is NOT (or not ONLY) with discerning game balance/playability in the work of others, here is something that may help. For ideas on discerning balance, look in the "Formerly Stickied Threads" thread of the homebrew forum, and look for the "How to Homebrew" and "Philosophy of Homebrewing"... plus read a lot of Homebrew threads and/or balance discussions in the other areas of the forum.

My general advice for giving PEACH:
Consider carefully whether to read other people's comments (if any) before critiquing. A completely fresh perspective can help, but so can considering the ideas of others.


Be specific as you can afford the time to be. List specific abilities at least, and maybe go through and quote each part you are commenting on, or even the specific phrases.

Being specific has two main parts to it, what you say, and where you direct it.

First part: For instance, try to avoid simply saying something is overpowered. Give a reason it is overpowered, and if necessary, a specific example from play that you make up (or from actual play-test data if you do that). Also, whenever you say something needs to be changed, it is EVEN BETTER to be specific about how it should be changed. For instance, a lot of times people say my work needs to be "clarified". Which is something I can't usually do (maybe short of adding a play example, but that adds a LOT of words). I write things as clearly as I know how the first time. Which brings me to a side-point: People also say I should "simplify" things. Sometimes this falls under "clarify" (see previous sentence), but sometimes it is just something I am flat-out not willing to do, except MAYBE as a separate version of the homebrew. The lesson for critiquers here is to be at peace with having your advice rejected.


The second part: Be specific about what part you are critiquing with each thing that you say by quoting the post with the work in it, then closing the quotation right after the first part you want to comment on, then hitting enter twice, and pasting in the FULL opening quotation (or just opening it without a reference in the forum code if you are feeling really lazy). Then copy the closing, blank line, and opening. Keep this in your copy buffer as much as possible so you can insert it where necessary before starting each of your individual comments. Use those blank lines to start each comment. Delete any parts that are at least a paragraph (or three sentences) long of the stuff you are quoting that aren't necessary for other people to understand your quotes. If you do this in the middle of a quote, replace the missing part with <SNIP> which is NOT a forum code, but just lets people know that you removed stuff.


Lastly, really good critique should be a several part dialogue. The original work and the initial critique will usually be the longest parts, but check back occasionally to see if anything was said about your critique.

Should I post this in its own thread?

[Maquise]

Been a couple days, and I haven't heard anything yet on my Hive Master.

[Nightgaun7]

Been a couple days, and I haven't heard anything yet on my Hive Master.

I took a look and posted my thoughts.

Did you have any thoughts on the Bladesinger when you looked at it? I made some revisions, and I'm working on some more now.

[Waker]

Did you have any thoughts on the Bladesinger when you looked at it? I made some revisions, and I'm working on some more now.

Critiqued your Bladesinger. Wouldn't object to someone taking a peek at either my Meister or Mage Scholar. Preferably my Meister.